Street Voices
The voice of the streets- yes that's me in the photo32 total reviews
Comment from Dawn Munro
Wow, not only are you beautiful (your photo) but your 'voice' is beautiful -- you are an extremely talented poet, IMHO, and I ADORED this poem. You speak of the bubble-wrapped perceptions that pervade our society, and 'invade' our right to a life of equality, no matter our race, religious persuasion, or SO many other things that affect the choices we have available to us.
OUTSTANDING.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Wow, not only are you beautiful (your photo) but your 'voice' is beautiful -- you are an extremely talented poet, IMHO, and I ADORED this poem. You speak of the bubble-wrapped perceptions that pervade our society, and 'invade' our right to a life of equality, no matter our race, religious persuasion, or SO many other things that affect the choices we have available to us.
OUTSTANDING.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much for your input.
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Thank you so much for your input.
Comment from Douglas Goff
This is an incredibly poignant piece of poetry. I liked much of the imagery but this line really stood out:
I never had a chance to become more significant than my dreams.
That seems like it could be the battle cry of an entire generation of discarded people.
Great job here.
D
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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This is an incredibly poignant piece of poetry. I liked much of the imagery but this line really stood out:
I never had a chance to become more significant than my dreams.
That seems like it could be the battle cry of an entire generation of discarded people.
Great job here.
D
Comment Written 30-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Thank you for your feedback.
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Thank you for your feedback.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Charity, what a beating name.
Being the street's carrier... such powerful phrase. You can speak and write the pain of centuries of abuse and negligence of African Americans. I can't believe we are still racist bigots in our country.
There are so many excellent verses, it's hard to chose....
"I never had a chance to become more significant than my dreams".
"Why would I hide my pain when I need to expose it?"-- most people prefer to look the other way while crime is committed in plain day light.
Your rhyme sounds like a song... maybe rap.
Well done
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Charity, what a beating name.
Being the street's carrier... such powerful phrase. You can speak and write the pain of centuries of abuse and negligence of African Americans. I can't believe we are still racist bigots in our country.
There are so many excellent verses, it's hard to chose....
"I never had a chance to become more significant than my dreams".
"Why would I hide my pain when I need to expose it?"-- most people prefer to look the other way while crime is committed in plain day light.
Your rhyme sounds like a song... maybe rap.
Well done
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 30-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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I appreicate your support and feedback.
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I appreicate your support and feedback.
Comment from Caroline M England
This is an incredibly moving poem. It is etched with pain, with anger, with despair and beautifully expressed. I am from the UK so also fascinated to read what you say about the downside of the ever-golden American dream.
The elements I find particularly moving and powerful are the reference to
the trenches,
I never had a chance to become more significant than my dreams
And your words about hate - the scourge of our society today - our increasingly judgemental attitude seems to be taking a retrograde step back towards Victorian times.
Really well done with your composition Charity.
Best wishes
Caroline
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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This is an incredibly moving poem. It is etched with pain, with anger, with despair and beautifully expressed. I am from the UK so also fascinated to read what you say about the downside of the ever-golden American dream.
The elements I find particularly moving and powerful are the reference to
the trenches,
I never had a chance to become more significant than my dreams
And your words about hate - the scourge of our society today - our increasingly judgemental attitude seems to be taking a retrograde step back towards Victorian times.
Really well done with your composition Charity.
Best wishes
Caroline
Comment Written 30-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Thank you.
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Thank you.
Comment from mermaids
Excellent poem that captures the plight of many in today's world. Excellent poetic form and a vivid use of words that brings forth feelings and emotions. Love the analogy of the arcade being Disney for some. A while back you contacted me about your book. I was aware from the site for awhile due to life issues. I would love to purchase your book. My email is robinsonelaine48@gmail.com
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Excellent poem that captures the plight of many in today's world. Excellent poetic form and a vivid use of words that brings forth feelings and emotions. Love the analogy of the arcade being Disney for some. A while back you contacted me about your book. I was aware from the site for awhile due to life issues. I would love to purchase your book. My email is robinsonelaine48@gmail.com
Comment Written 30-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Comment from QC Poet
Don't know if you have ever heard of Marvin Gaye's Inner city Blues your poem rings like a new age version of the struggle now facing many people in the inner cities. I grew up in Pacoima California's barrio and faced the same sort of gang and the famous Rodney King Foothill police problems yet rose up to become a normal citizen with three felonies on my side. Good Luck and Keep on fighting for improvement. Blessings to you and your walk in life.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Don't know if you have ever heard of Marvin Gaye's Inner city Blues your poem rings like a new age version of the struggle now facing many people in the inner cities. I grew up in Pacoima California's barrio and faced the same sort of gang and the famous Rodney King Foothill police problems yet rose up to become a normal citizen with three felonies on my side. Good Luck and Keep on fighting for improvement. Blessings to you and your walk in life.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Thank you.
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Thank you.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
You, my friend, are a breath of fresh air. We need more of this type of poetry. Every line speaks a truth that others need to read. Your struggles are many yet you give back to the streets where you feel most at home. I applaud your forthrightness!
Keep telling it like it is!
Jesse
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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You, my friend, are a breath of fresh air. We need more of this type of poetry. Every line speaks a truth that others need to read. Your struggles are many yet you give back to the streets where you feel most at home. I applaud your forthrightness!
Keep telling it like it is!
Jesse
Comment Written 30-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Thanks for your feedback.
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Thanks for your feedback.
Comment from RJ Heritage
Held my interest at times, I found it wondering. If this was the intended response, then well done. You might need to look into what happens when you paste.
I also pasted and my writing was a little disjointed. Nice approach to a heartfelt situation.
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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Held my interest at times, I found it wondering. If this was the intended response, then well done. You might need to look into what happens when you paste.
I also pasted and my writing was a little disjointed. Nice approach to a heartfelt situation.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Comment from Lisasview
Great great photo.
Go bak in and edit the blank area spaces at the bottom... do you know how to do that? You do not need them... leave one or two blank spaces at the bottom..
I can see you are upset with the system....
Lisasview
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Great great photo.
Go bak in and edit the blank area spaces at the bottom... do you know how to do that? You do not need them... leave one or two blank spaces at the bottom..
I can see you are upset with the system....
Lisasview
Comment Written 30-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Thank you
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Thank you
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
What a dramatic image! This is a powerful, 'sit up and take note' free verse which you've expressed in stunning imagery and detail. There is a depressed and defeatist tone here that you feel an outcast, a street voice and that rising above this is not going to be possible, given the world we live in. Your verse expands to us all in this American Dream, a Disney world of dreams only to be realised in arcades. Love the line: "We have been in the trenches so long..." This is excellent and moving. I would only make one suggestion that you break this lengthy text into stanzas so that you emphasize different strands of your thinking, for instance when you start talking about American Dream and bring specific to more general, evolving the story and the theme. Well done, Charity! Thanks for sharing, Debbie
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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What a dramatic image! This is a powerful, 'sit up and take note' free verse which you've expressed in stunning imagery and detail. There is a depressed and defeatist tone here that you feel an outcast, a street voice and that rising above this is not going to be possible, given the world we live in. Your verse expands to us all in this American Dream, a Disney world of dreams only to be realised in arcades. Love the line: "We have been in the trenches so long..." This is excellent and moving. I would only make one suggestion that you break this lengthy text into stanzas so that you emphasize different strands of your thinking, for instance when you start talking about American Dream and bring specific to more general, evolving the story and the theme. Well done, Charity! Thanks for sharing, Debbie
Comment Written 30-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2024
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Thank you
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Thank you