The Heart of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "The Stream"'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway
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Comment from MarjorieAnne
These stanzas present a lovely and imaginative response to the photo. Title is a fitting metaphor for stream of consciousness. Meter is irregular, especially in lines with more than ten syllables. I would suggest rewording so as not to repeat "with" more than once in stanza two. "Waters" in S1 and "Words" and "poets" in S4 need apostrophes.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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These stanzas present a lovely and imaginative response to the photo. Title is a fitting metaphor for stream of consciousness. Meter is irregular, especially in lines with more than ten syllables. I would suggest rewording so as not to repeat "with" more than once in stanza two. "Waters" in S1 and "Words" and "poets" in S4 need apostrophes.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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Thanks MarjoieAnne for the wonderful review and edits. I have changed the form to Free Verse, as I had indeed, too many syllables in some lines. I has also fixed the punctuation. I am glad you enjoyed The Stream. :-) Carolyn
Comment from dmt1967
I like this poem but the last line really got to me 'quietly by the stream he sat with random thought absorbing sounds profound and oh so clear' thank you for sharing
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I like this poem but the last line really got to me 'quietly by the stream he sat with random thought absorbing sounds profound and oh so clear' thank you for sharing
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Comment Written 07-Nov-2013
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I am so happy you enjoyed The Stream, it was a happy one to share. Carolyn
Comment from rouskin
Eye-catching artwork and well penned poem.
Very pleasant to read.
My favorite lines:
Quietly by the stream he sat with random thought
Absorbing sounds profound, and oh so clear
Thank you for sharing and have a nice day.
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Eye-catching artwork and well penned poem.
Very pleasant to read.
My favorite lines:
Quietly by the stream he sat with random thought
Absorbing sounds profound, and oh so clear
Thank you for sharing and have a nice day.
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Comment Written 07-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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I so appreciate your fine review of 'The Stream.' I'm happy you enjoyed it. :-) Carolyn
