Moan
A Moan-Oh-Tetra...39 total reviews
Comment from Ankh
Lol it is not my retinas that had issues!
After reading this I am wondering just what the hell I am doing sitting here infront of my screen. I should be making some lady happy. Nice work once again
Seth x
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2013
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Lol it is not my retinas that had issues!
After reading this I am wondering just what the hell I am doing sitting here infront of my screen. I should be making some lady happy. Nice work once again
Seth x
Comment Written 05-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2013
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Thanks honey, glad I could give you some inspiration to make your way BACK towards the opposite sex for some HARD work! Hahaha
Cheers P
xxx
Comment from A TARNISHED KNIGHT
My my
I would play your body
It would be no sin
My tongue will flicker
like a fine tuned violin
Peace in the Knight
For he has no phone
The silence broken
By the passion of a moan
When the daylight comes
To scare away the night
He's still excited to see
Your breast of alabaster white
So why not write
Answer to this one
For I do think
It would be fun
HEHEHE
Now if this was Christmas time you could write about your "Knight Before Christmas"
Now bet you never got an answer to one of your poems like this
TK
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2013
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My my
I would play your body
It would be no sin
My tongue will flicker
like a fine tuned violin
Peace in the Knight
For he has no phone
The silence broken
By the passion of a moan
When the daylight comes
To scare away the night
He's still excited to see
Your breast of alabaster white
So why not write
Answer to this one
For I do think
It would be fun
HEHEHE
Now if this was Christmas time you could write about your "Knight Before Christmas"
Now bet you never got an answer to one of your poems like this
TK
Comment Written 05-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2013
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OOOh what a review....I've had a few rhymers in response on the odd occasion but nothing quite this playful.
MANY thanks, I very much appreciate your participation in the obvious "event" of a lifetime! LOL
Cheers P
x
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AH YES SOME OF WHAT I WRITE IS A BIT TO MUCH FOR HEAR EVEN GIVING WARNINGS STILL CAN MAKE IT DANGEROUS LOL I must admit what I write it just a playful song for the imagination to play along Think I MAY HAVE TO MAKE MY REPLY A STANS D ALONE WITH A FEW TWEAKS AND TURNS SEE WHAT THE KNIGHT HAS TO OFFER
TK
Comment from adewpearl
solid use of mono-rhyming
effective use of the echoed refrain line
good alliteration in make me moan
and in trek is tough and in face those fears
good descriptive detail that has excellent sensory and sensual appeal
my spring has sprung, the birds have flown - couldn't help but smile there :-) I love the speaker's enthusiasm in enjoying this experience :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2013
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solid use of mono-rhyming
effective use of the echoed refrain line
good alliteration in make me moan
and in trek is tough and in face those fears
good descriptive detail that has excellent sensory and sensual appeal
my spring has sprung, the birds have flown - couldn't help but smile there :-) I love the speaker's enthusiasm in enjoying this experience :-) Brooke
Comment Written 05-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2013
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Thanks Brooke, I really appreciate you living vicariously through this sensual experience. Haha
Most enjoyable say what? LMAO thanks so much...I knew there could be a bit of trouble in paradise with the reactions to this one.
It appears there are many out there who infact DO enjoy a good moan or at best listening to someone else drone on about it.
Cheers and thanks for stopping by.
Phillippa xo
Comment from Rondeno
You'll wheedle, whine and whimper hard,
and soon the sap will drop his guard.
Then, once he's netted and committed,
vulnerable, spongy-witted,
you'll spring the thing Kerr sprung on Gough.
you'll tell the fool to bugger off.
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You'll wheedle, whine and whimper hard,
and soon the sap will drop his guard.
Then, once he's netted and committed,
vulnerable, spongy-witted,
you'll spring the thing Kerr sprung on Gough.
you'll tell the fool to bugger off.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2013
Comment from Spiritual Echo
I can't afford another six, but be assured, you've earned another.
This so wonderfully erotic and ends with such a good laugh that I'm now even prepared to go back to my lowly chores.
See...you're an inspiration.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2013
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I can't afford another six, but be assured, you've earned another.
This so wonderfully erotic and ends with such a good laugh that I'm now even prepared to go back to my lowly chores.
See...you're an inspiration.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2013
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Haha thanks so much Ingrid...some TWAT actually gave me a four.
I think he was jealous HE didn't get to make me moan! Hahahaha
Now get back to those chores and stop moanin'. LMAO
Cybeehugs
Phillippa xoxo
Comment from Jaq Cee
"Your tongue divine, my plot you've sewn
My spring has sprung, the birds have flown
I know you're hard, but now I've blown
You're on your own, you're on your own!"
