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flip flops held in hand: 5-7-5 suite

track memories, not sand, into the house

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Comment from rspoet
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This is a very fine haiku suite. Each poems flow into the next smoothly.
The syllable count is spot on.
Excellent and humorous final satori line
Very good presentation with the art work to poem match and good background frame that highlights the sand colored font.
Each individual haiku can stand alone or together in the suite
Well done

 Comment Written 04-May-2015

reply by the author on 04-May-2015
    Yes, rspoet, I worked to craft haiku that can stand alone as well as without artwork. I strove to create as tactile and as visual experience as possible for the reader. Thanks for your review.
Comment from pharp
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I have never seen or reviewed a haiku suite. I am still trying to master the three lines. You did an excellent job in the penning of this poem. I just love the first three lines, brought back a lot of memories. Thanks for sharing. Pharp

 Comment Written 04-May-2015

reply by the author on 04-May-2015
    Thank you, pharp, for your review. I have seen haiku suites on FS before but I did not have a subject suitable for one until now. I am glad it brought back memories.
Comment from GregoryCody
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Fantastic flow. Very strong voice and I think this is so beautiful as well! Pretty pretty picture;)

Encrusted tan legs. Wow great choices there!

 Comment Written 04-May-2015

reply by the author on 04-May-2015
    Yes, GregoryCody, I was eating pecan-crusted Mahi-Mahi when I thought of the encrusted, tanned legs line. I am glad you enjoyed my poem. Thanks for the review.
Comment from tfawcus
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This haiku suite gives a wonderful visual image, not only of what you saw in Mexico, but of the pure joy of a beach holiday filled with sunshine and children's laughter. Such memories are indeed 'dipped in stardust'.

 Comment Written 04-May-2015

reply by the author on 04-May-2015
    Yes, these were stardust dipped memories. I am glad you enjoyed my poem. Thanks for the review.
Comment from skye
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These haiku capture the fun of the beach, the beauty of the sparkling sand, and the innocence of the playtime.
I enjoyed each one.
Well done.

 Comment Written 04-May-2015

reply by the author on 04-May-2015
    Thank you, skye, for your fine review. I am glad my poem captured the fun of the beach.
Comment from Sarah Butterfly
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Lovely image: feet dipped in stardust. This poem gets the feeling of summer going. Noce pairing of writing and artwork. Well done!

Kind regards

Sarah

 Comment Written 04-May-2015

reply by the author on 04-May-2015
    Thank you, Sarah, for your fine review. My poem gets summer going.
Comment from TAB_that's me
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I love walking on the beach:) I love the line "feet dipped in stardust" - great imagery. Enjoyable poem - thanks for sharing.

teresa

 Comment Written 04-May-2015

reply by the author on 04-May-2015
    Yes, Teresa, "feet dipped in stardust" was the first line that came to me when I saw the sandy feet outside of a Mexican beach. I am glad you enjoyed my poem and shared your time with it.
Comment from A TARNISHED KNIGHT
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My first read of your work and I was not disappointed at all.. You know how to weave your words well my friend A verbal painter... painting pictures with your words I enjoyed
TK

 Comment Written 04-May-2015

reply by the author on 04-May-2015
    Thank you, A Tarnished Knight, for your kind review. Yes, I am a verbal painter painting pictures with words. I am glad you enjoyed my poem.
Comment from thee-name
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Excellent Haiku. I liked this part.

flip flops held in hand
wet toes trudge across the strand
feet dipped in stardust

 Comment Written 04-May-2015

reply by the author on 04-May-2015
    Thank you, thee-name, for your fine review. I am glad you enjoyed my poem.
reply by thee-name on 04-May-2015
    thank you!
Comment from royowen
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A really nice set of haiku , with most appropriate artwork to go with, I'm flat out trying to do one of those, with linear mind, they are a real challenge! Well done with a nice satori, my admiration, blessings, Roy.

 Comment Written 04-May-2015

reply by the author on 04-May-2015
    Thank you, Roy, for your kind review. I have seen several haiku suite on FanStory. This is my first one. I am glad you enjoyed it.
reply by royowen on 04-May-2015
    Most welcome,