Legend of Timpanogos
Myth of the Mountain30 total reviews
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
What a stunning write and so well presented. This is stunning, amazing and a work of true quality.I read this twice, the rhymes are amazing and the story fascinating. and will bookcase it, gave shivers, in the last stanza, loved so much, kind regards Meia :)
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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What a stunning write and so well presented. This is stunning, amazing and a work of true quality.I read this twice, the rhymes are amazing and the story fascinating. and will bookcase it, gave shivers, in the last stanza, loved so much, kind regards Meia :)
Comment Written 13-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Hi Meia,
Wow. I am complimented that you read it twice. I was worried that being so long no one would stick with it to the end so I find that statement very complimentary. Thank you. Thank you will bookcase it--who could ask for more. THANK YOU!
Comment from Chrissy710
Oh where is a six when I need one can I give you two fives for 10 out of 10. What a fabulous read and you had me captivated and hoping for a happy ending but knowing all along it would be a sad one, Your rhyme and meter was excellent and I enjoyed this very much .Well done and more Congratulations on a superb post.Thanksfor sharing this legend story with us and good luck in the contest. A sure winner Cheers Christine
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Oh where is a six when I need one can I give you two fives for 10 out of 10. What a fabulous read and you had me captivated and hoping for a happy ending but knowing all along it would be a sad one, Your rhyme and meter was excellent and I enjoyed this very much .Well done and more Congratulations on a superb post.Thanksfor sharing this legend story with us and good luck in the contest. A sure winner Cheers Christine
Comment Written 13-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Hi Christine,
Thank you for the virtual six stars. Your brightened my day. I appreciate the kind comments and am pleased that you enjoyed the legend. Thank you for the good luck wishes. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written legendary poem. A maiden willing to sacrifice herself to let her people flourish, saved by a brave man pretending to be the god, but the jealous mountain god took what belongs to him.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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A very well-written legendary poem. A maiden willing to sacrifice herself to let her people flourish, saved by a brave man pretending to be the god, but the jealous mountain god took what belongs to him.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the kind comments and analysis of the story. I appreciate you taking time to read and review.
Comment from Nika2016
I just gave my last six but this is such a fantastic retelling of the myth...I was there every step of the way...A very beautiful sad tale of love..loss..and sacrifice. Such nice work...why we are here..writing...
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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I just gave my last six but this is such a fantastic retelling of the myth...I was there every step of the way...A very beautiful sad tale of love..loss..and sacrifice. Such nice work...why we are here..writing...
Comment Written 13-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the virtual six stars. They are appreciated as are your kind and encouraging comments.
Comment from oliver818
I enjoyed your great poem! The imagery is beautiful and the story that is given is intriguing. Thanks for sharing, good luck with the competition and have a great day
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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I enjoyed your great poem! The imagery is beautiful and the story that is given is intriguing. Thanks for sharing, good luck with the competition and have a great day
Comment Written 13-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the kind comments and the good luck wishes. Much appreciated.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fabulous epic interesting poem of Indian legend, I am being educated here and enjoyed the mythical mountain tale. Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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A fabulous epic interesting poem of Indian legend, I am being educated here and enjoyed the mythical mountain tale. Love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Hi Dolly,
Thank you for the kind comments. I am so pleased to hear you enjoyed reading this poem.
Comment from GWinterwin
Thanks for your notes about this poem. Great job of telling the story with good word flow, and rhyming. Very interesting story about this maiden and what she thought was the god of the mountain.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Thanks for your notes about this poem. Great job of telling the story with good word flow, and rhyming. Very interesting story about this maiden and what she thought was the god of the mountain.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Thank you for your analysis of the poem and the kind comments. Much appreciated.
Comment from Thal1959
Very well written, though I am not partial to romantic works, this one is a very creative piece; though I have never heard of an Indian brave with green eyes! But that is OK, after all, my poem that I will post on Sunday, has a 10 years old trekking through Finland and Norway! Not likely, either. lol.
But there is only a few places where the rhythm wavers, but that is also acceptable with a poem of length. In fact, if my poem does not win the "Write a Poem of Length" contest, which I created, I hope yours does. I don't mind losing to a quality work. Thanks for posting.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Very well written, though I am not partial to romantic works, this one is a very creative piece; though I have never heard of an Indian brave with green eyes! But that is OK, after all, my poem that I will post on Sunday, has a 10 years old trekking through Finland and Norway! Not likely, either. lol.
But there is only a few places where the rhythm wavers, but that is also acceptable with a poem of length. In fact, if my poem does not win the "Write a Poem of Length" contest, which I created, I hope yours does. I don't mind losing to a quality work. Thanks for posting.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Wow, what a nice thing to say from the creator of the contest. I wish you all the best as well. I intentionally went with a more conversational (sort of tell it by the campfire story) than strict meter in my approach. We will see if it works or not. I am flattered that you found this to be quality work. Thank you so much.
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You are very welcome, and good luck when the voting starts.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
This certainly fits the contest criteria. It is a long poem. You keep the rhymes going nicely and and the meter works. This poem should od well in the contest.
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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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This certainly fits the contest criteria. It is a long poem. You keep the rhymes going nicely and and the meter works. This poem should od well in the contest.
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Comment Written 12-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the kind comments about the poem. Yes, it is long. I appreciate the good wishes.
Comment from Bill Schott
Wow! What a terrific legend in a poetic format that takes this great story and magnifies it. Utahna and Red Hawk and the story of Mt. Timpanogos is a superb verse.
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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Wow! What a terrific legend in a poetic format that takes this great story and magnifies it. Utahna and Red Hawk and the story of Mt. Timpanogos is a superb verse.
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Comment Written 12-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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What wonderful comments about the format and story. Thank you.
