Comment from ennahanid

Excellent

First off let me state I am not good with punctuation and grammar so I certainly do not critique. I could be considered a bad reviewer because if I can't give a 4 or a 5 I normally skip. What I can do is say if I like it...and no I don't, I absolutely love it.

What a wonderful tale you have woven here, just brought a couple of tears here. Every child who is adopted into a loving family yet still feels different should have a copy of this, to read, to understand, to appreciate.

The storyteller has spun a story of great worth.

Thank you
Dinah

 Comment Written 20-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012

Hi Dinah, just wanted to say thank you so much for yor words...I truly appreciate them and I am glad you enjoyed my story...blessings.

Comment from Crackerberries

Excellent

Awwwwe, what a good story, with tears and laughter and best of all a happy ending... loved the part where Papa Racoon said the coyote was sly as a fox...that was funny. Looks like a perfect picture for a perfect story. Good luck.

 Comment Written 20-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012

Thanks so much Crackerberries, for reading and reviewing my story...I am glad you enjoyed it...blessings.

Comment from peggles

Excellent

poor little Freddy
all alone
good job he has the raccoons to befriend and care for him
I liked the slip with sly pappa racoons discomfort was amusing
bringing in Fantasia
was brillent
I love this story and hope to see more this kind of tale brings me back to my chilhood very soft well composed and a delight to read

 Comment Written 20-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012

Thanks so much peggles, for reading and reviewing my story...I appreciate your words and I am glad you enjoyed it...blessings.

Comment from rightforyou

Excellent

Wonderful story and a awesome job on the creativity as well as you imagination ..This story was a pleasure to read and review I enjoyed the magical display of talent and excitement that you have penned in to this one...Cheers...Ron

 Comment Written 20-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012

Thanks so much Ron, for reading and reviewing...I appreciate your words...blessings.

Comment from elgone

Excellent

I enjoyed the story very much. It has a strong feel about it and makes for an entertaining children's tale.

One distraction I noted were redundancies, specifically using the same key word twice in consecutive sentences. For example: Freddy cried out and ran to the clearing in the forest. As he ran towards the big old oak tree.

Another example: Fantasia looked deep into Freddy's eyes and said, ``Freddy, has the Raccoon family not loved you and taken care of you as one of their own?The second Freddy is not necessary.

Good luck with the contest.

E

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012

Thanks E, for reading and reviewing...I appreciate your suggestions and you are not the first one to comment on the redundancies, especially in the third paragraph­. I have gone back and revised it. Thanks so much for your words...blessings.

Comment from Gungalo

Excellent

Sigh, what a tale you tell. Seems he made a mistake or two and his "parents" had to help him figure it out. This would be good for adopted kids to read.

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012

Thanks so much Gungalo, for reading and reviewing...I am glad you enjoyed it...blessings.

Comment from Rattler

Excellent

Very nice, great contest entry. Freddy Is lucky you told his story so well. Ricky is also lucky. Thanks for a very moving story. I am sure kids of all ages will like this story.
Good luck.

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012

Thanks so much Rattler, for your words...I am glad you enjoyed my story...blessings.

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Exceptional

This is absolutely beautiful! What a wonderful lesson for children that skin or fur color means nothing. A statement against racism in the most uplifting way.

I don't often use the limited six stars they give us to award, but this is worth ten!

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012

Thanks so much Phyllis Stewart, for the six stars and you wonderful words...I truly appreciate them...blessings.

Comment from RebelRose

Excellent

I am glad Freddy feels at home now with the Raccoon family. This is a really cute story with a moral. A good contender for this contest. Your flow an dialogue are good.

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012

Thanks so much RebelRose, for reading and reviewing...I am glad you enjoyed it...blessings.

Comment from Carole Rosa

Exceptional

"Wile critter." I think you mean a "wild critter". This is an adorable story. It's a great story for children of today with so many different nationalities and colors of people. Families adopt children of all races. Schools are full of children from different cultures. This story is wonderful. I'd like to print it and read it to my 6 year old grandson. Good luck in the contest. Carole

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2012

Hi Carole...first I would like to thank you for the six stars...I truly appreciate them. I meant to use wile...it means sly or cunning...I was remembering Wile E. Coyote from the Roadrunner show. I am so glad you enjoyed my story and I would feel honored to have you read it to your grandson. Again, thank you so much for your words...blessings.

reply by Carole Rosa on 19-Mar-2012

Thank you for your reply. I didn't know the word wile. Thanks for the info. I learn so much on FS every day. Thanks and I will read it to Jayme on Friday when he comes to Grandma's house for the weekend. Carole