Twelve Little Grains of Sparkly Sand
counting rhyme in 8/6/8/6 meter119 total reviews
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hello Brooke,
I loved the imagination displayed in this wonderful verse of the day-in-the-life of a grain of sand. You always take the reader on such a wonderful journey from the perspective of your chosen muse, and this was no exception.
My favorite stanza was about the sixth grain...I enjoyed its dream of freedom.
Another solid write, my friend.
Have a great evening, Bill
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Hello Brooke,
I loved the imagination displayed in this wonderful verse of the day-in-the-life of a grain of sand. You always take the reader on such a wonderful journey from the perspective of your chosen muse, and this was no exception.
My favorite stanza was about the sixth grain...I enjoyed its dream of freedom.
Another solid write, my friend.
Have a great evening, Bill
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Bill, thank you so much for your generous and supportive review :-) Brooke
Comment from billmetz
This is the first 6 I think I have ever given someone for their poem. Great imagination and I love the flow of the verses and the rhymes. The abab delivery adds to the story. I'm not a great poem reader or poet but this is what I like in poetry.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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This is the first 6 I think I have ever given someone for their poem. Great imagination and I love the flow of the verses and the rhymes. The abab delivery adds to the story. I'm not a great poem reader or poet but this is what I like in poetry.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Bill, thank you so much for your generous and supportive review :-) Brooke
Comment from Goodauthor
Alas, I just used my last six. I so enjoy these little snippets of children's poetry. They have a very jaunty sing-song rhythm, and the imagery is so vivid. The art more than does justice to what you have written. I enjoyed the read.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Alas, I just used my last six. I so enjoy these little snippets of children's poetry. They have a very jaunty sing-song rhythm, and the imagery is so vivid. The art more than does justice to what you have written. I enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much, Goodauthor :-) Brooke
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You're welcome.
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Brooke,
This is such a magical counting poem. Your imagination sores once more to produce a total delight for the kiddies and grownups as well. The ending is delightfully happy and so very creative.
Hugs,
Lou
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Hi Brooke,
This is such a magical counting poem. Your imagination sores once more to produce a total delight for the kiddies and grownups as well. The ending is delightfully happy and so very creative.
Hugs,
Lou
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Lou, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from alexisleech
It's no surprise that you retain the title of queen of poetry here on Fan Story. We grannies really appreciate your story poems because they remind us the wonder we had when we first had children of our own. I'm so glad it's the beginning of the week and I have a six to give! Alexis x
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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It's no surprise that you retain the title of queen of poetry here on Fan Story. We grannies really appreciate your story poems because they remind us the wonder we had when we first had children of our own. I'm so glad it's the beginning of the week and I have a six to give! Alexis x
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Alexis, thank you for being so encouraging and generous :-) Brooke
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh my, Brooke, I swear - your imagination is boundless. I tried to single out a stanza I loved most, but when it became nine, eight, seven (and so on - LOL), I gave up. (I think it was the ride on the starfish's arm that made me!) *grin*
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Oh my, Brooke, I swear - your imagination is boundless. I tried to single out a stanza I loved most, but when it became nine, eight, seven (and so on - LOL), I gave up. (I think it was the ride on the starfish's arm that made me!) *grin*
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Dawn, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your poem. I like the ending especially where other grains of sand joined the only one of the 12 left. I like the circumstances of each grain's demise. The variety adds to the fun. You are very talented creating these counting rhymes and sharing them with all. Thank you.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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I enjoyed your poem. I like the ending especially where other grains of sand joined the only one of the 12 left. I like the circumstances of each grain's demise. The variety adds to the fun. You are very talented creating these counting rhymes and sharing them with all. Thank you.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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jannypan, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Janet Foor
I love your counting poems Brooks. This is another adorable one. I'm sure Sawyer loves them too. We're going to visit our great nephew Jack soon and I'm going to read some of them to him. It will be fun to see a child's reaction to them.
Blessings and Happy Thanksgiving.
Janet
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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I love your counting poems Brooks. This is another adorable one. I'm sure Sawyer loves them too. We're going to visit our great nephew Jack soon and I'm going to read some of them to him. It will be fun to see a child's reaction to them.
Blessings and Happy Thanksgiving.
Janet
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Janet, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Wendyanne
How delightful Brooke. You have an amazing imagination and I'm children love your poetry. The last stanza made me smile as the grain of sand is no longer alone. How cute!
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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How delightful Brooke. You have an amazing imagination and I'm children love your poetry. The last stanza made me smile as the grain of sand is no longer alone. How cute!
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Wendyanne, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from DSMalott
So very clever in its rhyme pattern, its structure, its humorous description of the various beach scenes and the sand particle interaction. The personification of the sand gave the piece great 'personality'. As each stanza came and went I was more and more intrigued by the cute drama that developed.
Very nice.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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So very clever in its rhyme pattern, its structure, its humorous description of the various beach scenes and the sand particle interaction. The personification of the sand gave the piece great 'personality'. As each stanza came and went I was more and more intrigued by the cute drama that developed.
Very nice.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much, DS :-) Brooke
