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Comment from rivki1111
Hi, good post, i thoroughly enjoyed it. I like your easy to read style...and its a very sutiable entry for the competition...definitely meeting the criteria. I found it had a smooth flow. I noticed not grammar errors. The dedication is very sobering, it is reflective of the new age that we are in...i thought it was good that you realize the terror is from both sides. Thanks for sharing your writing, rebekah
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2007
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Hi, good post, i thoroughly enjoyed it. I like your easy to read style...and its a very sutiable entry for the competition...definitely meeting the criteria. I found it had a smooth flow. I noticed not grammar errors. The dedication is very sobering, it is reflective of the new age that we are in...i thought it was good that you realize the terror is from both sides. Thanks for sharing your writing, rebekah
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reply by the author on 15-Oct-2007
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Sadly, the new age is something we have suffered in the UK for decades. Glad you liked it.
Comment from FrankieT
Good morning, I liked the style you used to tell the story and thought it read rather well. Some good strong imagery and good dialogue, as well. :)
FrankieT
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2007
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Good morning, I liked the style you used to tell the story and thought it read rather well. Some good strong imagery and good dialogue, as well. :)
FrankieT
Comment Written 15-Oct-2007
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2007
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You're very kind, thank you
Comment from shy1250
Good luck in the contest, although I can't imagine needing luck, not with an entry like this. Such a good job, using a "terrorist" who's not really all there, who's not much more than a chhild himself. Oh, that 9 year old! Is there anything sadder than someone who's never had a true chance to live, dying? No spag, no suggestions, great ending! and again, good luck! shy
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Good luck in the contest, although I can't imagine needing luck, not with an entry like this. Such a good job, using a "terrorist" who's not really all there, who's not much more than a chhild himself. Oh, that 9 year old! Is there anything sadder than someone who's never had a true chance to live, dying? No spag, no suggestions, great ending! and again, good luck! shy
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Comment Written 15-Oct-2007
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2007
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You're very kind. I suspect that I will need the luck, thank you.
