Majestic Beauty (Revived)
The majestic beauty of the Lord.27 total reviews
Comment from CR Delport
If you're out in nature, especially like in the picture, it is easy to feel near the Creator. But if you're out in the city with nothing but death and destruction around you, it is not always that easy. This is very well written.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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If you're out in nature, especially like in the picture, it is easy to feel near the Creator. But if you're out in the city with nothing but death and destruction around you, it is not always that easy. This is very well written.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Yes, I live in the city but I worked in a quiet place (the library), and i read books all the time. When I go out I am peaceful and I appreciate the beautiful things that are around.
Taking a walk in the park or with my grandchildren is a lot of fun.
The air is so nice and birds sing all the time. One day I went to
the park and the birds were in some kind of squabble and made a lot of noise, I told them to please quiet it down (smile).
Of course when I go out I know there is trouble everywhere and I try real heard to avoid it.
I learned from seeing college students, they live in the cities but they have a different lifestyle.
Also, after reading how Jesus would go to the garden and talk to his Father, it sounded and looked so peaceful enough that when I go to the park I think about Him sitting in the quietness talking to God.
Thanks for reviewing my poem.
Comment from Nosha17
That was a lovely spiritual poem, written from the heart. It is true we have to admire the wonderful works of God and be grateful to be alive. You made excellent choice of imagery and language to express your thoughts. Enjoyable read. Faye
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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That was a lovely spiritual poem, written from the heart. It is true we have to admire the wonderful works of God and be grateful to be alive. You made excellent choice of imagery and language to express your thoughts. Enjoyable read. Faye
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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Comment from The Death
Hi, artist.
Very nice description of the beauty of nature and all the gifts He has endowed us with. I like the simplicity of your words. It sets a serene atmosphere.
Oh Lord! as I pass a pond of water while I walk through the park,
I think of you.
The first line sounds grammatically odd. You don't need to say 'of water', it's understood and needs to be omitted. Use of two 'I' is unnecessary and that line can be tweaked as:
as I glance a sunlit pond while walking through the park,
The word 'sunlit' adds to the setting and also the 'radiance' you talk about here:
I think of your majestic beauty, so radiant for the world to see.
Optional suggestion to use 'too' instead of 'so'. It will be more appealing.
Vivid descriptions here:
Your beauty is in every natural thing that lives-
Flowers, plants and bushes.
You gave them the rain, sunshine,
Rich earth to grow in and
Caring people to tend them.
It nicely develops the theme. Excellent use of R,S,N consonance. Nice touch of spirituality, too.
Very well-voiced closing:
Oh Lord! nurture me,
Shine down on me, and send caring
People to help me grow,
So the world can see your beauty in me.
I like the explicit nature and tone you employ here. You have praised his glory and asked for humanity to flourish and experience His majestic beauty. Good use of R,S consonance.
Nicely done! :)
Regards,
Anupam
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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Hi, artist.
Very nice description of the beauty of nature and all the gifts He has endowed us with. I like the simplicity of your words. It sets a serene atmosphere.
Oh Lord! as I pass a pond of water while I walk through the park,
I think of you.
The first line sounds grammatically odd. You don't need to say 'of water', it's understood and needs to be omitted. Use of two 'I' is unnecessary and that line can be tweaked as:
as I glance a sunlit pond while walking through the park,
The word 'sunlit' adds to the setting and also the 'radiance' you talk about here:
I think of your majestic beauty, so radiant for the world to see.
Optional suggestion to use 'too' instead of 'so'. It will be more appealing.
Vivid descriptions here:
Your beauty is in every natural thing that lives-
Flowers, plants and bushes.
You gave them the rain, sunshine,
Rich earth to grow in and
Caring people to tend them.
It nicely develops the theme. Excellent use of R,S,N consonance. Nice touch of spirituality, too.
Very well-voiced closing:
Oh Lord! nurture me,
Shine down on me, and send caring
People to help me grow,
So the world can see your beauty in me.
I like the explicit nature and tone you employ here. You have praised his glory and asked for humanity to flourish and experience His majestic beauty. Good use of R,S consonance.
Nicely done! :)
Regards,
Anupam
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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If, I haven't thank you for your review and stars, I want to thank you now and excuse my delay. A reviewer is a big
help to a writer.
Comment from dennis0530
This is written in a prayerful mood. The writer shows reverence and spirituality in this poem. Seeing the beauty of nature, the character prays for the same nurturing blessing to help acieve his own growth.
But most of all, praying to be blessed with caring people.
Hoping for the fulfillment of a beneficient human, the writer wishes to project a Christ-like image.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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This is written in a prayerful mood. The writer shows reverence and spirituality in this poem. Seeing the beauty of nature, the character prays for the same nurturing blessing to help acieve his own growth.
But most of all, praying to be blessed with caring people.
Hoping for the fulfillment of a beneficient human, the writer wishes to project a Christ-like image.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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If, I haven't thank you for your review and stars, I want to thank you now and excuse my delay. A reviewer is a big
help to a writer.
Comment from freepass
it was spiritually uplifting and thankful
it was very good
it was Majest Beauty uncovered!
5 very big stars
like your work and great job!
Good luck with this hope it wins a lot of ribbons!
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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it was spiritually uplifting and thankful
it was very good
it was Majest Beauty uncovered!
5 very big stars
like your work and great job!
Good luck with this hope it wins a lot of ribbons!
Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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If, I haven't thank you for your review and stars, I want to thank you now and excuse my delay. A reviewer is a big
help to a writer.
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your very welcome you can review my things too I now have 5 poems they are What a messy house, Phobias, the Boss at Christmas, Why am I the one? I just posted the Mailbox lady
and 2 chapters Quicksilver: Blood runs cold ch 1 Arrival, and ch 2 Who is Hazel Blake? so 4 poems are funny out of 5!
Comment from akulkumol
Your love for nature is beautifully expressed in the poem. The picture matching your lovely thought. I specially, loved the last stanza. Thank for sharing.
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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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Your love for nature is beautifully expressed in the poem. The picture matching your lovely thought. I specially, loved the last stanza. Thank for sharing.
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Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
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Comment from missjosi
Beautiful piece of poetic writing to go with a beautiful picture...................................Lovely work here .....Excellent.........................Warmest wishes to ya :)
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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014
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Beautiful piece of poetic writing to go with a beautiful picture...................................Lovely work here .....Excellent.........................Warmest wishes to ya :)
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Comment Written 05-Jun-2014
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