Texas Dream Catcher
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Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Boy! That's some shooting and that's some dog or two! I enjoyed seeing the action and it isn't over yet, so I'll be pleased when I see another post because the story is so enjoyable. Giddy
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2015
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Boy! That's some shooting and that's some dog or two! I enjoyed seeing the action and it isn't over yet, so I'll be pleased when I see another post because the story is so enjoyable. Giddy
Comment Written 12-Jan-2015
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Comment from Jay Squires
Another entertaining chapter, Barbara. I couldn't find any SPAG. No suggestions for you. It read smoothly.
Looks like Soni and Jim are getting on a wavelink.
I'm just hoping the chuckle behind them was her grandfather.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2015
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Another entertaining chapter, Barbara. I couldn't find any SPAG. No suggestions for you. It read smoothly.
Looks like Soni and Jim are getting on a wavelink.
I'm just hoping the chuckle behind them was her grandfather.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2015
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Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Now who is there laughing?
I like the way Soni and Kuruk cut the tether. Verrrry cool. I love seeing skilled people use their skills. Great examples here. :)
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Now who is there laughing?
I like the way Soni and Kuruk cut the tether. Verrrry cool. I love seeing skilled people use their skills. Great examples here. :)
Comment Written 12-Jan-2015
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Comment from Carole Rosa
Barb, I love the rundown shack scape. That's why I read this chapter, which is a stand alone chapter. I didn't read any of your other chapters, but this chapter was written in vivid tones. I like the attitude of Soni. Carole
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Barb, I love the rundown shack scape. That's why I read this chapter, which is a stand alone chapter. I didn't read any of your other chapters, but this chapter was written in vivid tones. I like the attitude of Soni. Carole
Comment Written 12-Jan-2015
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Comment from rmj09
The focus retrieving Midnight. The storyline development, Soni and Jim move forward and Soni shoots the bow and cuts one tether with the arrow. She sends Goliath to get Midnight and Butkus to guard the two. Kuruk threw a knife and cut the other tether. Jim shoots one man while the horse and dogs escape. Then another man jumps Jim and Goliath jumps another.
The dialogue is clear and develops a sense of what is happening. The narrative shows action the progress of Soni and Jim as well as the dogs and Midnight.
The emotion I felt optimism that they will accomplish what they set out to do.
The style of writing is serious.
The hook is the chuckle from Kuruk or the head of the horse thieves?
Some of the tension has been resolved by the return of Midnight.
The author maintains the genre throughout all chapters to date.
The chapter is so well written that it provides a lot of visual thinking.
Keep on writing.
Barbara, have a great week. Walk in the shadow of God. *o* Rita
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The focus retrieving Midnight. The storyline development, Soni and Jim move forward and Soni shoots the bow and cuts one tether with the arrow. She sends Goliath to get Midnight and Butkus to guard the two. Kuruk threw a knife and cut the other tether. Jim shoots one man while the horse and dogs escape. Then another man jumps Jim and Goliath jumps another.
The dialogue is clear and develops a sense of what is happening. The narrative shows action the progress of Soni and Jim as well as the dogs and Midnight.
The emotion I felt optimism that they will accomplish what they set out to do.
The style of writing is serious.
The hook is the chuckle from Kuruk or the head of the horse thieves?
Some of the tension has been resolved by the return of Midnight.
The author maintains the genre throughout all chapters to date.
The chapter is so well written that it provides a lot of visual thinking.
Keep on writing.
Barbara, have a great week. Walk in the shadow of God. *o* Rita
Comment Written 11-Jan-2015
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Comment from ProSongwriter
Hi Barbara ...
A short but action-filled chapter. She's a magician with that bow and arrow! Glad she got Midnight back.
And now, who could that be laughing in the distance? Hmmm... I'll have to read on to find out!
Nicely written!
Alan
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Hi Barbara ...
A short but action-filled chapter. She's a magician with that bow and arrow! Glad she got Midnight back.
And now, who could that be laughing in the distance? Hmmm... I'll have to read on to find out!
Nicely written!
Alan
Comment Written 11-Jan-2015
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Comment from country ranch writer
OH DEAR THEY FORGOT ABOUT THE OTHER GUY KURUK WHEN THEY GOT THOSE OTHER TWO HE PROBABLY THE ONE CHUCKLING IN THE BACKGROUND
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OH DEAR THEY FORGOT ABOUT THE OTHER GUY KURUK WHEN THEY GOT THOSE OTHER TWO HE PROBABLY THE ONE CHUCKLING IN THE BACKGROUND
Comment Written 11-Jan-2015
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Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
A great write and most entertaining, your story kept me interested and your descriptive write was easy to follow . Thanks forsharing. I found no reason to suggest changes. Mary
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A great write and most entertaining, your story kept me interested and your descriptive write was easy to follow . Thanks forsharing. I found no reason to suggest changes. Mary
Comment Written 11-Jan-2015
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Comment from MelB
A good read. I figured she would make that shot. Glad she got her horse freed. Love the dog's name. Can't wait for the next chapter.
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A good read. I figured she would make that shot. Glad she got her horse freed. Love the dog's name. Can't wait for the next chapter.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2015
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Comment from emrpoems
Nice continuation from your last chapter. You achieve what you set out to do and Midnight is back with you. Lots of action in this piece. Quick pace action that keeps the reader's attention
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Nice continuation from your last chapter. You achieve what you set out to do and Midnight is back with you. Lots of action in this piece. Quick pace action that keeps the reader's attention
Comment Written 11-Jan-2015
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