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Viewing comments for Chapter 109 "Haiku (lacy white diamonds)"
'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway

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Comment from Trybuck
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Snow flakes like white diamonds
Are winter's offer of gems
That I would love to refuse
and send back to where they came
Because they just turn to mush
and slush is no good on the farm

Well done with your entry, Buck

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2014


reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
    How fun to read your review of the Haiku. But just think of all that nitrogen the 'mush and slush' leaves behind to nourish the farm. I like the internal rhyming in your lines.
    Thank you Buck for this review. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Tomes Johnston
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This is a beautiful poem that the author has created with this piece of work. It won't be long before we see the icicles here. Winter is well and truly on the way. They say it is going to be a hard winter here in the UK.

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2014


reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
    If the wooly worms can be trusted, we are in for a nasty one ourselves. So glad you enjoyed the Haiku Tom. Thanks for the great review. :-) Carolyn
reply by Tomes Johnston on 10-Nov-2014
    My pleasure
Comment from rjuselius
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"lacy white diamonds
whirl sparkling to the earth
winters snow gems"
love the imagery! i like the satori. and fine concrete images interconnected. very compelling my friend!
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!

rebekka x

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2014


reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
    And thank you for this wonderfully encouraging review of the Haiku. I appreciate your time. :-) Carolyn
Comment from mfowler
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lovely idea for an aha
the diamonds from the sky look great in images like this; maybe feel less wonderful out there in the cold
great image chosen; half the battle in presenting these 5-7-5 poems, especially with the aha prompt
really like the connection between:
lacy white diamonds ...and ...winters snow gems
good luck with this gem

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2014


reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
    mfowler, thank you so much, your review is very encouraging.
    :-) Carolyn
Comment from Nosha17
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Snowflakes are like diamonds when you analyse them. Well chosen words and imagery to convey your message. Super picture and good luck in the contest. Faye

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2014


reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
    Thanks Faye for this great review, :-) Carolyn
Comment from country ranch writer
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BEAUTIFUL POEM AND PICTURE SETS IT UP PERFECTLY FOR THE WINTER SNOW IS LIKE DIAMONDS WHEN THE SUN SHINES ON IT IT IS ALL A GLOW

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2014


reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
    I do love the sparkle of the fresh fallen snow. Thank you so much for enjoying this one. :-) Carolyn
reply by country ranch writer on 09-Nov-2014
    I went to Colorado once to see my brother and stood on his front porch looking up at the mountains and looked like flecks of diamonds in the sun light shinning on the snow
Comment from krys123
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Carolyn;
ingeniously creative, remarkably colorful, perceptual imagery, sensational descriptive conceptual grandeur,
masterful feel of movement of the idea are just a few of the many qualities this poem he has creatively given me.
The first two lines of your writing are the juxtaposition of imagery is very descriptive and your satori or third line sums up the totality of your poem or haiku. Good luck in the contest for this is an excellent entry.
Alex

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2014


reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
    Dear Alex, thank you for this great review. Should I extend the explanation in the authors notes more or do you think they are ok. I like what you have written here as well.
    :-) Carolyn
reply by krys123 on 10-Nov-2014
    I think your office notes are very helpful and in the you should keep on doing it.
    I do suggesting compacting that authors notes.
    And you are so sincerely welcome Carolyn.
    Alex
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
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Hi, Carolyn,

I like snowflakes as diamonds and gems. Nicely stated and presented with great artwork.

Nothing more tranquil than a gentle falling snow or rain. Can lull into believing all is right with the world.

Great job. Good luck in the contest.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*.*)



 Comment Written 09-Nov-2014


reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
    Thanks Jax, I appreciate the fine review and am glad you enjoyed this one. Snow does make for a peaceful feeling. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Charmane
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This beautiful blue and white background complements the essence of this scene like a romance that dwells between two star crazed lovers, that have fallen so deeply in love.
I am facinated with this little gem because the icicles alludes to the beauty that sparlking jewels possess.

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2014


reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
    Thanks Charmane for this wonderful review and the generous rating. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
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This has some lovely concrete winter imagery. I really am just not sure whether the technique is "Leap Linkage." One little nitpick, however: "winters" in the last line needs an apostrophe to show the possessive. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2014


reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
    Thanks Jeanie, I thought I had already fixed winter's, glad you caught it. Glad you enjoyed it. :-) Carolyn