The Paper and the Pen
Paper is of matter and in the end must perish.30 total reviews
Comment from Shirley Ann Bunyan
You have penned a great poem with a very true sentiment.
'But the words of women and men in poetry
Remain all time to cherish.'
Thank you. I very much enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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You have penned a great poem with a very true sentiment.
'But the words of women and men in poetry
Remain all time to cherish.'
Thank you. I very much enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Shirley,
Thanks so much for your review. Glad you enjoyed it. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
A salient message here comparing the eternal quality of words to the transient nature of material pens and paper. Your theme is charmingly conveyed in this skilfully rhyming verse, making it a joy to read. I particularly like the third stanza for its spot-on meter. You could achieve a better result in the last stanza just by shortening that third line - "But words of women and men in verse." But an excellent post. Well done, Barry! Debbie
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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A salient message here comparing the eternal quality of words to the transient nature of material pens and paper. Your theme is charmingly conveyed in this skilfully rhyming verse, making it a joy to read. I particularly like the third stanza for its spot-on meter. You could achieve a better result in the last stanza just by shortening that third line - "But words of women and men in verse." But an excellent post. Well done, Barry! Debbie
Comment Written 20-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Debbie,
Thanks so much for your kind words and also for your suggestion as to a change in the last stanza. I will certainly consider it. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry.
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Barry I enjoyed your poem and like you have lots of poems written with paper and a pen and have quite a collection.
You are right our words cannot perish and having a book of my poetry published last year I hope my readers enjoy my words too
Nice work and food for thought
Cheers Chris
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Hi Barry I enjoyed your poem and like you have lots of poems written with paper and a pen and have quite a collection.
You are right our words cannot perish and having a book of my poetry published last year I hope my readers enjoy my words too
Nice work and food for thought
Cheers Chris
Comment Written 20-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Thanks for your review Chris. I think when your rating came through you may have marked it incorrectly. It had a rating of 1. You can change it to 4 or 5 if you wish.
In any event, take care and have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
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Hi Barry,
I am so sorry I mean?t 5 so hopefully it has updated correctly
Cheers Chris
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No problem at all.
Comment from Aussie
Well done Mr. Penfold. Interesting your name is part of your poem. Paper and Pen is so true. The Egyptians used papyrus and stone tablets. I hope we don't have to be Barney Flintstone and carry around shopping lists on stone tablets :-) Over years all things crumble into dust.
On principle, I would not write on an iPad! K xx
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Well done Mr. Penfold. Interesting your name is part of your poem. Paper and Pen is so true. The Egyptians used papyrus and stone tablets. I hope we don't have to be Barney Flintstone and carry around shopping lists on stone tablets :-) Over years all things crumble into dust.
On principle, I would not write on an iPad! K xx
Comment Written 20-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Thanks Aussie, for your kind review. Yes, the Barney Flintstone style of writing, may be a little difficult to accommodate. And yes all things do crumble into dust. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
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Me too! Especially reading on Kindle. I treasure my real books. K xx
Comment from Mark Jackson
I did enjoy reading this except for part of one line which is the merest of issues and I suspect unresolvable. I liked the alliteration of words of women and men. However, when you repeat it, I found it harder to read with the addition of in poetry. The repetition is good but it feels a lot to read in online. But again it would be a shame to sacrifice your message. All in all, it was great perhaps not perfect but who is?
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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I did enjoy reading this except for part of one line which is the merest of issues and I suspect unresolvable. I liked the alliteration of words of women and men. However, when you repeat it, I found it harder to read with the addition of in poetry. The repetition is good but it feels a lot to read in online. But again it would be a shame to sacrifice your message. All in all, it was great perhaps not perfect but who is?
Comment Written 20-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2024
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Thanks Mark for your review. I appreciate your honesty and suggestion about the addition of in poetry. I might just much around with it and see what I can come up with.Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
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It is a difficult task sometimes leaving things is the best answer.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I have seen ink on paper last for many centuries if it is looked after properly, but this is what is so unique about our digital inventions these days, our words never fade. I enjoyed your underlying philosophy here Barry, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2024
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I have seen ink on paper last for many centuries if it is looked after properly, but this is what is so unique about our digital inventions these days, our words never fade. I enjoyed your underlying philosophy here Barry, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 19-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2024
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Thanks for the review Dolly. Glad you enjoyed it. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
A very nice poem about a writer's two favorite things. Pen and paper. I still prefer to write everything in pen and paper and do it later on the keyboard. It feels more real to write out the words. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2024
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A very nice poem about a writer's two favorite things. Pen and paper. I still prefer to write everything in pen and paper and do it later on the keyboard. It feels more real to write out the words. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2024
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Marilyn,
Thanks for your kind review. Wow, you approach is interesting, but I can fully understand how you feel it is more real. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Paul McFarland
That's a good one, Barry. You have touched on a subject that is written about a great deal, but you have approached the topic in a unique manner.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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That's a good one, Barry. You have touched on a subject that is written about a great deal, but you have approached the topic in a unique manner.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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Paul,
Thanks for your review. Yes, the angle taken on a subject, is often the way to a good poem or story. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry
Comment from Sally Law
Wow! Aching for a six for this gem. Poetry is a treasure, albeit old or new. I love having revived my love for it. Thank you for sharing, Barry. All my best for the put pen to paper challenge.
Sally :))
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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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Wow! Aching for a six for this gem. Poetry is a treasure, albeit old or new. I love having revived my love for it. Thank you for sharing, Barry. All my best for the put pen to paper challenge.
Sally :))
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Comment Written 18-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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Sally,
Thanks so much for your review. I too, sort of lost poetry for a little while. Back with it now. Take care and have a great day.
Cheers
Barry
Comment from patcelaw
Having our words hang on forever is one of the things that makes the fan story community so wonderful. It's because we have an opportunity to have our words read by other people and maybe those words will have changed a life or two along the way. Thanks for sharing this lovely poem. Patricia.
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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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Having our words hang on forever is one of the things that makes the fan story community so wonderful. It's because we have an opportunity to have our words read by other people and maybe those words will have changed a life or two along the way. Thanks for sharing this lovely poem. Patricia.
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Comment Written 18-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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Thanks for the kind review. You are correct about the value of the fan story site. I never imagined that my work, both prose and poetry would get to so many people.
Take care and have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
