Haiku Club Challenges, Book II
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "haiku (silver waves)"an anthology of haiku written by fanstory poets
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Comment from lalajovanoski
Hello my dear friend, I very much enjoyed reading this beautifully written Haiku. I think that the content is excellent and the structure is very soft and smooth flowing. I love the descriptive words that you use it really paints a vivid picture. Hard to do in such short parameters. Thank you so much for sharing this you are an amazing writer. God bless you. With love, Lola
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Hello my dear friend, I very much enjoyed reading this beautifully written Haiku. I think that the content is excellent and the structure is very soft and smooth flowing. I love the descriptive words that you use it really paints a vivid picture. Hard to do in such short parameters. Thank you so much for sharing this you are an amazing writer. God bless you. With love, Lola
Comment Written 18-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my haiku. Have a nice day :)
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
This is a very good Haiku.
In just three short lines, you've penned a masterpiece.
I especially like the first line: 'silver waves'- Instead of white or clear, you chose silver.
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Thanks for sharing your poetry.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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This is a very good Haiku.
In just three short lines, you've penned a masterpiece.
I especially like the first line: 'silver waves'- Instead of white or clear, you chose silver.
Artwork: No image shown. The color of font blends in well with the background selected.
Thanks for sharing your poetry.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
Comment Written 18-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my haiku. Have a nice day :)
Gypsy
Comment from jusylee72
You are such an expert at this form of poetry. It seems to come easily to you in all that I have read of yours. Does it come easily to you or do you edit it for a long time? Just curious, I think it is hard to write.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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You are such an expert at this form of poetry. It seems to come easily to you in all that I have read of yours. Does it come easily to you or do you edit it for a long time? Just curious, I think it is hard to write.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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It comes easy... most of the time. I don't edit for a long time. With haiku is mostly intuitive writing. Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my haiku. Have a nice day :)
Gypsy
Comment from royowen
I like the way you've taken a strong poetic form,
and expressed in the most emphatic way of
interpreting the light dancing on water,
and taken it into great mind language.
Well done Gypsy, excellent job. Blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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I like the way you've taken a strong poetic form,
and expressed in the most emphatic way of
interpreting the light dancing on water,
and taken it into great mind language.
Well done Gypsy, excellent job. Blessings, Roy
Comment Written 18-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my haiku. Have a nice day :)
Gypsy
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You too Gypsy
Comment from Rasmine
Hello, Gypsy, :)
Yes, it is beautiful. We have a river here and I love seeing the rocks jut out and the sun sparkling off the water. :)
Have a great rest of the week!! :)
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Hello, Gypsy, :)
Yes, it is beautiful. We have a river here and I love seeing the rocks jut out and the sun sparkling off the water. :)
Have a great rest of the week!! :)
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Comment Written 18-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my haiku. Have a nice day :)
Gypsy
Comment from Dean Kuch
Great balance and vividly portrayed imagery is what makes this haiku work so well for me, MariVal.
I could picture the gentle lapping of silvery waves as they washed ashore, a bright, surf board shaped reflection cutting through the middle.
I won't go into the particulars of mechanics such as satori, or kigo. You already know those better than most here.
Awesome haiku, darlin'. Thanks for sharing...
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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Great balance and vividly portrayed imagery is what makes this haiku work so well for me, MariVal.
I could picture the gentle lapping of silvery waves as they washed ashore, a bright, surf board shaped reflection cutting through the middle.
I won't go into the particulars of mechanics such as satori, or kigo. You already know those better than most here.
Awesome haiku, darlin'. Thanks for sharing...
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Comment Written 18-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the excellent review, Darlin', your kind words and valuable assessment are my six. Thank you very much.
Gypsy hugs
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hahaha... I like that little guy, thank you
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You're more 'n' welcome, darlin' ;)
