Texas Dream Catcher
Viewing comments for Chapter 63 "Chapter Treinta y Tres, Part Dos"Drug & human trafficking, can romance win?
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Comment from Dawn Munro
Well, Barbara, congrats, because this is as professional as it gets, in my opinion - I swear I could hear the voices of those two men as they talked. You've left off at a great place to lead into the next part too - now your readers are dying to get down to it (the romance, I mean). Wow, girl, well done! Subtle, but very, very enticing.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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Well, Barbara, congrats, because this is as professional as it gets, in my opinion - I swear I could hear the voices of those two men as they talked. You've left off at a great place to lead into the next part too - now your readers are dying to get down to it (the romance, I mean). Wow, girl, well done! Subtle, but very, very enticing.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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Thank you for the encouragement.
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Well, yeah! You're welcome. I get the feeling that some people think I don't know what the hell I am talking about, that I am just a "nice" person and can't bear to tell them anything negative about what they write.
I'm not that nice. I'm just not stupid enough to follow crap I can't bear to read. My time matters to me.
Comment from Sis Cat
What? Soni's a tomboy, too? Your epic Western is drawing to a close with the fate of Soni and the Rockin A in the balance. Your dialogue engaged and moved the plot along.
One spag. Start a new sentence with "So are the turf wars."
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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What? Soni's a tomboy, too? Your epic Western is drawing to a close with the fate of Soni and the Rockin A in the balance. Your dialogue engaged and moved the plot along.
One spag. Start a new sentence with "So are the turf wars."
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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I have made that correction. Thank you for the catch.
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You're welcome.
Comment from c_lucas
My first concern is for Jim's safety. Where is Kuruk's scalping knife? LOL Speaking of behaving, I don't think Soni is the type to resort to a rolling pin when she has three dogs at her beck and call. This is very well written.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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My first concern is for Jim's safety. Where is Kuruk's scalping knife? LOL Speaking of behaving, I don't think Soni is the type to resort to a rolling pin when she has three dogs at her beck and call. This is very well written.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
We are getting down to the nitty-gritty in this story now and I don't think there's any doubt as to Jim's intentions. I'm looking forward to the next chapter to see just what he says, Giddy
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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We are getting down to the nitty-gritty in this story now and I don't think there's any doubt as to Jim's intentions. I'm looking forward to the next chapter to see just what he says, Giddy
Comment Written 18-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Heidi M
This chapter allows the pieces to continue to fall into place. It's important that you tie everything up, which you are doing nicely.
"Then you ca(me) along..."
"I have a suspect in front of me (who) needs to..."
I like that you ended this chapter with the question of his intentions.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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This chapter allows the pieces to continue to fall into place. It's important that you tie everything up, which you are doing nicely.
"Then you ca(me) along..."
"I have a suspect in front of me (who) needs to..."
I like that you ended this chapter with the question of his intentions.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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I made the corrections thank you for the catches.
Comment from Bollie
The characters in this story are created beautifully with personalities consistent throughout the chapter. There are some typos that need editing. In the first paragraph it says " He walked over to kitchen area" should say " to the kitchen area". Also in the middle of this story it says " Then you can along...", should be "Then you came along..." There are some punctuation errors as well, commas misplaced or not where they should be. The story itself is very entertaining or I would have given you a three star review for, it needs work.
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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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The characters in this story are created beautifully with personalities consistent throughout the chapter. There are some typos that need editing. In the first paragraph it says " He walked over to kitchen area" should say " to the kitchen area". Also in the middle of this story it says " Then you can along...", should be "Then you came along..." There are some punctuation errors as well, commas misplaced or not where they should be. The story itself is very entertaining or I would have given you a three star review for, it needs work.
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Comment Written 18-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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I have made the corrections. Thank you.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Uh, oh, sounds like Kuruk wants some answer, and it would be my guess that Jim better be able to give some, in a hurry. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter. :-)
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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Uh, oh, sounds like Kuruk wants some answer, and it would be my guess that Jim better be able to give some, in a hurry. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter. :-)
Comment Written 18-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
Ah at last the question we've all been waiting for. "What are your intentions concerning my granddaughter" as a father of daughters, and a granddaughter, I can understand his concern. Somethings have been uncovered about the cartel, Miguel and the reason for their interest in the Rockin' A. Well done Barbara, blessings, Roy
Typo then you (can) along and...came?
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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Ah at last the question we've all been waiting for. "What are your intentions concerning my granddaughter" as a father of daughters, and a granddaughter, I can understand his concern. Somethings have been uncovered about the cartel, Miguel and the reason for their interest in the Rockin' A. Well done Barbara, blessings, Roy
Typo then you (can) along and...came?
Comment Written 18-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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I have made that corrections. Thank you for the review.
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Most welcome Barbara,
Comment from Sankey
Don't have anymore SIXES this month sorry otherwise this would have got one. Good work again. can't wait to see where this is going. Good punch line one spag then another in Author's notes below."Then you ca[n](me) along and threw
In Author's notes.... I (have)one more part to this chapter
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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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Don't have anymore SIXES this month sorry otherwise this would have got one. Good work again. can't wait to see where this is going. Good punch line one spag then another in Author's notes below."Then you ca[n](me) along and threw
In Author's notes.... I (have)one more part to this chapter
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Comment Written 18-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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I have made that correction and will get the one in the author's notes.
Comment from Ben Colder
You know, this makes me wonder how many tunnels and other means of smuggling drugs from Mexico is at hand. You have twisted this event from a man falling off a cliff to what it is now. Well done.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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You know, this makes me wonder how many tunnels and other means of smuggling drugs from Mexico is at hand. You have twisted this event from a man falling off a cliff to what it is now. Well done.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
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Thank you for the kind review. There are quite a few tunnels into Texas.
