Haiku (Succulence)
thirsty31 total reviews
Comment from Sasha
This is lovely. You have done a marvelous job with this. I especially like play on words with 'dew'. I enjoyed this on immensely.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
This is lovely. You have done a marvelous job with this. I especially like play on words with 'dew'. I enjoyed this on immensely.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Thanks Smurphie!
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Thanks Smurphie!
Comment from gaangel62
You say so much in 10 words....this an excellent 5-7-5 poem....I have never had any success with these poems, but yours is excellent....thanks for sharing....Hugs...Angie
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
You say so much in 10 words....this an excellent 5-7-5 poem....I have never had any success with these poems, but yours is excellent....thanks for sharing....Hugs...Angie
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Thanks Angie. I thrive on the use of a few words painting a picture beyond an image.
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Thanks Angie. I thrive on the use of a few words painting a picture beyond an image.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Jewel,
You have penned a fine haiku and one I enjoyed reading more than once. One must remember haiku allows no caps so you need to fix that. The rose and colors are smashing and you last line is creative. Well done....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
Hi Jewel,
You have penned a fine haiku and one I enjoyed reading more than once. One must remember haiku allows no caps so you need to fix that. The rose and colors are smashing and you last line is creative. Well done....blessings, chey
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Oh wow, I hadn't written one in so long I'd forgottenall the rules! haha
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Oh wow, I hadn't written one in so long I'd forgottenall the rules! haha
Comment from Dean Kuch
Ah, excellent, Poetic Visionary. "Falling in dew time..." What a lovely play on words. And, your presentation, with the gorgeous pink rose emblazoned against that stark, black ebony background makes for a visual treat for the eyes, as well.
The entire piece is simply outstanding.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
Ah, excellent, Poetic Visionary. "Falling in dew time..." What a lovely play on words. And, your presentation, with the gorgeous pink rose emblazoned against that stark, black ebony background makes for a visual treat for the eyes, as well.
The entire piece is simply outstanding.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Thank you Dean!
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Thank you Dean!
Comment from Tonulak
This could apply to many things, fruit, an idea, a relationship....In a few words yu got to the very juicy core of it all....Great job--Ted
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
This could apply to many things, fruit, an idea, a relationship....In a few words yu got to the very juicy core of it all....Great job--Ted
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Juicy indeed, Ted. Thank you
Comment from Darkhorse555
that picture in itself in the softness of colour sprinkled dew
comes saturated in such gentleness beautiful to the eye excellent piece
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
that picture in itself in the softness of colour sprinkled dew
comes saturated in such gentleness beautiful to the eye excellent piece
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Thanks so much.
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Thanks so much.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, poetic visionary, i enjoyed reading this haiku and that picture seems like the rose petals are just drinking in the water. it's beautiful
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
this is very well written, poetic visionary, i enjoyed reading this haiku and that picture seems like the rose petals are just drinking in the water. it's beautiful
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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thank you
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thank you
Comment from Gungalo
Saturation comes
signs of gentle persuasion
falling in dew time
What a tidy little write this is. The dew time is now and it is beautiful. Sigh.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
Saturation comes
signs of gentle persuasion
falling in dew time
What a tidy little write this is. The dew time is now and it is beautiful. Sigh.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Thanks sweets!
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Thanks sweets!
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Sigh.
Comment from Matoshka
Your words and picture are so delicate and full of grace. I loved hot this felt in my heart. So gentle and full of peace. Blessings
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
Your words and picture are so delicate and full of grace. I loved hot this felt in my heart. So gentle and full of peace. Blessings
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Thanks so much, Matoshka!
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You are so welcome, it was a joy to read. Blessings
Comment from adewpearl
You do take stunning photos :-)
Your poem is in excellent 5/7/5 format
nice alliteration in saturation/signs
I love the flow of saturation and the idea of the dew persuading the flower to bloom
and what wonderful play on words in dew time/due time - I'm still smiling :-) Brooke
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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
You do take stunning photos :-)
Your poem is in excellent 5/7/5 format
nice alliteration in saturation/signs
I love the flow of saturation and the idea of the dew persuading the flower to bloom
and what wonderful play on words in dew time/due time - I'm still smiling :-) Brooke
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Oh good. Haikus are a challenge I love to meet!
So happy you found this smile worthy! Thank you for your kind review!