You Bring Out Me
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
I was saving this six for later, but your poem is so awesome I had to go ahead and use it. WOW!!! I am impressed with the flow and the different emotions we all share.
reply by the author on 06-May-2013
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I was saving this six for later, but your poem is so awesome I had to go ahead and use it. WOW!!! I am impressed with the flow and the different emotions we all share.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 06-May-2013
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Thank you so very much for your most kind review~Debbie
Comment from philogy
A truly wonderful poem! Your repeating line sits well, your imagery of the ideas that someone brings out in you is nicely varied, the verses and lines flow into each other and stayed fresh by varying the stanza length. Long poems are good when written well because sometimes you don't want them to stop. This is one of those. Very happy to have read this!
Regards, phill
reply by the author on 06-May-2013
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A truly wonderful poem! Your repeating line sits well, your imagery of the ideas that someone brings out in you is nicely varied, the verses and lines flow into each other and stayed fresh by varying the stanza length. Long poems are good when written well because sometimes you don't want them to stop. This is one of those. Very happy to have read this!
Regards, phill
Comment Written 25-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 06-May-2013
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Thank you so very much for your most kind review~Debbie
Comment from Staplesque
This is excellent and extremely beautiful. I can't really offer any criticism, except POSSIBLY, maybe, changing either the animal in the fear stanza or the animal in the pain stanza to a specific animal (fox, wolf, bear, anything you want) just so there aren't two so close together. Really it is great though, and honestly I hate to criticize at all! I love your imagery and descriptions and the use of colors as metaphors/similes. Great job!
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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This is excellent and extremely beautiful. I can't really offer any criticism, except POSSIBLY, maybe, changing either the animal in the fear stanza or the animal in the pain stanza to a specific animal (fox, wolf, bear, anything you want) just so there aren't two so close together. Really it is great though, and honestly I hate to criticize at all! I love your imagery and descriptions and the use of colors as metaphors/similes. Great job!
Comment Written 25-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Thank you so very much. I will take a look at that--good idea. Glad you enjoyed~Debbie
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a beautiful piece of free verse poetry.
I think it is a love poem because it is usually a lover and soul-mate that can draw out the very best in anyone. very great flow. kudos
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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This is a beautiful piece of free verse poetry.
I think it is a love poem because it is usually a lover and soul-mate that can draw out the very best in anyone. very great flow. kudos
Comment Written 25-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Thank you so very much~Debbie
Comment from Judy Swanson
Debbie, this is absolutely stunning! I had just a few minutes to spare so thought I review a few things that weren't part of senryu class; and there was your wonderful poem on the front page. I love it! There is so much concrete imagery to define each abstract human emotion that I feel full. Full of pleasure, full of fun, full of healing, full of thinking, full of the love of life. I swim through sensory stimulation - soft peach petals, the strength of the lion, fire, ice, depression, storms, spice, daffodils, snow-melt, bunnies in fresh cut sweet smelling grass, and the supple willow.
I enjoy the short, tight Japanese forms - but man, I love to be taken on a sensual journey like this, and end up in awe of all of life.
Thanks so much for sharing.
Judy
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Debbie, this is absolutely stunning! I had just a few minutes to spare so thought I review a few things that weren't part of senryu class; and there was your wonderful poem on the front page. I love it! There is so much concrete imagery to define each abstract human emotion that I feel full. Full of pleasure, full of fun, full of healing, full of thinking, full of the love of life. I swim through sensory stimulation - soft peach petals, the strength of the lion, fire, ice, depression, storms, spice, daffodils, snow-melt, bunnies in fresh cut sweet smelling grass, and the supple willow.
I enjoy the short, tight Japanese forms - but man, I love to be taken on a sensual journey like this, and end up in awe of all of life.
Thanks so much for sharing.
Judy
Comment Written 25-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Thank you so very much, Judy. I don't write free verse, but this one wrote itself. Thank you so very much, my friend~Debbie
Comment from JW
Nice. You did a good job writing this.
In reading your poem, one cannot help but wonder - how many Me's does a person have inside?
Thanks for sharing this. JW
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Nice. You did a good job writing this.
In reading your poem, one cannot help but wonder - how many Me's does a person have inside?
Thanks for sharing this. JW
Comment Written 25-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Thanks so much, Jonathon. Take care, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Righteous Riter
Although this piece is fairly long, it holds a great, powerful and effective message. This piece lit a fire in me that just made me want to get up and do something in confidence and courage. This piece really moved me. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Although this piece is fairly long, it holds a great, powerful and effective message. This piece lit a fire in me that just made me want to get up and do something in confidence and courage. This piece really moved me. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Thank you and glad you found it inspiring. Have a blessed day~Debbie
Comment from Gungalo
You bring out the wonder in me
the first daffodil of spring to open
beside a melting drift of snow
If I could bring out just one thing in you Debbie it would be this.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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You bring out the wonder in me
the first daffodil of spring to open
beside a melting drift of snow
If I could bring out just one thing in you Debbie it would be this.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Thank you--I agree this one is so very important in life~Debbie
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Smile Debbie.
Comment from rjuselius
this is a brilliant little piece of poetry! i love that you list all the things your soulmate brings out of you.
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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this is a brilliant little piece of poetry! i love that you list all the things your soulmate brings out of you.
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
Comment Written 25-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Thank you so very much for your kind and thoughtful review~Debbie
Comment from Black_Oxygen
Well Done ~ Debbie
This poetry displays the many shades and pettles of Debbie.
The words are descriptive and frame a clear picture. It
held my interest from start to finish. The attached photo
is a befitting accent that enhances the message. Thank You
for your creation.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Well Done ~ Debbie
This poetry displays the many shades and pettles of Debbie.
The words are descriptive and frame a clear picture. It
held my interest from start to finish. The attached photo
is a befitting accent that enhances the message. Thank You
for your creation.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Thank you so very much for your kind and thoughtful review~Debbie
