With trepidation...
Life is paved.92 total reviews
Comment from Leineco
You've taken the maxims "Love Thy Neighbor" and "Do Unto Others" back to its roots. . .artfully reminding us "Why do we think new wisdoms reign?
Nicely pondered :-)
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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You've taken the maxims "Love Thy Neighbor" and "Do Unto Others" back to its roots. . .artfully reminding us "Why do we think new wisdoms reign?
Nicely pondered :-)
Comment Written 03-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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Thanks so much for the encouraging and uplifting review, comments and generous rating, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Neonewman
Wonderfully crafted and spiritually lifting piece you have delivered. What a way to begin my review. I absolutely feel refreshed my friend.
God bless!
Steve
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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Wonderfully crafted and spiritually lifting piece you have delivered. What a way to begin my review. I absolutely feel refreshed my friend.
God bless!
Steve
Comment Written 03-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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Thanks so much for Steve, the encouraging and uplifting review, comments and generous rating, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Just2Write
You poem has some very wise words of wisdom and many would do well to heed them. Please and thank-you seem to be fading from our conversational speech. And in our head-long rush to get through our busy days, we seem to pay less and less attention to those around us.
The iambic tetrameter is strong in these AABB couplets- the only place I got hung on it was S2L3:
If folk deceived with kindness' face
if FOLK / de CEIVED /with KIND/ ness ES/ FACE
perhaps;
If folk deceive with kindest face
if FOLK / de CEIVE / with KIND / est FACE
As always - just a suggestion - yours to like or lose.
Rose.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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You poem has some very wise words of wisdom and many would do well to heed them. Please and thank-you seem to be fading from our conversational speech. And in our head-long rush to get through our busy days, we seem to pay less and less attention to those around us.
The iambic tetrameter is strong in these AABB couplets- the only place I got hung on it was S2L3:
If folk deceived with kindness' face
if FOLK / de CEIVED /with KIND/ ness ES/ FACE
perhaps;
If folk deceive with kindest face
if FOLK / de CEIVE / with KIND / est FACE
As always - just a suggestion - yours to like or lose.
Rose.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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Thanks so much Rose, for the encouraging and uplifting review, comments and generous rating, and the great suggestion, blessings, Roy.
Comment from dpgarrick38
Excellent poem, royowen. I especially like the line "For if one's skies were always blue- how could we read the false from true?" We must experience negative events in our life in order to have great ones, otherwise there would be nothing to compare them to. I think if we all put others first, this world would be even more beautiful. Great message sent across in this writing!
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Excellent poem, royowen. I especially like the line "For if one's skies were always blue- how could we read the false from true?" We must experience negative events in our life in order to have great ones, otherwise there would be nothing to compare them to. I think if we all put others first, this world would be even more beautiful. Great message sent across in this writing!
Comment Written 03-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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Thank you for sharing your wise and uplifting review and comments, and the very generous rating, blessings, Roy.
Comment from I am Cat
Hello Roy,
It's nice to see you... I hope you are well.
This, a lovely poem about, basically... The Golden Rule:
"Do unto others as you would have them do unto you"...
and it's true, we should treat all others as we would want to be
treated.. sadly, some just will not play nicely, but we must
always find it in our hearts to forgive them...
I believe that most people are basically good people,
so it's not usually a problem...
and color? Colors are for paintings. ;)
Well done,
Always nice to see you Roy
Cat
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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Hello Roy,
It's nice to see you... I hope you are well.
This, a lovely poem about, basically... The Golden Rule:
"Do unto others as you would have them do unto you"...
and it's true, we should treat all others as we would want to be
treated.. sadly, some just will not play nicely, but we must
always find it in our hearts to forgive them...
I believe that most people are basically good people,
so it's not usually a problem...
and color? Colors are for paintings. ;)
Well done,
Always nice to see you Roy
Cat
Comment Written 03-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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Thanks so much Cat, for the encouraging and uplifting review, comments and generous rating, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Serendipity!
