Poems By AnnieDawn
Viewing comments for Chapter 93 "Oh No!"My book of poems and stories
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Comment from wordsareus
What a day to go berserk indeed! Although I don't think you intended for your poem to be humorous it did turn that way. Sorry you had such an awful day!
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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What a day to go berserk indeed! Although I don't think you intended for your poem to be humorous it did turn that way. Sorry you had such an awful day!
Comment Written 05-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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Thanks so much for your comments and review.
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was funny. I enjoyed the rhyming and the rhythm was good and solid. The imagery and action were great. Loved the line about wanting the sister's hair. The sister straightens hers and Annie curls hers. How very true to life. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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This was funny. I enjoyed the rhyming and the rhythm was good and solid. The imagery and action were great. Loved the line about wanting the sister's hair. The sister straightens hers and Annie curls hers. How very true to life. Nicely done.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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Thanks for your comments and review.
Comment from Sarah Butterfly
Good rhyme used throughout this humorous poem. It is indeed so, people with curls don't want them and people without curls envy those with. Nicely written poem.
Kind regards
Sarah
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Good rhyme used throughout this humorous poem. It is indeed so, people with curls don't want them and people without curls envy those with. Nicely written poem.
Kind regards
Sarah
Comment Written 05-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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Thanks for your review and comments.
Comment from Righteous Riter
This piece contains a message that adds a little humor. Good mono-rhyming piece that holds my attention from beginning to end. Good perfect rhyming with head/dread...fair/hair...door/floor...jerk/perk. This piece speaks to my heart the words bad hair day.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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This piece contains a message that adds a little humor. Good mono-rhyming piece that holds my attention from beginning to end. Good perfect rhyming with head/dread...fair/hair...door/floor...jerk/perk. This piece speaks to my heart the words bad hair day.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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Thanks for your comments. review an
Comment from Lulube
Cute story. How an image can change oneself from straight hair to curly. Message here have another in supply at all times. lol
lulube
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Cute story. How an image can change oneself from straight hair to curly. Message here have another in supply at all times. lol
lulube
Comment Written 05-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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Thanks for your review. I love to read your comments. A lot of them have ideas for more poetry.
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welcome
lulube
Comment from Eleanor Buron
I have days like this - the handle breaks off the microwave, the grounds got in the coffee and I sprayed deodorant on my hair. I really enjoyed your poem and there is a ring of sincerity to all your lamentations within the lines. I had a good laugh. I can feel the frustration and the panic of not wanting to be seen. You did make it real.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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I have days like this - the handle breaks off the microwave, the grounds got in the coffee and I sprayed deodorant on my hair. I really enjoyed your poem and there is a ring of sincerity to all your lamentations within the lines. I had a good laugh. I can feel the frustration and the panic of not wanting to be seen. You did make it real.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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Thanks for your review. I love to read your comments. A lot of them have ideas for more poetry.
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;) Keep writing, poet. You have a knack for being able to put humor in your writing. Nice talent.
Comment from Martin Chan
A very nice poem " Oh No!" written about the daily routines before going to work. It is nicely composed in rhyming quatrains and described in detail. No wonder it is a good poem because it is a true story.
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A very nice poem " Oh No!" written about the daily routines before going to work. It is nicely composed in rhyming quatrains and described in detail. No wonder it is a good poem because it is a true story.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2013
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Thanks for your review. I love to read your comments. A lot of them have ideas for more poetry.
Comment from arsinBW
I know this is humor but the subject was a little weak in my opinion and you also used the word "more" at the end of two lines so close together.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2013
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I know this is humor but the subject was a little weak in my opinion and you also used the word "more" at the end of two lines so close together.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2013
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I am sorry that you did not like my poem. Sometimes it is difficult to review when you don't like an article. I appreciate all reviews and comments and will go back to my poem and see if thee is something that I need to revise.
Comment from michaelcahill
as a dude that it is a miracle to get to comb his hair I don't relate. but, having adored woman all my life I have seen this unusual phenomenon many times. I don't understand but, I know this is where I rush to the store and but a curling iron (whatever that is). that is to be followed by hugs and words of understanding learned from watching Oprah. "Her self esteem is stuck on jerk." what a great classic line. hahaha! this is a great piece. flows like butter and funny from beginning to end. I am sorry about your curling iron and would be happy to get you one. NOW!mike
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as a dude that it is a miracle to get to comb his hair I don't relate. but, having adored woman all my life I have seen this unusual phenomenon many times. I don't understand but, I know this is where I rush to the store and but a curling iron (whatever that is). that is to be followed by hugs and words of understanding learned from watching Oprah. "Her self esteem is stuck on jerk." what a great classic line. hahaha! this is a great piece. flows like butter and funny from beginning to end. I am sorry about your curling iron and would be happy to get you one. NOW!mike
Comment Written 04-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2013
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Thanks so much for you comments and review. It tickles me to read some of you all's comments. I love it and thanks again.
Comment from denhagan
This is a nice poem, written in the quatrain style with good rhythm and rhyming throughout the poem, about an incident in the author's life where her curling iron breaks.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2013
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This is a nice poem, written in the quatrain style with good rhythm and rhyming throughout the poem, about an incident in the author's life where her curling iron breaks.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2013
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Thank you so very much for your review and comments.
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You're welcome Annie,
Dennis
