The Kyrielle
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Creation Sings the Melody"kyrielle poems
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Comment from allinmyhead
You truly are an awesome poet. The theme is beautifully carried out through the poem and perfectly matched with the repeated line: Creation sings the Melody.
This,
When sonorous, pulsating waves
like drumbeats born upon the sea
come crashing to their rocky graves, is magical.
Just inspiring work.
I very much like your choice of accompanying picture -- the dancer -- a personification of the theme.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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You truly are an awesome poet. The theme is beautifully carried out through the poem and perfectly matched with the repeated line: Creation sings the Melody.
This,
When sonorous, pulsating waves
like drumbeats born upon the sea
come crashing to their rocky graves, is magical.
Just inspiring work.
I very much like your choice of accompanying picture -- the dancer -- a personification of the theme.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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I can't take credit for the picture - it goes with the contest, but I will thank you with great appreciation for your most thoughtful comments about the poem. Thank you also for your highly generous review :-) Brooke
Comment from treaclemoon
Such a lovely and creative kyrielle. Your repeated line is pure genius. Love the different sensory feel to each stanza and the alliteration. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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Such a lovely and creative kyrielle. Your repeated line is pure genius. Love the different sensory feel to each stanza and the alliteration. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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Thank you for such thoughtful comments and for your encouragement :-) Brooke
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
This is a wonderful piece, Brooke. I could easily set this to a simple tune and sing it. I love the refrain and the form. You know so much about poetry. I think I've probably learned what little I know from you and your wonderful author notes.
good luck in the contest...not that you need it!
Warmest wishes and hugs
Kat
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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This is a wonderful piece, Brooke. I could easily set this to a simple tune and sing it. I love the refrain and the form. You know so much about poetry. I think I've probably learned what little I know from you and your wonderful author notes.
good luck in the contest...not that you need it!
Warmest wishes and hugs
Kat
Comment Written 18-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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Kat, thank you - I am grateful for your most thoughtful comments - and believe me, one always needs luck in contests since I often get 80 positive comments and 5 votes. LOL Brooke : -)
Comment from fayesh
Brooke, this is a superb piece of lyrical poetry. You followed the format beautifully and the imagery and theme were exceptional. Very nice indeed
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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Brooke, this is a superb piece of lyrical poetry. You followed the format beautifully and the imagery and theme were exceptional. Very nice indeed
Comment Written 18-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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Thank you so much - it is my first kyrielle and I just fell in love with the form - I so appreciate your generous response, my friend :-) I think the repeated refrain of the form helps create the lyricism :-) Brooke
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Brooke, how nice you have shown us the beauty of nature wonders with you reflections of creation.
Your repeating line 'creation sings the melody.'
are very impressing.
Gert
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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Hello Brooke, how nice you have shown us the beauty of nature wonders with you reflections of creation.
Your repeating line 'creation sings the melody.'
are very impressing.
Gert
Comment Written 18-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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Gert, thank you for your positive comments - I hope you are having a lovely Saturday :-) Brooke
Comment from schlosslaw_2000
An excellent poem, Brooke. Well crafted and infuced with an internal rythym that echoes the last line of each verse.
Nicely done. Larry
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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An excellent poem, Brooke. Well crafted and infuced with an internal rythym that echoes the last line of each verse.
Nicely done. Larry
Comment Written 18-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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Thank you, Larry - I appreciate your thoughtful comments - hardly anyone else bothered to mention the internal rhyme :-)
Comment from prodigal
I like this poem, Brooke. I like the repetition of creation sings the melody and the lead into each quatrain. You began each stanza with when, added some description and closed with the creation line. Very good. Works for me- sam
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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I like this poem, Brooke. I like the repetition of creation sings the melody and the lead into each quatrain. You began each stanza with when, added some description and closed with the creation line. Very good. Works for me- sam
Comment Written 18-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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Glad it works for you, Sam. Thanks and good morning :-) Brooke
Comment from grassroots08
Cool beans! Ooops, I can't believe I said that. Anyway, the deed is done and I really enjoyed the flavor of this one. If I had an hour to spin a review, you would be getting it. If I had a six you would be getting that too. I will just have to bookmark it, and return to this piece often for a peek.
I will just have to try one of these soon, it flows so full and freely!
Where eagles fly, Don(Greywolf)
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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Cool beans! Ooops, I can't believe I said that. Anyway, the deed is done and I really enjoyed the flavor of this one. If I had an hour to spin a review, you would be getting it. If I had a six you would be getting that too. I will just have to bookmark it, and return to this piece often for a peek.
I will just have to try one of these soon, it flows so full and freely!
Where eagles fly, Don(Greywolf)
Comment Written 18-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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Hey, Don - I think cool beans is just about one of the best reviews I could ever get!! :-D I really appreciate every word of this review - and I hope you do try one soon :-) You have started my day off with the hugest of smiles :-) Thank you!!! Brooke
Comment from rmdelta
Brooke,
an excellent contest entry, dear friend. When I first read what kind of poem this was, I almost freaked out. WHAT? my mind yelled. WHERE would somebody come up with name like this? Better still, WHY would they? Oh, well. I will wish you the best of luck in the contest
Reggie
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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Brooke,
an excellent contest entry, dear friend. When I first read what kind of poem this was, I almost freaked out. WHAT? my mind yelled. WHERE would somebody come up with name like this? Better still, WHY would they? Oh, well. I will wish you the best of luck in the contest
Reggie
Comment Written 18-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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this form is hundreds of years old - the name comes from the kyrie eleison refrain sung in church - Lord, have mercy upon us, Christ have mercy upon us, Lord have mercy upon us. Thanks, Reggie :-) Brooke
Comment from Deejharrington
A Kyrielle? You guys are kidding, right? You're making these up now. Probably not, I'm just showing my ignorance.
Anyway, whatever the name, meter, or abcdef..., it read beautifully! My favorite stanza was the third one and the repeated phrase is so expressive! It made me want to sing, and I can't hold a tune in a big bucket!
deb
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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A Kyrielle? You guys are kidding, right? You're making these up now. Probably not, I'm just showing my ignorance.
Anyway, whatever the name, meter, or abcdef..., it read beautifully! My favorite stanza was the third one and the repeated phrase is so expressive! It made me want to sing, and I can't hold a tune in a big bucket!
deb
Comment Written 18-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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Deb, it is hundreds of years old - we didn't make the darned name up - it comes from the kyrie eleison refrain in church - Lord, have mercy upon us, Christ have mercy upon us, Lord have mercy upon us. :-) Glad you enjoyed it, and I don't mind if you sing a tad off key!!! :-) Brooke
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And you guys just pull these out of your....sleeve? Amazing
deb
