When You Are Silent
A Sonnet in Blank Verse32 total reviews
Comment from vfbryant
Your choice of artwork takes us with you into the long night, and your words establish and maintain a tone of bitter-sweet longing throughout the poem. I think that you also express a universal experience; I know I have felt my own love and longing evolve into prayer, finally bringing peace and comfort. This is really a nice piece.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Your choice of artwork takes us with you into the long night, and your words establish and maintain a tone of bitter-sweet longing throughout the poem. I think that you also express a universal experience; I know I have felt my own love and longing evolve into prayer, finally bringing peace and comfort. This is really a nice piece.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much for your thoughts on this poem. I'm glad we share a similar experience, and that you could relate to what I was saying. I appreciate this review very much. Thanks! MM
Comment from Lastamen
I rarely give out 6 star ratings - not because the writers here are not exceptional but rather I look for poetry and stories that touch and move me. This is surely one such work. The longings expressed in this emotional rendering are heartfelt - if they are not real for the writer they certainly are real for this reader. Beautifully articulated.
Till the last amen
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014
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I rarely give out 6 star ratings - not because the writers here are not exceptional but rather I look for poetry and stories that touch and move me. This is surely one such work. The longings expressed in this emotional rendering are heartfelt - if they are not real for the writer they certainly are real for this reader. Beautifully articulated.
Till the last amen
Comment Written 22-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014
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I am so pleased that you felt inclined to give this six stars! That is a huge compliment and I am deeply grateful for the rating, but even more for your kind and most meaningful words. Thank you very, very much. MM
Comment from Connie C
You are such a natural at poetry, Adonna. What a lovely poem this is and a lovely image to accompany it as well. While this appears to be free verse and doesn't need to rhyme, it flows so beautifully that it feels like it rhymes! Great job, as always.
Connie
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014
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You are such a natural at poetry, Adonna. What a lovely poem this is and a lovely image to accompany it as well. While this appears to be free verse and doesn't need to rhyme, it flows so beautifully that it feels like it rhymes! Great job, as always.
Connie
Comment Written 22-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014
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Dear Connie... how I love your lovely reviews. Thank you for this exceptional rating and your kind words too. I think it is the iambic pentameter that makes it feel like a rhymed poem. You would love the class in Blank Verse, I think. Ray is a great teacher.
Comment from JudyS
MissMerri, I enjoyed this read a lot. Wonderful message and thoughts so very true to finding peace. You also chose a perfect picture to go with this. Excellent job. Judy
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014
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MissMerri, I enjoyed this read a lot. Wonderful message and thoughts so very true to finding peace. You also chose a perfect picture to go with this. Excellent job. Judy
Comment Written 22-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much Judy. Your kind review is so welcomed this morning. I'm very glad you enjoyed the poem. MM
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This is so beautiful, Miss Merri, wishes are lovely for those simple things, but prayers are far more important and we know He listens. I really enjoyed this poem. :) Sandra.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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This is so beautiful, Miss Merri, wishes are lovely for those simple things, but prayers are far more important and we know He listens. I really enjoyed this poem. :) Sandra.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Thank you Sandra. I'm very glad we agree and I am glad you shared your thoughts about the poem. Hugs, MM
Comment from RYME4U
Nicely done free verse. I like the train of thought style and the pondering. You have expressed your feelings well and your spirituality shows through. Good job!
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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Nicely done free verse. I like the train of thought style and the pondering. You have expressed your feelings well and your spirituality shows through. Good job!
Comment Written 22-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2014
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This is a most welcome and encouraging review, and I do thank you very much. With deep appreciation, MM ;")
Comment from kiwijenny
Beautiful imagery and even better a timely reminder...wishing isn't praying..
I love your heartfelt prayer and feel the love in this poem
Well done.......
GOD BLESS
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014
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Beautiful imagery and even better a timely reminder...wishing isn't praying..
I love your heartfelt prayer and feel the love in this poem
Well done.......
GOD BLESS
Comment Written 22-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2014
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Thank you for this nice review Jenny. I'm glad you felt love in these lines. God bless you too. MM
Comment from TAB_that's me
This is a beautiful poem. I like the way it starts out wanting someone but then you turn God. Great blank verse:)
~Teresa~
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2014
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This is a beautiful poem. I like the way it starts out wanting someone but then you turn God. Great blank verse:)
~Teresa~
Comment Written 22-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much Teresa!! You should know. :p Your words are most encouraging to me.
Comment from judiverse
This is really beautiful, and can you do iambic pentameter! Excellent. The silence of the night adds to the narrator's feeling of being alone. The narrator's thoughts turn to some loved one far away. The loved one being absent, the narrator turns to God for comfort. As stated in the lovely concluding couplet, "It is the only source of peace I find/when you are silent, and the night is long. Nighttime does bring out those feelings of loneliness. The print is a bit too small for my sensitive eyes. judi
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2014
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This is really beautiful, and can you do iambic pentameter! Excellent. The silence of the night adds to the narrator's feeling of being alone. The narrator's thoughts turn to some loved one far away. The loved one being absent, the narrator turns to God for comfort. As stated in the lovely concluding couplet, "It is the only source of peace I find/when you are silent, and the night is long. Nighttime does bring out those feelings of loneliness. The print is a bit too small for my sensitive eyes. judi
Comment Written 22-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much for these comments, which I found strongly encouraging. I will go and make the print larger. It was 14 point, but with certain fonts, that still looks small, I know. I sincerely appreciate this review. Hugs... MM
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You're very welcome. Hope you can achieve the larger print. judi
Comment from Ben Colder
Hall Mark worthy. I think this is meant to be a soldiers prayer for the one he loves and misses. Perhaps I could use this poem in my novel permitted by thee author .My blessings to you.
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reply by the author on 22-Jul-2014
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Hall Mark worthy. I think this is meant to be a soldiers prayer for the one he loves and misses. Perhaps I could use this poem in my novel permitted by thee author .My blessings to you.
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Comment Written 22-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2014
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Thanks for the affirmation, BC. I like how you interpreted my words, and I would be honored to be a part of your novel. When will it be out?
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The story (The Swing ) is based upon five hometown friends who are drafted into war. 1942-1945. Based upon truth but fiction written for legal purposes. Cross Publishing and I are speaking. Perhaps this winter I can have the story ready for draft. Perhaps spring or summer of next year will be on book shelves. Thank you much. For now I am posting a few chapters to get the audience feel. Not sure if Cross will let me get too far out there.
