Love Songs For Every Heart
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Comment from Alaskastory
'Set Free' is heartfelt with every line as one struggles to adjust in a changed relationship. I enjoy the rhythm of the lines, the rhyming is really nice too, and mostly the ending with optimism. A super post, MissM.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2012
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'Set Free' is heartfelt with every line as one struggles to adjust in a changed relationship. I enjoy the rhythm of the lines, the rhyming is really nice too, and mostly the ending with optimism. A super post, MissM.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2012
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MissA my lovely Alaskan ice queen! Thank you for this amazing review. I'm glad you liked it, and glad you didn't chastise me for taking on another subject I know too little about. I seem to have a need to put myself in others' shoes. So relieved to find I evidently succeeded to some degree at least. Not wanting to nag you, but I have to ask again, when will you post something?? I miss your stories! Oh... And I do thank you heartily for the extra star. That is SO kind of you!
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I guess I am thoroughly blocked. Whenever I consider editing an old story or come up with an idea, I let it die. Maybe I'll get inspired in the new year. Luv...
Comment from Titanx9
I think you captured loss. In a divorce, it's probably worse than death because the person you once love is still alive and in most cases you hate him or her. I think these few lines sum things very well, because a lot of time the feeling and emotions are idealized:
"But when I woke and realized
you'd been my dream, idealized,
I found new strength, and could begin again...
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I think you captured loss. In a divorce, it's probably worse than death because the person you once love is still alive and in most cases you hate him or her. I think these few lines sum things very well, because a lot of time the feeling and emotions are idealized:
"But when I woke and realized
you'd been my dream, idealized,
I found new strength, and could begin again...
Comment Written 16-Dec-2012
Comment from Maureen's Pen
I think you do indeed understand and feel what it is like. This poem proves it. Memories lost, love given up, a new life to find. Well penned and filled with realizations of life after divorce.
Thanks for sharing. Well penned as always, and quite thought provoking too...you had me pondering for awhile.
Happy Holidays.
Maureen
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I think you do indeed understand and feel what it is like. This poem proves it. Memories lost, love given up, a new life to find. Well penned and filled with realizations of life after divorce.
Thanks for sharing. Well penned as always, and quite thought provoking too...you had me pondering for awhile.
Happy Holidays.
Maureen
Comment Written 15-Dec-2012
Comment from forestport12
A vulnerability that shows. Nice flow of words that capture the somber sense of the poem. Part of good poetry is to explore places in the heart you've never been. Emily Dickinson? Wasn't she amazing how she wrote with a limited world view?
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A vulnerability that shows. Nice flow of words that capture the somber sense of the poem. Part of good poetry is to explore places in the heart you've never been. Emily Dickinson? Wasn't she amazing how she wrote with a limited world view?
Comment Written 15-Dec-2012
Comment from artemis53
What a beautiful write, MissMerri and very similar to something I am struggling with at this moment. "For life is not a perfect dream and rarely are things as they seem,
but dreams still have a place where hearts are free." It could not have been said any better.
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What a beautiful write, MissMerri and very similar to something I am struggling with at this moment. "For life is not a perfect dream and rarely are things as they seem,
but dreams still have a place where hearts are free." It could not have been said any better.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2012
Comment from mtnspirit
Hi MissMerri,
As I read your poem I felt several stirring emotions. I felt saddness, hope, and finally acceptance. Your poem is well written with a smooth flow and the artwork is an excellent fit with your words. Thank you for sharing your feelings.
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Hi MissMerri,
As I read your poem I felt several stirring emotions. I felt saddness, hope, and finally acceptance. Your poem is well written with a smooth flow and the artwork is an excellent fit with your words. Thank you for sharing your feelings.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2012
Comment from missy98writer
MissMerri,
Your poem is superbly written with colorful imagery painted by your pen.
The art work you used is priceless of the bird in flight.
In your poem you used excellent rhyme and meter.
Your poem is mourning a significant other feeling
sad, but resolved letting the mourning go to move on
In life.
In your poem you used very fine alliteration: "You promised you, live our lives, tried to, changes come, there in the, as if we were as we, when I woke & gratitude for glorious,"
You used great metaphors: "revealed love in your heart, felt your heart, beat next to mine, found new strength, life is not a perfect dream, hearts are free, In memory, I hold you still."
I enjoyed your last stanza:
For life is not a perfect dream
and rarely are things as they seem,
but dreams still have a place where hearts are free.
In memory, I hold you still
and know perhaps I always will,
in gratitude for glorious liberty.
I'd recommend your food for thought poem to other reviewers .
Keep on writing creatively.
Please have a Happy Holidays,
Melissa.
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MissMerri,
Your poem is superbly written with colorful imagery painted by your pen.
The art work you used is priceless of the bird in flight.
In your poem you used excellent rhyme and meter.
Your poem is mourning a significant other feeling
sad, but resolved letting the mourning go to move on
In life.
In your poem you used very fine alliteration: "You promised you, live our lives, tried to, changes come, there in the, as if we were as we, when I woke & gratitude for glorious,"
You used great metaphors: "revealed love in your heart, felt your heart, beat next to mine, found new strength, life is not a perfect dream, hearts are free, In memory, I hold you still."
I enjoyed your last stanza:
For life is not a perfect dream
and rarely are things as they seem,
but dreams still have a place where hearts are free.
In memory, I hold you still
and know perhaps I always will,
in gratitude for glorious liberty.
I'd recommend your food for thought poem to other reviewers .
Keep on writing creatively.
Please have a Happy Holidays,
Melissa.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2012
Comment from c_lucas
When a love fails, bless it, release it and move on. This is very well written and I could find no errors. Tomorrow always brings a promise of better things.
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When a love fails, bless it, release it and move on. This is very well written and I could find no errors. Tomorrow always brings a promise of better things.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2012
Comment from donaldww
I enjoyed your poem that takes a look at the emotional side of divorce. It is true that time will allow some to gain new strength and begin again. And that is the way it should be.
Unfortunately, the financial laws surrounding divorce are such that lawyers often make off with all of the family money, making it very difficult to recover.
Cheers,
DW
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I enjoyed your poem that takes a look at the emotional side of divorce. It is true that time will allow some to gain new strength and begin again. And that is the way it should be.
Unfortunately, the financial laws surrounding divorce are such that lawyers often make off with all of the family money, making it very difficult to recover.
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 15-Dec-2012
Comment from EMB
Well, this is not your everyday poem, even though divorce happens all the time. I guess few wish to write about it. That said, you write about it quite well as you take readers on this journey, and I enjoyed following along to your eventual sense of freedom and renewed strength.
Nice work with this.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2012
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Well, this is not your everyday poem, even though divorce happens all the time. I guess few wish to write about it. That said, you write about it quite well as you take readers on this journey, and I enjoyed following along to your eventual sense of freedom and renewed strength.
Nice work with this.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2012
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You are right of course. This is not a popular subject for poetry, and I would never have thought to write this poem if my son had not experienced something similar. I wrote more from a woman's point of view, but it could be so for anyone who is deserted. I hope you read the author notes so that you know I was not writing about a personal experience. I often write from inside someone else's heart. I liked your take on this, and thank you so much for reviewing it for me.
