Beautiful Downward Spiral
Life and happiness can change within minutes.47 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing these thoughts with us. I can understand the turmoil and mixed emotions, but it made for a great poem. My prayers are with you and your father.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you for sharing these thoughts with us. I can understand the turmoil and mixed emotions, but it made for a great poem. My prayers are with you and your father.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you for reading and reviewing, barbara.wilkey. I appreciate your comments and prayers so much. Even though I don't always understand how or why my writing can be pleasurable and cathartic, I'm grateful for the escape to help me process. Best wishes. Take care. :D :D
Comment from TPAC
An interesting mix, finding initial conveyances very captivating, then from snowflakes to Father concerns. Perhaps, this is the real message. Life as a falling snow drop. Deep emotional situation.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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An interesting mix, finding initial conveyances very captivating, then from snowflakes to Father concerns. Perhaps, this is the real message. Life as a falling snow drop. Deep emotional situation.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you for reading and reviewing TPAC. I appreciate your comments. Yes, that's a true message; it's interesting how your subconscious works when composing a piece. Thank you again for reading. Best wishes and take care. :D :D
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi A,
This is a strongly emotional poem using Winter and its cold as a metaphor for aging and it seems dying. It shows the regrets you have about a relationship or lack thereof when a father's death.
Welcome back. I am glad your teaching is going well.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great rest of the day.
Joan
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Hi A,
This is a strongly emotional poem using Winter and its cold as a metaphor for aging and it seems dying. It shows the regrets you have about a relationship or lack thereof when a father's death.
Welcome back. I am glad your teaching is going well.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great rest of the day.
Joan
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you for reading and reviewing, Joan. I appreciate your insight. My regrets stem from not talking to my dad as often as I once did; however, it's painful for me, as he's struggling with dementia and doesn't remember our one-sided conversations. I do try to reach out to him as often as I can. Hopefully, I can speak to him again soon. Thank you. It's great to be back. I've missed writing. Best wishes and take care. :D :D
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You're welcome, A.
I am glad you are trying to keep in touch despite the dementia. It must be hard.
Joan
Comment from jim vecchio
You have a great work here, but there's something more important to discuss. I wish the very best for your father, but please, please remember always to tell him you love him. I disappointed my father much in my past but God straightened me out. God gave me a wonderful wife and we visited him. My father died of a massive heart attack in front of us. Just before that, my wife told him how much we loved him. None of us are promised another second. Make sure you use your words wisely now, while there is time.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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You have a great work here, but there's something more important to discuss. I wish the very best for your father, but please, please remember always to tell him you love him. I disappointed my father much in my past but God straightened me out. God gave me a wonderful wife and we visited him. My father died of a massive heart attack in front of us. Just before that, my wife told him how much we loved him. None of us are promised another second. Make sure you use your words wisely now, while there is time.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you for reading and reviewing, Jim. I appreciate your wisdom, and I end each conversation with an "I love you" to Dad. You're right; no one's promised another second. I'm so sorry to hear about your dad. That must've been difficult. Mom died of cancer in front of Dad and me so that I can empathize. Again, thank you for reading. It's greatly appreciated. Best wishes and take care. :D :D
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I am sorry you have put up with such trials. Remember, this life is not the end. It's only the beginning if you have faith in God.
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I do have faith, but it's been seriously tested during the last decade.
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Talk about trials! I got sick before my wife died and spent the last year into this from hospital to rehab and back. But, it is still worth it. Paul the Apostle had a great "thorn in the flesh" but deemed it worthy to continue in his faith and wrote much of the New Testament.
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I'm so sorry to hear about your wife. Paul has always been an inspiration for me--a true Hero of the Faith from my childhood. Thank you for reminding me of him.
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Yes, I miss Rhonda deeply. Paul has been a true inspiration to me. He did not allow suffering or imprisonment conflict with his service to God.
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Sending your prayers and love. No, he didn't. A true inspiration, never giving up--that's true steadfast loyalty.
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Thank you! I always appreciate prayers! When I accepted Christ, a friend said to me, "What happened? You don't act or talk the same!" I asked him about Jesus, and he told me he had gone to Sunday School and the instructor said to pick the individual you think needs help most in the world, pray for him, and see what God does. He said he chose me!
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Thank you! I always appreciate prayers! When I accepted Christ, a friend said to me, "What happened? You don't act or talk the same!" I asked him about Jesus, and he told me he had gone to Sunday School and the instructor said to pick the individual you think needs help most in the world, pray for him, and see what God does. He said he chose me!
Comment from Boogienights
I admire you for taking on the difficult task of teaching. Your short verses really resonated with me, especially after reading your notes. I was devestated when i lost my mom, but also strangely relieved that her suffering was over. I had lost her long before she died, being unable to communicate with her. Very touching poetry.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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I admire you for taking on the difficult task of teaching. Your short verses really resonated with me, especially after reading your notes. I was devestated when i lost my mom, but also strangely relieved that her suffering was over. I had lost her long before she died, being unable to communicate with her. Very touching poetry.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you for reading and reviewing, Boogienights. I am so sorry to hear about losing your mother. That's never easy. I lost my mom to cancer in 2012. I was her primary caretaker, and while I loved the extra time together when she passed, I was relieved, too, when her suffering ended. Thank you again for reading. Best wishes and take care. :D :D
Comment from T.A. Walk
Beautiful work. Amazing burst of inspiration. I often work sporadically as well, with the moment moving me whenever it so chooses!