Lmao Pip, what are you like? This is a cracking poem and it gave me a much needed laugh. Very clever mono-rhyming and a lovely rhythm.
I'm with you on the tongues by the way ;-) Hugs n stuff, Jaq xxxx
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2013
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"Your tongue divine, my plot you've sewn
My spring has sprung, the birds have flown
I know you're hard, but now I've blown
You're on your own, you're on your own!"
Lmao Pip, what are you like? This is a cracking poem and it gave me a much needed laugh. Very clever mono-rhyming and a lovely rhythm.
I'm with you on the tongues by the way ;-) Hugs n stuff, Jaq xxxx
Comment Written 05-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2013
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Hey Jaqualishadish...had to clear the cobwebs outta this one...glad you liked my moaning...haha. All hail "Thy Phallic Clone" hahahahaha Hugs Pippalish xxx
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All hail indeed Pippalicious. :) I see it didn't go down(pun intended) well with everyone ;-) Shame really :) lmao
Catch ya soon girlie xxx
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No...LOL
It seems there is a sponge bob or two in the ranks. LMAO
No...just one really hahaha He's probably jealous he didn't get a crack at my horizontal smile. LMAO Shame, sister...shame. LMAO LMAO Hugs and I sent you a screed by pm just then hun.
X
Pippalish
Comment from cvcopac
What's good for the gander's good for the goose. I know the ladies are loving this one. I'm thinking the front man for KISS, or Pee Wee Herman, of course all about flying birds, spring mushrooms and things that's blown. Kenny
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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What's good for the gander's good for the goose. I know the ladies are loving this one. I'm thinking the front man for KISS, or Pee Wee Herman, of course all about flying birds, spring mushrooms and things that's blown. Kenny
Comment Written 05-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Awww Kenneth, thanks so much and yes, da ladies are having a lovely treat. Your sixer is appreciated as so is Mr. Gene Simmons...mmmmm all hail the tongue.....LOL
Cheers P
xx
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hahahahaha - this time I'm laughing my ass off! I hate to tell you what else I'm thinking of doing...this turned me on in more ways than one. Oh, just smack my smutty face, lol.
Favorite lines: with one skill you'll need to hone
let tongue become they phallic clone
And of course the last two lines are
are absolutely hysterical, you selfish
bitch, hee hee
The Smut Queen is back! There is a God after all!
Big Cyber Hug,
Lou
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Hahahahaha - this time I'm laughing my ass off! I hate to tell you what else I'm thinking of doing...this turned me on in more ways than one. Oh, just smack my smutty face, lol.
Favorite lines: with one skill you'll need to hone
let tongue become they phallic clone
And of course the last two lines are
are absolutely hysterical, you selfish
bitch, hee hee
The Smut Queen is back! There is a God after all!
Big Cyber Hug,
Lou
Comment Written 05-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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LOL thanks so much my cybeesmutty mate...glad you liked this you dirty bitch! LOL Your turn! Haha
Glad you could enjoy a little moan time...seems like ALL the ladies loved this...GO figure! LMAO
Hugs C.P.
xxx
Comment from vapros
Man, what a concept! I've got mine, so good luck with yours, and don't let the swinging door hit you in the ass. The poem is graphic, erotic and well-engineered. 'My spring has sprung, the birds have flown' leaves no doubt about where you have been for the last 30 seconds. Well done, but a dirty trick, nonetheless. Watch out next time.
v
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Man, what a concept! I've got mine, so good luck with yours, and don't let the swinging door hit you in the ass. The poem is graphic, erotic and well-engineered. 'My spring has sprung, the birds have flown' leaves no doubt about where you have been for the last 30 seconds. Well done, but a dirty trick, nonetheless. Watch out next time.
v
Comment Written 05-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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What a perceptive review. What do you mean next time though? LOL
I'm getting a little of my own back...the ratio is pretty sad, trust me. He deserves to miss out a whole lot more yet. Hahahaha
Many thanks for stopping by.
Cheers P
Comment from Carrie Carson
I'm just grateful that I have an excellent memory. I NEVER thought that married life meant less sex than being single...live and learn I guess.
Girl or not, you must have balls to post this... :) Carrie
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2013
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I'm just grateful that I have an excellent memory. I NEVER thought that married life meant less sex than being single...live and learn I guess.
Girl or not, you must have balls to post this... :) Carrie
Comment Written 05-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2013
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Oh their f**kin' huge mate! LMAO Thanks for stopping in...hopefully for a "moan" or two! hahahaha Hugs P xo
