Comment from misscookie

Excellent

Even though if was dangerous and I know you and your brother were afraid.. I'm sure you guys learnt your lesson
I love the part how you saw God in so many things.
Thank you for sharing.
Have a nice week.
Cookte

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014

Thank you for your review.
I know I learned a lesson about fire that day. Boys, I think are more apt to play with fire than girls are.

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, Pat,

Touching story, and revealing. Thank you for sharing.

I just found some typos I thought I'd mention to you.

~ System Glitch ~
The line below == twin brother,== needs to be moved back up with twin brother

~~ You need a space between ==andmany==
~~ You also need a space after this line as well.
and()many dollars worth of hay in the loft.

~~ Need space between ==saidto==
She then said()to me,

I like the poem at the end. Nice touch.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014

Thanks for the review. I see the system glitch and may go back and try to get it right. The poem at the end is only a part of a larger poem, but I wanted the part about my twin to be there.

Comment from The Skys The Limit

Excellent

A great story. Well written. You could even expand on the story. Did the horse make it out okay? I love the poem at the end. Very telling of the closeness of twins. Good writing. Thanks for sharing. Barb @ the Skys The Limit

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 Comment Written 20-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014

Thank you for your review. The horse and the other anilals did make it out of the fire.