Betrayal
Difficult recovery from betrayal58 total reviews
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Betrayal", is an extremely well-written and thought-provoking piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll keep reading.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017
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"Betrayal", is an extremely well-written and thought-provoking piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll keep reading.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017
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Thank you, duchess. Linda
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Linda, you're very welcome.
Best wishes and bless you the Duchess
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Betrayal, seems to reveal a deeper pain than can be seen by friends or understood even by ourselves. There is a core death that requires time and patient perspective to rise back from.
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This poem, Betrayal, seems to reveal a deeper pain than can be seen by friends or understood even by ourselves. There is a core death that requires time and patient perspective to rise back from.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017
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Bill: you are correct. I never thought of it as a "core death" but it makes sense. I'm rising slowly out of the ashes and will carry on. Thanks for reading and commenting. livelylinda
Comment from Irish Rain
I think it's always harder, as we get older. Because we not only lose everything we thought we had, we lose the very will to even try again. If this is you, bless you honey. Believe me, it may not feel like it now, but you're so much better off!! Prayers, and blessings...
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017
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I think it's always harder, as we get older. Because we not only lose everything we thought we had, we lose the very will to even try again. If this is you, bless you honey. Believe me, it may not feel like it now, but you're so much better off!! Prayers, and blessings...
Comment Written 11-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017
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Irish Rain: yes, I am totally convinced that I am better off. I have picked myself back up and have begun dusting myself off. Rather I can ever trust anyone again, I don't know. I will be 69 years of age in a couple weeks and don't think I want to even try. Thanks for reading and sharing your thoughts with me. Linda
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I hear you...don't dwell on the bad, sad and ugly...just say 'hey, it was an experience' and enjoy your life...I'm 59...you're braver than me, because I love my husband to death...but if I'm ever single again...I'm staying there....men are too much WORK, ha ha
Comment from write hand blue
Sounds like you are having a hard time. The silent suffering is well expressed by your careful choice of words. I wonder what the significance of the red back ground is. I hope things work out for you...
~Mel~
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Sounds like you are having a hard time. The silent suffering is well expressed by your careful choice of words. I wonder what the significance of the red back ground is. I hope things work out for you...
~Mel~
Comment Written 11-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Mel: when I post a poem and choose the right picture, I set the colors to match the colors of the picture. The red background has no other significance. Thank you for reading and commenting. I left the relationship five weeks ago and it is a great relief. Thanks for reading. Linda
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I wish you well for the future...
Comment from dragonpoet
This shows how long a betrayal can affect someone. They may stay as alone as the word is in this poem for a long time before trusting again.
It seems a little jumpy. Maybe it needs more punctuation. Maybe a period after fall and a line space.
I don't think you need the 'but' or the 'and'.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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This shows how long a betrayal can affect someone. They may stay as alone as the word is in this poem for a long time before trusting again.
It seems a little jumpy. Maybe it needs more punctuation. Maybe a period after fall and a line space.
I don't think you need the 'but' or the 'and'.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Thank you for reading and offering suggestion. I'll take a look at them. livelylinda
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Linda,
Your well chosen words tell of the pain you have endured. You are right, recovery will happen. But it takes time as you have written. The image is a good choice. Thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Linda,
Your well chosen words tell of the pain you have endured. You are right, recovery will happen. But it takes time as you have written. The image is a good choice. Thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 11-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Thank you, Jan, for reading and commenting. livelylinda
Comment from Bill O'Bier
Hello Linda:
A great poem, and so sorry you're sad. I don't think breakups are ever easy for anybody. Basically, a bad breakup is never meant to teach you 'I'll never fall in love again.' It's meant to teach you 'Now I better know what makes for healthful, happy love - and thanks to this breakup I'm now better able to recognize it.
Bill~
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Hello Linda:
A great poem, and so sorry you're sad. I don't think breakups are ever easy for anybody. Basically, a bad breakup is never meant to teach you 'I'll never fall in love again.' It's meant to teach you 'Now I better know what makes for healthful, happy love - and thanks to this breakup I'm now better able to recognize it.
Bill~
Comment Written 11-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Bill: you are right on with your advice. Thanks for reading. livelylinda
Comment from jusylee72
I'm not sure I understand the connection with the words and the picture in this one. The picture seems upbeat, dancing laughing, lots of people. The poem fills devasting and hard to recover from. The words are good. Hmmm.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2017
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I'm not sure I understand the connection with the words and the picture in this one. The picture seems upbeat, dancing laughing, lots of people. The poem fills devasting and hard to recover from. The words are good. Hmmm.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2017
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jusylee72: the name of the picture is "Lies and Betrayal". I don't understand it either cause it looks like a celebration. Some day when I'm bored, I may change the picture. Thanks for reading and sharing your confusion with me. livelylinda
Comment from Eternal Muse
Betrayal is the hardest thing to live through. Some never do. You put your trust in somebody, and often, take it for granted. And when the trust is broken, it's like someone stuck a knife in your back. The problem is, it makes it harder for you to trust people afterwards. And if we don't have trust, how can we live? The sky forever turns gray.
I don't know the specifics, but analyzing it from my perspective. Every case is different of course.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2017
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Betrayal is the hardest thing to live through. Some never do. You put your trust in somebody, and often, take it for granted. And when the trust is broken, it's like someone stuck a knife in your back. The problem is, it makes it harder for you to trust people afterwards. And if we don't have trust, how can we live? The sky forever turns gray.
I don't know the specifics, but analyzing it from my perspective. Every case is different of course.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2017
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Lies from the beginning which increased throughout the nine months. I escaped. Thanks for reading and commenting. livelylinda
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I am glad you escaped. I don't know the extent of the damage, but the fact that you did escape is a great thing.
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
I like the picture this poem paints, it is kind of fresh. You stitched in plenty of strong images, and that made for food for thought. The tone of the voice is solemn but the meter is upbeat, so I think the form makes for a good read......
Mitchell
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2017
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I like the picture this poem paints, it is kind of fresh. You stitched in plenty of strong images, and that made for food for thought. The tone of the voice is solemn but the meter is upbeat, so I think the form makes for a good read......
Mitchell
Comment Written 11-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2017
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Thank you, Mitchell, for sharing your thoughts with me. livelylinda
