Henrietta Meets Jumbo
A picture inspired children's poem40 total reviews
Comment from Douglas Goff
Ah, Henrietta the hen's perspective of an elephant. Very cute indeed.
I read this to my nine year old, Beth and she liked it so I think you hit this one over the fence.
Nice work!
D
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2023
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Ah, Henrietta the hen's perspective of an elephant. Very cute indeed.
I read this to my nine year old, Beth and she liked it so I think you hit this one over the fence.
Nice work!
D
Comment Written 23-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2023
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Thank you Douglas, I glad you nine year old liked. I wrote it for children but we don't have many on this site.
Beth
Comment from marion
Hi Beth
What a delight. This is right up my alley. I love reading poetry like this. The opening line grabbed me instantly:
Miss Hettie Hen is a nosy chick,
I look at the word chick with two meanings!
I am sure this will have had more six star reviews apart from my own.
Love waking up in the morning, do the odd review before my writing begins and hello, see and read something as bright and sunny as this.
Marion.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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Hi Beth
What a delight. This is right up my alley. I love reading poetry like this. The opening line grabbed me instantly:
Miss Hettie Hen is a nosy chick,
I look at the word chick with two meanings!
I am sure this will have had more six star reviews apart from my own.
Love waking up in the morning, do the odd review before my writing begins and hello, see and read something as bright and sunny as this.
Marion.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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Hi Marion,
Thanks so much for the lovely six star review. It's gotten a few others and it was such fun to write. I'm so glad it tickled your fancy.
Beth
Comment from Spitfire
What a cute story that could also be classified as a children's poem. Love the idea of a gossipy chicken. LOL description of elephant sucking up grain through his nose.
Easy to see how this would alarm little ones.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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What a cute story that could also be classified as a children's poem. Love the idea of a gossipy chicken. LOL description of elephant sucking up grain through his nose.
Easy to see how this would alarm little ones.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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Thank you so much for the review and the nice comments. I'm glad you liked it.
Beth
Comment from rtobaygo
Great rhyming and cadence. Your main character shared her views based on coming across one elephant quite well. A happy poem as it brought smiles to my face as I tried to imagine what would a chicken do if confronted by an elephant.
Take care,
Ray
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Great rhyming and cadence. Your main character shared her views based on coming across one elephant quite well. A happy poem as it brought smiles to my face as I tried to imagine what would a chicken do if confronted by an elephant.
Take care,
Ray
Comment Written 29-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Thank you Ray. I really appreciate the review and comments and I'm so glad it made you smile.
Beth
Comment from Indie Skreet
this is a great fun read which rhymes perfectly and is a good smooth read ..............................enjoyed very much, so well done for this one, Indie
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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this is a great fun read which rhymes perfectly and is a good smooth read ..............................enjoyed very much, so well done for this one, Indie
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Thank you Indie. I really appreciate your review and I'm so glad you enjoyed this.
Beth
Comment from donaldww
A chicken meets an elephant, and immediately passes on the information about her discovery to her friends.
Of course, they can't wait for the elephant to leave, as it is eating all of their food.
Cheers,
DW
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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A chicken meets an elephant, and immediately passes on the information about her discovery to her friends.
Of course, they can't wait for the elephant to leave, as it is eating all of their food.
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Thank you Donald for the five star review. I really appreciate it and your comments.
Beth
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
This is wonderful and gets my first new six!
>>Her gossip, she
Remove comma.
I lovvve your description of the elephant, whose "nose hung past his knees".
>> He vacuums his food up through his nose
and I'm pretty sure he cheats
LOL! Terrific!
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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This is wonderful and gets my first new six!
>>Her gossip, she
Remove comma.
I lovvve your description of the elephant, whose "nose hung past his knees".
>> He vacuums his food up through his nose
and I'm pretty sure he cheats
LOL! Terrific!
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Thank you Phyllis, I feel very honored to get your first six. Thanks also for the head up on the misplaced comma. I'm so glad you like this poem.
Beth
Comment from adewpearl
What a fantastic photo - no wonder it inspired you :-)
good use of abcb rhyming
excellent use of enjambment to make your story flow
great humor when the Rooster's alarm got stuck on snooze
good alliteration too :-)
excellent description of the elephant
what a fun perspective that the chickens would not want to have to share their food with him and his vacuum-like eating abilities LOL :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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What a fantastic photo - no wonder it inspired you :-)
good use of abcb rhyming
excellent use of enjambment to make your story flow
great humor when the Rooster's alarm got stuck on snooze
good alliteration too :-)
excellent description of the elephant
what a fun perspective that the chickens would not want to have to share their food with him and his vacuum-like eating abilities LOL :-) Brooke
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Thank you Brooke. A review like that from you is very special. I'm so glad you like the humor. I do appreciate it.
Beth
Comment from josieg521
My grandson expressed the same feelings as Miss Hettie Hen when we went to the circus years ago. Your poem was very funny and definitely expresses the thoughts of kids as well as farm animals. Good job.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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My grandson expressed the same feelings as Miss Hettie Hen when we went to the circus years ago. Your poem was very funny and definitely expresses the thoughts of kids as well as farm animals. Good job.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Thank you so much for the review and great comments. I'm so glad you thought it was funny. It was fun to write.
Beth
Comment from vapros
Five stars for an entertaining account of Miss Hettie Hen's visit to the circus grounds. You kept it humorous all the way, and you reported Hettie's reaction to the elephant with great imagination. Well done.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Five stars for an entertaining account of Miss Hettie Hen's visit to the circus grounds. You kept it humorous all the way, and you reported Hettie's reaction to the elephant with great imagination. Well done.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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I really appreciate the five star review and the positive comments. I'm glad you found it entertaining.
Beth