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Ukiah- Potlatch Club post32 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good artwork and nice presentation, Joan.
-This is a clever idea Shelley came up with.
-You wrote a good poem with a good topic.
-I like how you give the background of the
time of year and what some remember.
-A good job highlighting what it was he
did for all of us.
-Well done; thanks for sharing it.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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-Good artwork and nice presentation, Joan.
-This is a clever idea Shelley came up with.
-You wrote a good poem with a good topic.
-I like how you give the background of the
time of year and what some remember.
-A good job highlighting what it was he
did for all of us.
-Well done; thanks for sharing it.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Thanks for all your kind comments on my poem, Pam.
Joan
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You are very welcome, Joan.
Comment from Mrs. KT
Yes, the do, Joan.
I love the simplicity of your poetic offering.
And what a remembrance it is.
Much appreciated and enjoyed.
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Yes, the do, Joan.
I love the simplicity of your poetic offering.
And what a remembrance it is.
Much appreciated and enjoyed.
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 26-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Thanks for the nice comments and all the stars, Diane. I'm glad you liked it.
Joan
Comment from nomi338
Sadly, that is about all of the time his death comes to mind. December generates a rebirth of interest as we reflect on his birth. There are huge chunks of time when we ignore him and his teachings, as we go about our daily routines. Unfortunate events like sickness, or unexpected deaths will cause us to refocus on him for a brief time, but it does not last.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Sadly, that is about all of the time his death comes to mind. December generates a rebirth of interest as we reflect on his birth. There are huge chunks of time when we ignore him and his teachings, as we go about our daily routines. Unfortunate events like sickness, or unexpected deaths will cause us to refocus on him for a brief time, but it does not last.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Thanks, Norman, for you insightful comments about by poem. It is true for a lot of people. But, I believe some think of it more often.
Joan
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For sure there are some who reflect upon his life example every day, which is fitting. Sadly far too many only think of him when they are in need.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very well written poem for this particular time of the year as we're heading toward Easter Sunday. I enjoyed yourC and I wish you the very best with all of your writing. May you have a wonderful Easter. Patric.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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This is a very well written poem for this particular time of the year as we're heading toward Easter Sunday. I enjoyed yourC and I wish you the very best with all of your writing. May you have a wonderful Easter. Patric.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much, Patricia, for the nice review and the wishes for a good Easter. May you enjoy yours too.
Joan
Comment from Lisasview
This is rather interesting. I love the mirror image you used for your Haiku poem.
Very nice "Put Pen To Paper Potlatch Poetry Club" entry!
Thank you for sharing,
Lisa
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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This is rather interesting. I love the mirror image you used for your Haiku poem.
Very nice "Put Pen To Paper Potlatch Poetry Club" entry!
Thank you for sharing,
Lisa
Comment Written 26-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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You're welcome, Lisa
Joan
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Hi Joan, You are welcome...
Comment from teafor2
Dragonpoet: I am a big big fan of brevity. This 5-7-5 format is just about
perfect for your succinct write/read. The picture is "telling" and powerful!
teafor2
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Dragonpoet: I am a big big fan of brevity. This 5-7-5 format is just about
perfect for your succinct write/read. The picture is "telling" and powerful!
teafor2
Comment Written 26-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Thanks for the nice review.
Joan
Comment from tempeste
Ciao,
I'm presuming that you are referring to the six weeks between Lent and Easter.
Good Friday when Jesus was put on the cross and Easter Sunday when he rose.
My favourite film on the theme is Mel Gibson's The Passion of Christ.
I remember many complained about the flagellation scene saying it was too crude. Apparently, many viewers watching continued to lower their heads.
Personally, I think it helps people truly understand the excruciating pain Christ suffered to save us.
Just reading it from the bible is not as impactful.
PS. I googled the rules of this format Ukiah and it says all three lines should rhyme. Also, the syllable count should be 5-7-5.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Ciao,
I'm presuming that you are referring to the six weeks between Lent and Easter.
Good Friday when Jesus was put on the cross and Easter Sunday when he rose.
My favourite film on the theme is Mel Gibson's The Passion of Christ.
I remember many complained about the flagellation scene saying it was too crude. Apparently, many viewers watching continued to lower their heads.
Personally, I think it helps people truly understand the excruciating pain Christ suffered to save us.
Just reading it from the bible is not as impactful.
PS. I googled the rules of this format Ukiah and it says all three lines should rhyme. Also, the syllable count should be 5-7-5.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Hi Tempeste,
You are right at the time of year this poem is about. I was one who put my head down. It seemed much more than the 39 lashes Jesus, most probably received.
The ukiah is a reverse haiku so the syllable count is 7-5-7 not 5-7-5
Joan
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Oopppsss, 🥹
I got the numbers scrambled.
I noticed you edited and put a photo that connects to the theme of your poem and not to the format used.
I saw you still left the subtitle which mentions Ukiah
Copied and pasted:
Ukiah :
THREE LINES: specific syllable counts per line and this poem needs to rhyme!!
The first and third lines HAVE SEVEN SYLLABLES.
The second, middle line only has FIVE SYLLABLES.
AND ? all three lines need to have an ending rhyme.
(Those ending rhymes are what make this style tricky). Have fun!!
Comment from Julie Helms
A topic I love. Easter is the most important holy day for me. What I'm not sure about is the six week reference. In our area there are those who celebrate from lent forward to Easter, and then there are those who celebrate Easter forward to Ascension day. I didn't look on the calendar, but they're both close to that length of time.
I looked at the directions for the Ukiah, and it says 7-5-7 syllable count. But I'm getting 6-5-6 with yours? It is also supposed to be a monorhyme. I am just trying to figure this all out since I'm getting ready to write one of my own!
Thank you so much for sharing. Julie.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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A topic I love. Easter is the most important holy day for me. What I'm not sure about is the six week reference. In our area there are those who celebrate from lent forward to Easter, and then there are those who celebrate Easter forward to Ascension day. I didn't look on the calendar, but they're both close to that length of time.
I looked at the directions for the Ukiah, and it says 7-5-7 syllable count. But I'm getting 6-5-6 with yours? It is also supposed to be a monorhyme. I am just trying to figure this all out since I'm getting ready to write one of my own!
Thank you so much for sharing. Julie.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Thanks, Julie.
Lent is the 6 weeks before Easter.
I corrected the syllable count already.
Joan
Comment from Brenda Strauser
I enjoyed reading this poem. I have never seen this type of poem. Very different and unique. Well written. Great job. I think the picture adds a nice touch to the poem.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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I enjoyed reading this poem. I have never seen this type of poem. Very different and unique. Well written. Great job. I think the picture adds a nice touch to the poem.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2024
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review this.
Joan
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I don't fully get why the Ukiah was formed, but had the originator gotten it right, I would have thought, and that is just me doing what I do well, I would have the lnies read Hebraicly and have the first lines rhyme, though Haiku's aren't suppose to, right?
I had to post something for my 2 cent reward!
As for your penning - I would have the middle read "one remembers Christ's
Cordially yours.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024
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I don't fully get why the Ukiah was formed, but had the originator gotten it right, I would have thought, and that is just me doing what I do well, I would have the lnies read Hebraicly and have the first lines rhyme, though Haiku's aren't suppose to, right?
I had to post something for my 2 cent reward!
As for your penning - I would have the middle read "one remembers Christ's
Cordially yours.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024
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Hi Tom
Thanks for reading and reviewing. I wanted the reader to guess I am talking about Jesus without using his name. Also changing it to your line, which is good, wouldn't be grammatically correct.
Joan
