Another Pretty Face
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Chapter 4 part two"Can love survive small town gossip?
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Comment from jclark
This is a wonderful, heartwarming love story. You give each character dimension and I find that allows the reader to "feel" the emotions that you build with your dialogue. Anyway, I am enjoying the relationship that is blooming between Sara and Joe. Good job! Make sure you get your needed rest.
Judy
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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This is a wonderful, heartwarming love story. You give each character dimension and I find that allows the reader to "feel" the emotions that you build with your dialogue. Anyway, I am enjoying the relationship that is blooming between Sara and Joe. Good job! Make sure you get your needed rest.
Judy
Comment Written 05-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
Good chapter, as usual. Are you still working one-handed? Very interesting way to type.
Joe helped her from the car[] before he removed a small cooler and a blanket from the back seat. "Come on."
He chuckled before he continued[,] "We touched a few breasts,
up my entire life.["]
"So you made the age old mistake of thinking the love of a good woman can change the bad boy into a good one." -- Is this supposed to be a statement, or a question?
He went on with his life as if nothing ever happened[,] and I've struggled to make ends meet.["]
Roberta
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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Good chapter, as usual. Are you still working one-handed? Very interesting way to type.
Joe helped her from the car[] before he removed a small cooler and a blanket from the back seat. "Come on."
He chuckled before he continued[,] "We touched a few breasts,
up my entire life.["]
"So you made the age old mistake of thinking the love of a good woman can change the bad boy into a good one." -- Is this supposed to be a statement, or a question?
He went on with his life as if nothing ever happened[,] and I've struggled to make ends meet.["]
Roberta
Comment Written 05-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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I will check those areas. I looks like I am going to be one handed even longer. I went in for my check up today and the biopsies of the areas showed they didn't get all the cancer, so I am facing additional surgery. Out the four lymp glands they took one of them had cancer, so they are not sure what they are going to do about that yet. I go back on Tuesday to find out.
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Be strong.
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I think the big strong part of me left about 4:30 today. I am trying but it's slipping away.
Comment from Bulfornite
I love it its got a great love story to it and describes the depressing lives most have and how you learnt from your mistakes of life and found the right guy in the end, but i hate the fact you got date raped thing like that get to me, i have had alot of trouble in my life possibly more than you could imagine even after reading this!
I wish the best for you
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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I love it its got a great love story to it and describes the depressing lives most have and how you learnt from your mistakes of life and found the right guy in the end, but i hate the fact you got date raped thing like that get to me, i have had alot of trouble in my life possibly more than you could imagine even after reading this!
I wish the best for you
Comment Written 05-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
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your welcom :)
Comment from gerry26
This is a wonderful chapter. I like how you interwine the trust issues and tell and show how she is starting to trust him. The dialog is amazing, so real to life.
how are you feeling?
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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This is a wonderful chapter. I like how you interwine the trust issues and tell and show how she is starting to trust him. The dialog is amazing, so real to life.
how are you feeling?
Comment Written 05-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from mtngalofnc
Hi barbara,
Such a romantic and sweet chapter. Your descriptions allows me to feel as if I am right there along side this couple. I can feel Sara's insecurities slowly melting away and Joe's hopes of helping Sara to overcome this overshadowing past.
I love how you have used internal thoughts with dialogue and your story flows smoothly creating a soothing romantic moment in the lives of this couple. No spag did I see. A pleasure to have read and reviewed.
Take care and allow yourself sufficient rest. My prayers are with you.
Becky
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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Hi barbara,
Such a romantic and sweet chapter. Your descriptions allows me to feel as if I am right there along side this couple. I can feel Sara's insecurities slowly melting away and Joe's hopes of helping Sara to overcome this overshadowing past.
I love how you have used internal thoughts with dialogue and your story flows smoothly creating a soothing romantic moment in the lives of this couple. No spag did I see. A pleasure to have read and reviewed.
Take care and allow yourself sufficient rest. My prayers are with you.
Becky
Comment Written 05-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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I am not a very good patient. I go in today to see if they got all the cancer. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from vandawalker
In one of Clint Eastwood's movies he said, "You have to know your limitations." So true. But I'm glad to read your new chapter. It's very romantic and true to the characters. Their values seem to take me back to the '50's. Good writing.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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In one of Clint Eastwood's movies he said, "You have to know your limitations." So true. But I'm glad to read your new chapter. It's very romantic and true to the characters. Their values seem to take me back to the '50's. Good writing.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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That happens in small town America. I grew up in one during the late 60's and early 70's. It is just now getting into the 60's. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Connie P
I seems as though Joe is finally getting inside Sara's insecurities, she needs healing and it will take time. I feel so sorry for her ... how many girls have shared her experience, the difference here is that she didn't continue repeating the same mistake. I admire Joe, he's very well balanced and I think determined to restore her self-worth.
Now for a little speech: Please take care of yourself, I know it's hard to lie back and do nothing, but you should.
Connie
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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I seems as though Joe is finally getting inside Sara's insecurities, she needs healing and it will take time. I feel so sorry for her ... how many girls have shared her experience, the difference here is that she didn't continue repeating the same mistake. I admire Joe, he's very well balanced and I think determined to restore her self-worth.
Now for a little speech: Please take care of yourself, I know it's hard to lie back and do nothing, but you should.
Connie
Comment Written 05-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your little speech, I have many kind friends who are trying to get me to take care of myself. I am a slow learner. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from Auroraboreal800
This is another wonderful chapter. This story is getting better and better. Joe and Sara have reached the point now, where neither of them will want to be with out the other. Please take care Barbara, it's OK if you can't post
in a while... We can wait until you feel good.
:)
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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This is another wonderful chapter. This story is getting better and better. Joe and Sara have reached the point now, where neither of them will want to be with out the other. Please take care Barbara, it's OK if you can't post
in a while... We can wait until you feel good.
:)
Comment Written 05-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I am trying to take it easy, I just don't do a very good job of it.
Comment from Cheryle Rene
Thanks for the latest post. I'm really enjoying the journey. This scene was written very clearly and read smooth. Also, I thought this section of the dialogue between Joe and Sara read much more 'real'.
Looking forward to more, keep up the great work.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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Thanks for the latest post. I'm really enjoying the journey. This scene was written very clearly and read smooth. Also, I thought this section of the dialogue between Joe and Sara read much more 'real'.
Looking forward to more, keep up the great work.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from menachem
Well, I like how the story is progressing, getting more detailed, as we go on.
Of course it's fate, you're part of a story, aren't you?! :0)
Anyway... welcome back!
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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Well, I like how the story is progressing, getting more detailed, as we go on.
Of course it's fate, you're part of a story, aren't you?! :0)
Anyway... welcome back!
Comment Written 05-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2010
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I am not sure how much of me is in the story. I just know I wish there were more Joe's out there. Thank you for your kind review.
