Windows To The Past
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Jubilee"Poems about the old West.
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Comment from Dean Kuch
There were trees such as this all over the old west, Nancy. Your poetic tale speaks of one such tree which thankfully became an omen of good rather than evil.
As usual, your rhyming and rhythm are exceptional. The events, places, and characters you portray could relate to any such sheriff, in any number of towns which dotted the landscape all across the Western Territories, and seemed very genuine and realistic.
Well done, a very interesting poem. . .
Always with respect
~Dean
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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There were trees such as this all over the old west, Nancy. Your poetic tale speaks of one such tree which thankfully became an omen of good rather than evil.
As usual, your rhyming and rhythm are exceptional. The events, places, and characters you portray could relate to any such sheriff, in any number of towns which dotted the landscape all across the Western Territories, and seemed very genuine and realistic.
Well done, a very interesting poem. . .
Always with respect
~Dean
Comment Written 16-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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Thank you for the comments and stars Dean. Have a glorious day! Nancy
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Sure thing, Nancy. Anytime.
~Dean:}
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Sure thing, Nancy. Anytime.
~Dean:}
Comment from Domino 2
The thought of real tree-hangings (well, and images of executions) really make me sick to the stomach and SO friggin angry that these victims didn't at least get a fair trial, Nancy.
You don't need the apostrophe connected to [its']
I see you mention the sheriff, and I wonder if you mean to infer the 'lynchings' were legal and connected to him - though that may not be the case.
Anyway, a very good write with all your usual skilled devices of meter, rhyme and enjambment.
Best wishes, Ray xx
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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The thought of real tree-hangings (well, and images of executions) really make me sick to the stomach and SO friggin angry that these victims didn't at least get a fair trial, Nancy.
You don't need the apostrophe connected to [its']
I see you mention the sheriff, and I wonder if you mean to infer the 'lynchings' were legal and connected to him - though that may not be the case.
Anyway, a very good write with all your usual skilled devices of meter, rhyme and enjambment.
Best wishes, Ray xx
Comment Written 16-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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No, he was the new law that came to town. I edited and made that clear. Thanks for the comment it was very helpful Ray. I think many were innocent and were victims of mob rule which is frightening.
However gradually law and order was restored and began to flourish
in the west. Thanks for the help my friend. xxx Nancy
Comment from mfowler
This was a very entertaining poem, Nancy. I think you picked the perfect metric value for this. The octameter allows the story to develop in nice even, long lines, creating a great narrative style. The poem had me in. I really though Luke Waters had done this and that they did the necktie party to remind them. You never know how superstition can rule tradition. Anyways, your notes put me out of my misery. Good storytelling in an easy to read and enjoyable format.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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This was a very entertaining poem, Nancy. I think you picked the perfect metric value for this. The octameter allows the story to develop in nice even, long lines, creating a great narrative style. The poem had me in. I really though Luke Waters had done this and that they did the necktie party to remind them. You never know how superstition can rule tradition. Anyways, your notes put me out of my misery. Good storytelling in an easy to read and enjoyable format.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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I edited it and made it clear that law and order came to town with Luke Waters. The hanging tree was left as a reminder that mob rule was a thing of the past.Those who seek to forget the past a doomed to repeat it. Thanks Mark. :<) Nancy
Comment from MacMhuirich
A wonderfully written poem my friend, love a bit of history in a poem (the tree) and the content could be the truth in many towns. The wording and narrative is well suited for the form. I enjoyed reading this.
Bless you
John
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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A wonderfully written poem my friend, love a bit of history in a poem (the tree) and the content could be the truth in many towns. The wording and narrative is well suited for the form. I enjoyed reading this.
Bless you
John
Comment Written 16-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much for the comments and stars John. Nancy
Comment from flamingstar
What a great little story in a sonnet format! I guess it is true what they say about those forgetting the past are condemned to repeat it. I love the final couplet. Perfect...
note: no apostrophe necessary in "its'", line 2.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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What a great little story in a sonnet format! I guess it is true what they say about those forgetting the past are condemned to repeat it. I love the final couplet. Perfect...
note: no apostrophe necessary in "its'", line 2.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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You are so right Michelle. I think I will add that to my notes. That's the point i was trying to make. Thank you very much! Hugs. Nancy
Comment from tfawcus
This is such an incisive comment on the sins of the past, sins that unfortunately lurk not far below the surface even now. The Sheriff was right. We all need a reminder from time to time. This is a fine poem with a superb last line:
"and took his nap beneath a tree no longer soaked with tears"
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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This is such an incisive comment on the sins of the past, sins that unfortunately lurk not far below the surface even now. The Sheriff was right. We all need a reminder from time to time. This is a fine poem with a superb last line:
"and took his nap beneath a tree no longer soaked with tears"
Comment Written 16-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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I wanted to leave you with that peaceful scene. LOL Thanks for the review and stars Tony. :<) Nancy
Comment from Neonewman
I thoroughly enjoyed this wonderfully crafted piece Nancy! I love history and this one certainly portrayed that. The picture of the hanging tree is awesome.
God bless!
Steve
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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I thoroughly enjoyed this wonderfully crafted piece Nancy! I love history and this one certainly portrayed that. The picture of the hanging tree is awesome.
God bless!
Steve
Comment Written 15-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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So glad you enjoyed the poem. Thank you for the review and stars Steve. :<) Nancy
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My pleasure Nancy!
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My pleasure Nancy!
Comment from Unspoken94
Excellent rhyme and meter and I'm glad that this is fiction because I wouldn't want Kyle, TX to be known for its hanging tree. But you have crafted a wonderful saga of the old west. -Bill
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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Excellent rhyme and meter and I'm glad that this is fiction because I wouldn't want Kyle, TX to be known for its hanging tree. But you have crafted a wonderful saga of the old west. -Bill
Comment Written 15-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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Another picture of the tree had a sign that it was a hanging tree but it was too large to use. Thanks for the review and stars Bill. :<) Nancy
Comment from angelface2
Well, that looks like a fancy hanging tree! Texas is where they would be, for sure. Your poem is very good. Nicely done, with good rhymes and rhythm. Keep it up, girl! Woohoo. XX Sally
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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Well, that looks like a fancy hanging tree! Texas is where they would be, for sure. Your poem is very good. Nicely done, with good rhymes and rhythm. Keep it up, girl! Woohoo. XX Sally
Comment Written 15-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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Thanks Sally! Yes, Texas was really the wild west in the past. Thanks for the review and stars. Have a fun day! xxx Nancy
Comment from Cindy Warren
I know they used to have hanging trees, but I find it hard to imagine them. I'm sure glad they don't do that any more. In your first stanza, they' ed should be they'd.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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I know they used to have hanging trees, but I find it hard to imagine them. I'm sure glad they don't do that any more. In your first stanza, they' ed should be they'd.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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Would you believe spell check did that to me? Of course it was still my fault for being in a rush. LOL Thank you for the comment and stars Cindy xxx Nancy
