Man's Great Folly
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Comment from foxangie123
I reviewed this before which isn't a problem. This amazing as is all of your work I have read. You have a very artistic mind that reads beautifully.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2016
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I reviewed this before which isn't a problem. This amazing as is all of your work I have read. You have a very artistic mind that reads beautifully.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2016
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Now that was a VERY nice thing to say. Thank you.
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Always welcome. You are a great artist.
Comment from jusylee72
I did get a little confused when it changed stories but I found it interesting and engaging. I remember streaking ( not me) wait seeing streaking in college. also the arguments about overpopulation and women's rights. I was in college in the early 70's
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2016
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I did get a little confused when it changed stories but I found it interesting and engaging. I remember streaking ( not me) wait seeing streaking in college. also the arguments about overpopulation and women's rights. I was in college in the early 70's
Comment Written 01-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2016
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Me too. '73-'77. What great people came out of that era. Right? LOL Thank you.
Comment from Bill O'Bier
I enjoyed this poem a lot. The arrangement is creative and the words expressive. I think you did an outstanding job with this piece.
Wishing you well-
Bill~
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2016
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I enjoyed this poem a lot. The arrangement is creative and the words expressive. I think you did an outstanding job with this piece.
Wishing you well-
Bill~
Comment Written 01-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2016
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Thank you, Mr. Bill.
Comment from RGstar
I have no sixes, my friend. Deserves.
The first part with reference to china, overcrowding, and its rhetoric, still in someway, connect to the second part...spring,creation and soul.
We certainly are capable of much, and yes, we have achieved much, but to what extent we will never know, as the future will only reveal the length we have travelled and not what there is to come, for only time can speak of what we have achieved in proportion to the period we are in.
''And only the nature
of man
holds us back.''
And above is the magic of the write. So well said, man is the worst destroyer of this planet...though he only borrows its offers for a spec, limited in time.
Bravo.
Have a great day.
RG
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2016
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I have no sixes, my friend. Deserves.
The first part with reference to china, overcrowding, and its rhetoric, still in someway, connect to the second part...spring,creation and soul.
We certainly are capable of much, and yes, we have achieved much, but to what extent we will never know, as the future will only reveal the length we have travelled and not what there is to come, for only time can speak of what we have achieved in proportion to the period we are in.
''And only the nature
of man
holds us back.''
And above is the magic of the write. So well said, man is the worst destroyer of this planet...though he only borrows its offers for a spec, limited in time.
Bravo.
Have a great day.
RG
Comment Written 01-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2016
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Thank you so much, my friend. And for recognizing what we both agree on:the last stanza. I believe it is one of my better endings. I apologize for not reviewing you more. Then give again my feeble excuse-I, being human, have engaged in the deadly sin of "sloth."
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Ha,ha. don't we all...life has to come first.
Best
Comment from nancyrabbrose
Wow, what a great poem! If I had 6 stars to give, you would receive them for this poem. The philosophy, the hope, the inspiration and more are admirable. Well done. Thank you for inspiring me today when I read your poem. And, Rama Devi was right, you really could do it.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2016
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Wow, what a great poem! If I had 6 stars to give, you would receive them for this poem. The philosophy, the hope, the inspiration and more are admirable. Well done. Thank you for inspiring me today when I read your poem. And, Rama Devi was right, you really could do it.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2016
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Ha ha, she does have a knack for being right, doesn't she? Thank you so much.
Comment from P1
this is a very well written and obviously
well thought through piece of writing.
the darkness turning into the wobders
of spring and everything in betweeen.pleasure
to reead and review
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2016
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this is a very well written and obviously
well thought through piece of writing.
the darkness turning into the wobders
of spring and everything in betweeen.pleasure
to reead and review
Comment Written 01-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2016
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Thank you. I appreciate it.
Comment from Louise Michelle
A lot of thought went into this piece, Victor, and it's worth reading slowly and contemplating. The very last stanza is quite clever. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2016
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A lot of thought went into this piece, Victor, and it's worth reading slowly and contemplating. The very last stanza is quite clever. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 01-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2016
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Thanks, I like that ending too.
Comment from dragonpoet
This free verse poem shows us the opposites of existence. The bad side, overpopulation and pollution and the good side, the beauty of nature. If we don't control the bad side than the good side will disappear.
Poetry does make us think of these things and show others the truth of the matter.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2016
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This free verse poem shows us the opposites of existence. The bad side, overpopulation and pollution and the good side, the beauty of nature. If we don't control the bad side than the good side will disappear.
Poetry does make us think of these things and show others the truth of the matter.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 01-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2016
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Thank you.
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You're welcome.
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Comment from LisaD123
A highly original and skillful poem. The first part imaginatively recreates university life and language is cleverly used to paint images of the problems caused by man. I particularly enjoyed the lines:
'I mutated
to a Biology major.'
The second part is deeply evocative of how life begins. My favourite line in this part was:
'We have answers
and political impediments.'
The structure of the poem is unusual but entertainingly realised.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2016
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A highly original and skillful poem. The first part imaginatively recreates university life and language is cleverly used to paint images of the problems caused by man. I particularly enjoyed the lines:
'I mutated
to a Biology major.'
The second part is deeply evocative of how life begins. My favourite line in this part was:
'We have answers
and political impediments.'
The structure of the poem is unusual but entertainingly realised.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2016
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You know, I almost left that part out. "the answers and impediments" Funny how you liked it. You must be right, I left it in. LOL Thank you.
Comment from Sis Cat
I enjoyed the conversational tone of this poem in two distinct parts. The first is about a debate at a university in which it predicts that man will continue to overpopulate the planet until, like a bacteria, man dies out. The second half meditates that "spring is a soul that's just beginning." I love the tactile part about our feet being in dirt and that we are in Eden now, but "only the nature of man holds us back."
Thank you for sharing your talent and for caring about the planet. It is an honor to participate in this project with you.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2016
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I enjoyed the conversational tone of this poem in two distinct parts. The first is about a debate at a university in which it predicts that man will continue to overpopulate the planet until, like a bacteria, man dies out. The second half meditates that "spring is a soul that's just beginning." I love the tactile part about our feet being in dirt and that we are in Eden now, but "only the nature of man holds us back."
Thank you for sharing your talent and for caring about the planet. It is an honor to participate in this project with you.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2016
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And you as well, my dear.
