For the Things You Didn't Do
A speaker poem35 total reviews
Comment from PatVallesMangan
You truly spoke very well for them. This poem tells such a terrible story and I thank God that you have brought it to light. The poem may help someone to tell the truth, even when it seems easier to lie. This poem shows what happens, many times, because of the fear of not being believed. I know someone who went through this who has never come to grips with this. The abuse went on for may years and he is still a "family friend." The rhyme and rhythm work very well to tell this horror story. Good luck in the contest. It's a great work poetically, with a strong message. God Bless! Pat
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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You truly spoke very well for them. This poem tells such a terrible story and I thank God that you have brought it to light. The poem may help someone to tell the truth, even when it seems easier to lie. This poem shows what happens, many times, because of the fear of not being believed. I know someone who went through this who has never come to grips with this. The abuse went on for may years and he is still a "family friend." The rhyme and rhythm work very well to tell this horror story. Good luck in the contest. It's a great work poetically, with a strong message. God Bless! Pat
Comment Written 01-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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Thank you for your most understanding and caring thoughts about this situation Pat. I appreciate your kind review of my poem very much.
Comment from Eric1
This is a very well written poem/story for this particular competition my friend, it is truly heartfelt and I really understand where you are coming from with your beautiful words, good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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This is a very well written poem/story for this particular competition my friend, it is truly heartfelt and I really understand where you are coming from with your beautiful words, good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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Thank you for the understanding words Eric, and for reading all the way through this long poem. I also am grateful for the good luck wishes. That means a lot to me.
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You are very welcome my friend.
Comment from tfawcus
You have told this sad story with great empathy and compassion. Such a life-destroying situation as this is hard to imagine.. The burden of guilt on the poor girl must have been well-nigh insufferable.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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You have told this sad story with great empathy and compassion. Such a life-destroying situation as this is hard to imagine.. The burden of guilt on the poor girl must have been well-nigh insufferable.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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I can only imagine, Tony, but I think you are probably right about the guilt she carries. I'm so glad you read this, and glad you understood. Thank you!
Comment from MaggieMcCall
Wow, what a powerful poem about such a horrific and dark topic. You really managed to tell a story and get your point across without sounding preachy. Thank you very much for sharing this!
Maggie
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2014
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Wow, what a powerful poem about such a horrific and dark topic. You really managed to tell a story and get your point across without sounding preachy. Thank you very much for sharing this!
Maggie
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2014
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I'm so thankful that this story poem did come across and did not appear to be preachy. I appreciate so much your encouraging words. Thank you!
Comment from Zue65
This really hurts and your poem was so effective in portraying that hurt as we, the readers understood the guilt of the weaver of lies and the trauma that must have felt by the victim of lies. The lines are fluid and smooth. I enjoyed your poem, god bless.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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This really hurts and your poem was so effective in portraying that hurt as we, the readers understood the guilt of the weaver of lies and the trauma that must have felt by the victim of lies. The lines are fluid and smooth. I enjoyed your poem, god bless.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much for this sensitive review of a difficult poem. This is painful for all involved, which includes the parents, who love both their children and are deeply grieved to see either of them hurt. I appreciate your kind comments very much.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Well if being abused by someone and casting the blame on another isn't hurting someone, then I don't know what is. It would be so difficult to forgive a sibling that betrayed you in such a horrific way, but still, one would have to try. For the only ones we hurt hen we harbor hatred in our hearts is ourselves.
A touching, poignant poem, well rhymed and presented.
Best of luck in the upcoming contest.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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Well if being abused by someone and casting the blame on another isn't hurting someone, then I don't know what is. It would be so difficult to forgive a sibling that betrayed you in such a horrific way, but still, one would have to try. For the only ones we hurt hen we harbor hatred in our hearts is ourselves.
A touching, poignant poem, well rhymed and presented.
Best of luck in the upcoming contest.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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You are so right Dean. An unforgiving spirit can be painfully destructive, and does hurt the one who harbors it more than the unforgiven one. But all in the family are hurt by this and by lies that are also destructive. Thank you so much for your understanding read of this poem and your kind review.
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You're very welcome, and again...
...good luck. :}
Comment from c_lucas
The abuser gets a few moments of pleasure, the abused a life time of pain and rejection. This is very well with a smooth flow of words.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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The abuser gets a few moments of pleasure, the abused a life time of pain and rejection. This is very well with a smooth flow of words.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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Thank you Charlie. I'm grateful for your kind words. MM
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You're welcome, MM. Charlie
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi,
Such a sad, sad story. One all to often happening these day. How sad for the brother wrongly accused. How devastating it had to have been.
A story with great impact, and a beautiful presentation.
Suggestion:: It would be helpful if you enlarged the font. It was difficult to read.
Best of luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*.*)
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2014
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Hi,
Such a sad, sad story. One all to often happening these day. How sad for the brother wrongly accused. How devastating it had to have been.
A story with great impact, and a beautiful presentation.
Suggestion:: It would be helpful if you enlarged the font. It was difficult to read.
Best of luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*.*)
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2014
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Thank you for your sympathetic review Jax. I agree, it is incredibly sad when this happens, and the ripples go on and on too, affecting so many others in the family.
Comment from joeruptak
I sit here amazed that you could write these things down and make me feel your pain God what a burden to carry for years this work touched me deeply on the subject we would all like to ignore the message came across great the writing was superb I shall remember this piece till the day I die God bless you
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2014
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I sit here amazed that you could write these things down and make me feel your pain God what a burden to carry for years this work touched me deeply on the subject we would all like to ignore the message came across great the writing was superb I shall remember this piece till the day I die God bless you
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2014
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Thank you for your compassionate review Joe. I appreciate this so much.
Comment from flamingstar
God, I wish I had a 6 left. I had to read it four times to let it sink in. You told this awful tale flawlessly. What a terrible position for a child to be put in...
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2014
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God, I wish I had a 6 left. I had to read it four times to let it sink in. You told this awful tale flawlessly. What a terrible position for a child to be put in...
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2014
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Thank you for the six wish Flamingstar. I sincerely appreciate your kind review.
