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Comment from mauial
Interesting free verse style poem with monorhyme thoughout. What I really liked about it was the story you told is a profound statement about one's eternity living on thought the genetics. For some though, the buck stops with them because they are childless.
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Interesting free verse style poem with monorhyme thoughout. What I really liked about it was the story you told is a profound statement about one's eternity living on thought the genetics. For some though, the buck stops with them because they are childless.
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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the review, and observation. Glad you liked it. Yes, that is the reality for some.
Comment from Bill Schott
The monorhyme begins to thud at my mind after a while, but Ido like that the theme remains constant from beginning to end. Nice job.
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The monorhyme begins to thud at my mind after a while, but Ido like that the theme remains constant from beginning to end. Nice job.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2012
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Thanks so much for for review.
Comment from kiwisteveh
Very clever and, I suspect, a potential winner in this contest - certainly the best I've seen so far.
Monorhyme ending cleverly chosen to allow flexibility and the cuteness with which your message is presented guarantees votes.
Good luck and well done.
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Very clever and, I suspect, a potential winner in this contest - certainly the best I've seen so far.
Monorhyme ending cleverly chosen to allow flexibility and the cuteness with which your message is presented guarantees votes.
Good luck and well done.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2012
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Wow. Certainly beyond my expectations. Thank you so much.
Comment from Deorre Leonard
You did a great job with this piece. The picture goes very well with this. The structure is good the flow is good. thanks for sharing. Deorre
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You did a great job with this piece. The picture goes very well with this. The structure is good the flow is good. thanks for sharing. Deorre
Comment Written 09-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much, Deorre. It's nice to get affirmation.
Comment from Angels27
Excellent monorhyme for the contest. There is so much of truth in the above lines. Whether we want to or not, there is so much of our parents..grandparents in us it is uncanny at times. All the best in the contest.
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Excellent monorhyme for the contest. There is so much of truth in the above lines. Whether we want to or not, there is so much of our parents..grandparents in us it is uncanny at times. All the best in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the inciteful review and wishes.
Comment from MelReyn
And you have hit on the truth of what drives the human race to reproduce. I mean, yes there is more to it... But this is the very core. Great work!
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And you have hit on the truth of what drives the human race to reproduce. I mean, yes there is more to it... But this is the very core. Great work!
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Comment Written 09-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the nice review. You captured the foundation well.
Comment from jaydub99
I liked this for it's pop and continuous effort. When I first saw this prompt I was thinking a few lines maybe but you have managed to structure an entire verse and still make every line relevant. The tone was honest and human with a touch of hope sprinkled in. Hope for the future and how you can represent. Nice job, I wish you luck on the contest.
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I liked this for it's pop and continuous effort. When I first saw this prompt I was thinking a few lines maybe but you have managed to structure an entire verse and still make every line relevant. The tone was honest and human with a touch of hope sprinkled in. Hope for the future and how you can represent. Nice job, I wish you luck on the contest.
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Comment Written 09-Nov-2012
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Thank you for this inspiring review.