So sorry to hear about the situation with your father. I fought unsuccessfully my whole life to connect with mine. Take these days and make the most of them :)
We are capable of immeasurable strength, my friend. I say this to let you know that everything is going to be alright. Take that loss and focus it into your art and take solace in helping a new generation grow.
No SPAG critique to offer. Thank you for sharing.
Remember, our possibilities are infinite!!
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Beautiful work. Amazing burst of inspiration. I often work sporadically as well, with the moment moving me whenever it so chooses!
So sorry to hear about the situation with your father. I fought unsuccessfully my whole life to connect with mine. Take these days and make the most of them :)
We are capable of immeasurable strength, my friend. I say this to let you know that everything is going to be alright. Take that loss and focus it into your art and take solace in helping a new generation grow.
No SPAG critique to offer. Thank you for sharing.
Remember, our possibilities are infinite!!
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you for reading and reviewing, T.A.Walk. I appreciate your feedback and am glad I'm not the only sporadic writer. Many of my life experiences (no matter how minor) make it into my writing somehow. My teachers always emphasized writing what I know, and I've kept this kernel of wisdom close to my heart. Thank you again for reading. Best wishes and take care. :D :D
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I emphasize writing what you know to my kids who are trying to write!!
Good advice!!
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Thank you! :D
Comment from karenina
The metaphorical connection between the many facets of snow and of life is striking, and touches my heart.
As children our dads were magic, as we grow we see time diminishes snowflakes and takes its toll on each of us...
Many of us live in that numbing state, with awe and wonder, fascinated by the snow even as it diminishes in the sun...
With time, we accept we must live in the moment...
Regrets melt away and love carries us through the storm!
So glad your classes are more manageable!
Nice to see you post.
You have a FS family that supports you!
Blessings to your father!
Karenina
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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The metaphorical connection between the many facets of snow and of life is striking, and touches my heart.
As children our dads were magic, as we grow we see time diminishes snowflakes and takes its toll on each of us...
Many of us live in that numbing state, with awe and wonder, fascinated by the snow even as it diminishes in the sun...
With time, we accept we must live in the moment...
Regrets melt away and love carries us through the storm!
So glad your classes are more manageable!
Nice to see you post.
You have a FS family that supports you!
Blessings to your father!
Karenina
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you for reading and reviewing, Karenina. I appreciate your feedback and kind words. Yes, I greatly appreciate my FanStory family. Everyone here is amazing! I've learned so much. I love the way you've described these situations--beautiful and poetic. Thank you again for commenting. Best wishes and take care. :D :D
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All My Best!
Comment from nomi338
Life has a nasty habit of giving you a gift then with the same hand slapping you brutally across the face. The beauty of the first snow of Winter can be awesomely inspiring. The devastation of watching someone precious to you deteriorate can be numbing and life altering. You have my prayers. I am an Arkansas native, though I have not lived there for many years.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Life has a nasty habit of giving you a gift then with the same hand slapping you brutally across the face. The beauty of the first snow of Winter can be awesomely inspiring. The devastation of watching someone precious to you deteriorate can be numbing and life altering. You have my prayers. I am an Arkansas native, though I have not lived there for many years.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you for reading and reviewing, nomi338. I appreciate your feedback. Yes, life is notorious for offering a gift in one hand and then slapping us with the other. Those moments--life's growing pains, as I call them, are painful. Thank you for your prayers. I appreciate them. It's only my second year here in Arkansas, but I'm still happy here--even with the bitterly cold temperatures. Thank you again for commenting. Best wishes and take care. :D :D
Comment from Lea Tonin1
I'm glad things are going well with your math class and welcome back what better way to do it when the gorgeous poem like this! Beautiful haikus perfectly expressing your inner self. Thank you for sharing these with us! Casino issues with aesthetic subject matter sentence structure or grammar great job on this poem beautiful piece of work I wish you best of luck and I hope 2024 gives you all you wish for have a great day!
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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I'm glad things are going well with your math class and welcome back what better way to do it when the gorgeous poem like this! Beautiful haikus perfectly expressing your inner self. Thank you for sharing these with us! Casino issues with aesthetic subject matter sentence structure or grammar great job on this poem beautiful piece of work I wish you best of luck and I hope 2024 gives you all you wish for have a great day!
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you for reading and reviewing, Lea. I appreciate it and your feedback. I'm thrilled the haikus came across so well. Wishing you the best of luck in 2024, too. Take care. :D :D
Comment from June Sargent
When emotional turmoil within us spills over, our lives can feel like it's spiraling out of control. I'm glad yours came out as beautiful haiku. Communing with nature can calm us down and give us respite. Continue writing and sharing. It can ground you as life swirls around us. My thoughts are with you and your dad.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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When emotional turmoil within us spills over, our lives can feel like it's spiraling out of control. I'm glad yours came out as beautiful haiku. Communing with nature can calm us down and give us respite. Continue writing and sharing. It can ground you as life swirls around us. My thoughts are with you and your dad.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you for reading and reviewing, June. I'm happy I could resume my writing, as I've been so overwhelmed with teaching. Yes, nature is a wonderful respite I've come to appreciate in recent years. Thank you again for commenting. Best wishes and take care. :D :D
