Maggie's Kiss
A Car crash leaves a man hanging onto life.26 total reviews
Comment from nancy_e_davis
That's what you call above and beyond the call of duty.
A life saving kiss that's for sure. It has a story line with impact despite the short length. Good Job. :<) Nancy
reply by the author on 24-May-2015
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That's what you call above and beyond the call of duty.
A life saving kiss that's for sure. It has a story line with impact despite the short length. Good Job. :<) Nancy
Comment Written 24-May-2015
reply by the author on 24-May-2015
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Thank you so much, Nancy. It's hard writing a story in 100 words or less and keeping meaning. I'm learning how to say more with less words.
Comment from K. Lorraine
This was a great 100 word dash to the finish line...
A powerful kiss from a stranger that restored life...
This was a powerful story told in so few words...
Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-May-2015
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This was a great 100 word dash to the finish line...
A powerful kiss from a stranger that restored life...
This was a powerful story told in so few words...
Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 24-May-2015
reply by the author on 24-May-2015
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Thank you so much for the great review. It's funny how long it takes to write a very short story!
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So true!
Comment from Dashjianta
A touching tale of a kiss that helps save a life. The dialogue carries this one, conveying the danger Harry is in through the comments of the EMTs, and showing Harry's delusion/confusion through his constant calling for Maggie, and then his mistaking Sally's kiss for hers.
reply by the author on 24-May-2015
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A touching tale of a kiss that helps save a life. The dialogue carries this one, conveying the danger Harry is in through the comments of the EMTs, and showing Harry's delusion/confusion through his constant calling for Maggie, and then his mistaking Sally's kiss for hers.
Comment Written 24-May-2015
reply by the author on 24-May-2015
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Thank you so much for the review. There are so many quick decisions people, especially First Responders, are forced to make.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Sally did what Sally had to do to save the patient's life. Clever on Sally's part as your little tale indicates. Easy to follow story line here as well.
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reply by the author on 24-May-2015
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Sally did what Sally had to do to save the patient's life. Clever on Sally's part as your little tale indicates. Easy to follow story line here as well.
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Comment Written 24-May-2015
reply by the author on 24-May-2015
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Thank you, Brett, for the great review, and you are right, Sally did what she had to do.
Comment from BreeVree
This is outstanding.
You have definitely given us an entire story in under 100 words, well done.
That the story is full of emotion from both of the main characters is equally well done.
A new meaning to kiss of life, perhaps?
reply by the author on 24-May-2015
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This is outstanding.
You have definitely given us an entire story in under 100 words, well done.
That the story is full of emotion from both of the main characters is equally well done.
A new meaning to kiss of life, perhaps?
Comment Written 24-May-2015
reply by the author on 24-May-2015
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Thank you so much; you got the point of the story. I was trying to draw a line between CPR and a kiss. Thank you for the wonderful 6 stars. Aren't you sweet? So generous, and so nice to stop by and review!
Comment from humpwhistle
Nice take on this time-worn prompt.
You set a scene, create characters, and tell a
story. You've done it.
Best of luck at the polls.
Peace, Lee
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reply by the author on 24-May-2015
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Nice take on this time-worn prompt.
You set a scene, create characters, and tell a
story. You've done it.
Best of luck at the polls.
Peace, Lee
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Comment Written 24-May-2015
reply by the author on 24-May-2015
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Thank you so much, Lee, what a kind review. I tried to take a different look at the prompt. Hope it goes over.