I like this poem. It reads smoothly and has a good message.
kindness' (would 'kindest face' work here?)
Fortunately the golden rule has not disappeared entirely. My husband and I find it a very satisfying rule to follow.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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I like this poem. It reads smoothly and has a good message.
kindness' (would 'kindest face' work here?)
Fortunately the golden rule has not disappeared entirely. My husband and I find it a very satisfying rule to follow.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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Thanks so much for the encouraging and uplifting review, comments and generous rating, fortunately not entirely, there will be light In the darkness, it just becomes brighter, blessings, Roy.
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One of my favorite saying has been "All the darkness in the world can not put out the light of one small candle," and those tiny lights do seem to shine brightest on the darkest night.
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One of my favorite saying has been "All the darkness in the world can not put out the light of one small candle," and those tiny lights do seem to shine brightest on the darkest night.
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That's Right even the dark ages couldn't put it out.
Comment from risktaker
I love the message, tone, and flow. The word choice is effective and the message clear. Love is the answer to this world. Being God focused and practice daily love, kindness, and compassion. I relate to "They've disappeared, those golden words-
to honour people seems absurd.
Why do we think new wisdoms reign?
Can thoughts of self, the dark restrain?
The Bible says put others first;
Lord Jesus one, then you'll not thirst.
With kindness, goodness, bless all folk,
then in joy's well-spring you will soak." Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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I love the message, tone, and flow. The word choice is effective and the message clear. Love is the answer to this world. Being God focused and practice daily love, kindness, and compassion. I relate to "They've disappeared, those golden words-
to honour people seems absurd.
Why do we think new wisdoms reign?
Can thoughts of self, the dark restrain?
The Bible says put others first;
Lord Jesus one, then you'll not thirst.
With kindness, goodness, bless all folk,
then in joy's well-spring you will soak." Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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Thanks so much for the encouraging and uplifting review, comments and generous rating, blessings, Roy.
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Comment from Jacob Collins
A well written spiritual piece, Roy. You certainly captured the words of Matthew and Luke well in your writing. If we love The Lord our God with all our heart, we shall find piece. An excellent piece, thanks for sharing...Jacob
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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A well written spiritual piece, Roy. You certainly captured the words of Matthew and Luke well in your writing. If we love The Lord our God with all our heart, we shall find piece. An excellent piece, thanks for sharing...Jacob
Comment Written 03-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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Thanks so much Jacob, for the encouraging and uplifting review, comments and generous rating, blessings, Roy.
Comment from dragonpoet
Yes it is true we wouldn't know if something was bad or wrong if everything was perfect. We wouldn't appreciate the good without the bad. People are losing their ability to be kind and compassionate. This is sad.
Keep writing.
Joan
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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Yes it is true we wouldn't know if something was bad or wrong if everything was perfect. We wouldn't appreciate the good without the bad. People are losing their ability to be kind and compassionate. This is sad.
Keep writing.
Joan
Comment Written 03-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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Thanks so much Joan, for the encouraging and uplifting review, comments and generous rating, blessings, Roy.
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It's what we are here to do. To encourage and help each other.
Joan
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It's what we are here to do. To encourage and help each other.
Joan
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Amen
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Roy. Welcome back mate. I'm back in Cairns as well now for a while. As always this flow and rhymes superbly and hold a brilliant message. So many greedy and selfish people live in this world today that do not care about anything or anyone other than themselves and that is a sad stae of affairs cobber. Lovely work, cheers Fez
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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G'day Roy. Welcome back mate. I'm back in Cairns as well now for a while. As always this flow and rhymes superbly and hold a brilliant message. So many greedy and selfish people live in this world today that do not care about anything or anyone other than themselves and that is a sad stae of affairs cobber. Lovely work, cheers Fez
Comment Written 03-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2015
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Thanks so much Fez, for the encouraging and uplifting review, comments and generous rating, have a good stay mate, blessings, Roy.
