An April shower of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "In the Hollow of Thy Hand"a challenge of a poem a day for a month
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Comment from l.raven
Carolyn, this is a beautiful poem,...just take the hand of the Lord He will raise you up...show you the way...soooo very nicely written...Luff Linda xxoo
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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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Carolyn, this is a beautiful poem,...just take the hand of the Lord He will raise you up...show you the way...soooo very nicely written...Luff Linda xxoo
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Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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Thank you for the wonderful review and your understanding of the message. Luff you too. :-) Carolyn
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you are so welcome Carolyn...xxoo
Comment from The Death
Hi, Carolyn.
This is a lovely spiritual poem. Simple, but very impacting and the arrangement of your stanzas is interesting as well.
It is like an ode to Him and the glory. The refrain works really and one can easily connect to your thoughts.
These lines sound very pleasing:
In the hollow of Thy hand
There is gentleness and rest
You have used a very different simile in the second verse, where you have compared his hand to be protecting like a hen, who safeguards the chicks.
Thy hand covers me as a hen
would cover her chicks
to protect them from the storm
and perils of this life
You have 'cover' twice here. You may replace the first one with 'surrounds'. Nice use of R consonance and O assonance here.
The last verse is well-toned where you have described His blessings in your life. Your faith in Him comes out strongly here.
Excellent work!
Regards,
Anupam
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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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Hi, Carolyn.
This is a lovely spiritual poem. Simple, but very impacting and the arrangement of your stanzas is interesting as well.
It is like an ode to Him and the glory. The refrain works really and one can easily connect to your thoughts.
These lines sound very pleasing:
In the hollow of Thy hand
There is gentleness and rest
You have used a very different simile in the second verse, where you have compared his hand to be protecting like a hen, who safeguards the chicks.
Thy hand covers me as a hen
would cover her chicks
to protect them from the storm
and perils of this life
You have 'cover' twice here. You may replace the first one with 'surrounds'. Nice use of R consonance and O assonance here.
The last verse is well-toned where you have described His blessings in your life. Your faith in Him comes out strongly here.
Excellent work!
Regards,
Anupam
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Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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Thanks Anupam, for this wonderful and through review. I am always grateful for your observations. I will change the second 'cover' to 'gather' as in Matthew 23.
Have a great day and thanks for following along with this series. :-) Carolyn
