The Grass Grows Greener
a poem in rhyming couplets117 total reviews
Comment from Aussie
Gorgeous photo to compliment your wonderful poem that bounced along, hand in hand through wonderland. Children are more wise than we thing, can run rings around our logic. I wonder if they will always be friend - somehow I think they will.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Gorgeous photo to compliment your wonderful poem that bounced along, hand in hand through wonderland. Children are more wise than we thing, can run rings around our logic. I wonder if they will always be friend - somehow I think they will.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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thank you so much, Kay :-) I would bet good money on their staying friends forever :-) Brooke
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, :-) Brooke,
"The Grass Grows Greener" is an excellent poem structured in rhyming couples with good rhyme, the rhyme scheme followed consistently, good meter and figurative language and imagery (grass grows greener). If I have reservations about the poem while they are excellent imagery it is the apparent over use of that phrase and hand in hand .
Preston
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Hi, :-) Brooke,
"The Grass Grows Greener" is an excellent poem structured in rhyming couples with good rhyme, the rhyme scheme followed consistently, good meter and figurative language and imagery (grass grows greener). If I have reservations about the poem while they are excellent imagery it is the apparent over use of that phrase and hand in hand .
Preston
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Preston, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Brooke,
yeah, just wonderful sentiments ring out in this heart inspiring poem... and as usual, the seamless ride on the rhyme and the refrain of 'hand in hand' made this a 'good-time feeling' especially knowing the story that goes along with it... truly a pleasure to read.
Now, I know you should always have a exceptional attached to your poems and I am sorry that I don't offer too many your way, but I know you are being well catered for, so I spread my measly six--sixes to those who sometimes don't get as much attention as you... so I hope you take a little heart in knowing I do knowledge your superior talent and I am always left feeling good from what I have just read... whether whimsical or wisdom filled you hold your top ranking for good reason... so please except my apologies.
With our thoughts we create,
a true connection,
James xx
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Hi Brooke,
yeah, just wonderful sentiments ring out in this heart inspiring poem... and as usual, the seamless ride on the rhyme and the refrain of 'hand in hand' made this a 'good-time feeling' especially knowing the story that goes along with it... truly a pleasure to read.
Now, I know you should always have a exceptional attached to your poems and I am sorry that I don't offer too many your way, but I know you are being well catered for, so I spread my measly six--sixes to those who sometimes don't get as much attention as you... so I hope you take a little heart in knowing I do knowledge your superior talent and I am always left feeling good from what I have just read... whether whimsical or wisdom filled you hold your top ranking for good reason... so please except my apologies.
With our thoughts we create,
a true connection,
James xx
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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James, thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review. It certainly is not for me to dictate how other people allot their six star reviews :-) Brooke
Comment from Aplgwest
This sweet poem does flow with perfect rhyme. The rhyme and lines roll perfectly with the children as they stroll through the green of spring and youth. --Elaine
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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This sweet poem does flow with perfect rhyme. The rhyme and lines roll perfectly with the children as they stroll through the green of spring and youth. --Elaine
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Elaine, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from JB Lynn
When I read the title of the poem, I thought this was going to be about the old adage "The grass grows greener on the other side". I was pleasantly surprised to read your twist on this phrase. You've made it fresh and all your own. The image of holding hands (two coming together to create one) also leads into the couplet form well.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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When I read the title of the poem, I thought this was going to be about the old adage "The grass grows greener on the other side". I was pleasantly surprised to read your twist on this phrase. You've made it fresh and all your own. The image of holding hands (two coming together to create one) also leads into the couplet form well.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, JB :-) Brooke
Comment from Delahay
A simple, sweet, story of love and friendship and how two people can complement each other to make two halves of one whole. A beautiful sentiment well described and written.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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A simple, sweet, story of love and friendship and how two people can complement each other to make two halves of one whole. A beautiful sentiment well described and written.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Ward, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from LoannaLois
What a beautiful tribute to your grandson and his little friend. Wouldn't it be a nice ending for them to stay together? I am so schmaltzy....I truly loved the perfectly written poem. The picture surely added, also.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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What a beautiful tribute to your grandson and his little friend. Wouldn't it be a nice ending for them to stay together? I am so schmaltzy....I truly loved the perfectly written poem. The picture surely added, also.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Lois, I definitely see them staying friends for life :-) Nora comes from a strictly Jewish family, so they won't be staying together in that way, but that's OK since that would seem like incest any way. LOL :-) I so appreciate your generous sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from InterestingRon
Hi Brooke,
What a charming poem with the perfect picture.
It reminded me of how my little sister would walk across the lawn hand-in-hand with her tiny friend. The friend stared at me and asked "Is that your dad?" My sis replied, "that's not my dad, that's my Ron!"
I'll be back with her one day when I pass on.
Thanks for inspiring a lovely memory.
Ron x
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Hi Brooke,
What a charming poem with the perfect picture.
It reminded me of how my little sister would walk across the lawn hand-in-hand with her tiny friend. The friend stared at me and asked "Is that your dad?" My sis replied, "that's not my dad, that's my Ron!"
I'll be back with her one day when I pass on.
Thanks for inspiring a lovely memory.
Ron x
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, Ron, for your review and for sharing that lovely memory :-) Brooke
Comment from rama devi
I like the deceptive simplicity of this--as it reaches for a higher octave with such humble tones...just BEING (as in your first line) is a mystical state! It's the foundation of pure love--and the poem expresses this well--with fine rhymes and smooth flow in a musical cadence, as per the form (minute poem, yes?). In this poem, the repetition device works well and enhances it. Nice alliteration of G and H, too. Stroll and whole is a creative rhyme pair.
Love,
rd
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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I like the deceptive simplicity of this--as it reaches for a higher octave with such humble tones...just BEING (as in your first line) is a mystical state! It's the foundation of pure love--and the poem expresses this well--with fine rhymes and smooth flow in a musical cadence, as per the form (minute poem, yes?). In this poem, the repetition device works well and enhances it. Nice alliteration of G and H, too. Stroll and whole is a creative rhyme pair.
Love,
rd
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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This is not a minute poem, rama devi. A minute poem has syllable count of 8/4/4/4 in each stanza :-) This is just my own form. LOL
Thanks so much for your review :-) Brooke
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Thanks, dear B. I'm a bit fuzzy brained from jet lag still...and adjusting to the humidity here in India! Thanks for reminding me about the syllable count in minute poems. This reads similarly, tough--in terms of musicality! Love, rd
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Humidity in PA is bad enough for me - I can only imagine what you're trying to breathe in :-)
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Ah yes--and the monsoons have started--so there is mold, too! :)
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I'm allergic to mold - guess that seals it. I won't be coming to visit any time soon :-)
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Ah yes, not during monsoon, anyway! :-)) Most welcome, though!
Comment from Just Pete
A pefectly rhymed poem with a real sense of warmth. Repetition works really well and the closeness of the two is cute and heart warming. Congratulations on its well deserved awards. Pete
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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A pefectly rhymed poem with a real sense of warmth. Repetition works really well and the closeness of the two is cute and heart warming. Congratulations on its well deserved awards. Pete
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Pete, thanks so much :-) Brooke
