To the Fevered Writer Within
Addressed to that other part of me40 total reviews
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Mike. Why is it I never hear from you? I love this piece. It's base and so honest in so many ways. Particularly this:
"Before the darkness swallows me
into the night's embrace,
you fill my mind with alchemy
that wears iambic face."
Good job...One Of the best I've read in a long time....Bob
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2010
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Hi, Mike. Why is it I never hear from you? I love this piece. It's base and so honest in so many ways. Particularly this:
"Before the darkness swallows me
into the night's embrace,
you fill my mind with alchemy
that wears iambic face."
Good job...One Of the best I've read in a long time....Bob
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2010
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Hi Bob, and thank you humbly for this fantastic review. I've been carrying around prints of the last two chapters of your book in my bag, and I WILL get to them. Thanks so much for this confidence-boosting write-up!
Mike
Comment from FREE-ONE
Fleedle-you have one aggressive Muse! and if I were you I would be sleeping with a bullet-proof vest around you and your pen(LOL)...this was very creative in thought and words choice...I like that you talked abou the various ways it is pushed into existence...this was an excellent read very well written with great description, I enjoyed it...Free
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2010
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Fleedle-you have one aggressive Muse! and if I were you I would be sleeping with a bullet-proof vest around you and your pen(LOL)...this was very creative in thought and words choice...I like that you talked abou the various ways it is pushed into existence...this was an excellent read very well written with great description, I enjoyed it...Free
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2010
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Thank you :-). I think inspiration itself is a very aggressive force, and one we can only try to tame with our scribblings. So glad you enjoyed the read :-)
Mike
Comment from Jean Lutz
Your writing describes words longing for birth. It seems the dark of night is when your muse speaks. For me it is at dawn and bright light. But that is poetry -- words both day and night.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Your writing describes words longing for birth. It seems the dark of night is when your muse speaks. For me it is at dawn and bright light. But that is poetry -- words both day and night.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Thank you Jean. As you say, poetry is all about balance. I suppose the poetic thoughts I get are more noticeable at night, when there are no distractions. Glad you enjoyed my poem :-)
Mike
Comment from rama devi
Excellent poem, dear Mike.
Very fresh rhyming...loved rescind and wind. The internal rhyme is great too and the poem moves in a musical groove...excellent flow.
LOVED this-
you fill my mind with alchemy
that wears iambic face.
this is witty-
When dawn awakes to rescue me
with regulated thought,
Punctuaiton is fine... though you might also consider a semicolon instead of period in second the last line--
You are the urge I can't rescind;
I owe it all to you.
Just flow flow...BUt using a period is perfectly right as well.
Interesting theme (the rascal muse), well expressed.
warmly, rd
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Excellent poem, dear Mike.
Very fresh rhyming...loved rescind and wind. The internal rhyme is great too and the poem moves in a musical groove...excellent flow.
LOVED this-
you fill my mind with alchemy
that wears iambic face.
this is witty-
When dawn awakes to rescue me
with regulated thought,
Punctuaiton is fine... though you might also consider a semicolon instead of period in second the last line--
You are the urge I can't rescind;
I owe it all to you.
Just flow flow...BUt using a period is perfectly right as well.
Interesting theme (the rascal muse), well expressed.
warmly, rd
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Thanks, rd :-). I'm thrilled you enjoyed it. This is obviously something of a follow up to my Muse piece from a couple of weeks back, and I think it's been writing itself ever since I posted that one. Thank you, as ever, for your wonderful thoughts :-)
Mike
Comment from misscookie
Wow that artwork tells it all
I like the flow AND WHAT YOU ARE EXPRESSING is WHAT EVERY WRITER GOES THROUGH MORE TIMES THaN THEY CARE TO REMEMBER.
THIS IS A GOOD WRITE
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Wow that artwork tells it all
I like the flow AND WHAT YOU ARE EXPRESSING is WHAT EVERY WRITER GOES THROUGH MORE TIMES THaN THEY CARE TO REMEMBER.
THIS IS A GOOD WRITE
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Thank you, Miss C :-). I think it's the fate of every artist to be both plagued and elevated by their creative juices. I'm glad you enjoyed my poem!
Mike
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You are very welcome, take care
Comment from Hitcher
OH! I like this one Mike, this one resonates through me mate, I'm drawn to the darkness within like a moth to a flame, trying to get close enough to fulfill a need, but not to close as to crash and burn. I loved everything about this one, this one Kicks Ass mate! Have a six
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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OH! I like this one Mike, this one resonates through me mate, I'm drawn to the darkness within like a moth to a flame, trying to get close enough to fulfill a need, but not to close as to crash and burn. I loved everything about this one, this one Kicks Ass mate! Have a six
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Cheers, Hitch! I seem to be on a roll with muse/inspiration-related pieces at the moment. I love following the darker thoughts and seeing where they take me; brutal honesty is one of the most freeing parts of writing, for me. I'm so glad you liked this one, mate. I thought you would!
Mike
Comment from ulster3
Hello Mike.
This is an complex poem and very excellent. Your alliteration sings with the rhythm of the rhyming quatrains. It expresses the compulsion some of us have to write, and the often darker thoughts of the writer. This is further illustrated by your choice of picture. Fortunately there is the other side! Art comes too when the soul is not tortured. Thanks for sharing.
Fondly, Rebecca
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Hello Mike.
This is an complex poem and very excellent. Your alliteration sings with the rhythm of the rhyming quatrains. It expresses the compulsion some of us have to write, and the often darker thoughts of the writer. This is further illustrated by your choice of picture. Fortunately there is the other side! Art comes too when the soul is not tortured. Thanks for sharing.
Fondly, Rebecca
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Thank you, Rebecca :-). You are of course right - the poetry sings of whatever powerful thoughts and emotions we feel, be they generous or hateful. I loved the idea that the urge to write is both the comfiest bed in the universe and a coffin buried six feet beneath our consciences. So glad you enjoyed!
Mike
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That is a marvellous idea /thought, Mike.
Comment from menachem
Very nice message, I like it a lot! And, I agree with it. One thought though: The last line, how does, "I owe it, to you", sound? I just think that relates to the feeling in a much better way, (or some variation, thereof).
And, cool picture, nice touch!
Nice!
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Very nice message, I like it a lot! And, I agree with it. One thought though: The last line, how does, "I owe it, to you", sound? I just think that relates to the feeling in a much better way, (or some variation, thereof).
And, cool picture, nice touch!
Nice!
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Thank you, Mena. I'll have a think about that closing line; appreciate the time taken, and I'm glad you enjoyed the read :-)
Mike
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Sure.
Glad I could help!
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form, good flow, good meter, an enjoyable read about the complexities of a writer that acts as a healing balm for the soul. great picture choice
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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this is very well written with good form, good flow, good meter, an enjoyable read about the complexities of a writer that acts as a healing balm for the soul. great picture choice
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Thank you, Sweet. As you say, us writers are made up of both the dark and the light, and only with both can we be complete. It's all in the complexity :-)
Mike
Comment from MyYiaYia
I agree with you, the picture was perfect. The poem was quite perfect in its own right. This one I got and didn't have to think to hard on it. LOL I love the way you think. Deb
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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I agree with you, the picture was perfect. The poem was quite perfect in its own right. This one I got and didn't have to think to hard on it. LOL I love the way you think. Deb
Comment Written 17-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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lol, thanks, Deb :-). I like to think I embrace my inner lunatic!
Mike
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Hahaha! You slay me!
