God Called
God came to recover his soul31 total reviews
Comment from estory
This comes across as a poignant, sad tale of a lonely man. You give the reasons for his aloofness. His wife died. But what is really sad is that he couldn't grasp those outstretched hands of help and sympathy when it was offered to him. You had some strong images of him here sitting by himself, and then found with that gun in his hand, with the suicide note. It is a portrait of someone who just couldn't find a way into the light from out of the darkness. estory
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This comes across as a poignant, sad tale of a lonely man. You give the reasons for his aloofness. His wife died. But what is really sad is that he couldn't grasp those outstretched hands of help and sympathy when it was offered to him. You had some strong images of him here sitting by himself, and then found with that gun in his hand, with the suicide note. It is a portrait of someone who just couldn't find a way into the light from out of the darkness. estory
Comment Written 01-Dec-2022
Comment from Terry Broxson
Willie, a sad and lonely poem, culminated with an act of loneliness or perhaps desperation. The warning about God may be a little late for the old coot. Excellent writing and presentation. Terry.
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Willie, a sad and lonely poem, culminated with an act of loneliness or perhaps desperation. The warning about God may be a little late for the old coot. Excellent writing and presentation. Terry.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2022
Comment from Wendy G
Such a sad ending for a lonely man overcome by grief and loneliness. You have written the poem very smoothly with excellent rhyme as well as metre. The image was also well chosen.
Wendy
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Such a sad ending for a lonely man overcome by grief and loneliness. You have written the poem very smoothly with excellent rhyme as well as metre. The image was also well chosen.
Wendy
Comment Written 01-Dec-2022
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your poem read well, Willie. I liked the font, the rhymes,
and your picture. You told a good story though it was
poignant. I could see everything as I read due to your
descriptive words/lines. The ending was sad, but hopefully
God forgave him.
Thanks for the notes.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
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Your poem read well, Willie. I liked the font, the rhymes,
and your picture. You told a good story though it was
poignant. I could see everything as I read due to your
descriptive words/lines. The ending was sad, but hopefully
God forgave him.
Thanks for the notes.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 30-Nov-2022
Comment from Raul1
I have enjoyed reading your wonderful and interesting poetry. It is interesting and impressive. Exceptional work! No mistakes found in your poetry. It is clear and concise. Thank you for sharing!
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I have enjoyed reading your wonderful and interesting poetry. It is interesting and impressive. Exceptional work! No mistakes found in your poetry. It is clear and concise. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 30-Nov-2022
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is a sad story about a gief stricken man unable to get over theworst hurdle of all, the loss of your life long love. Well told Willie, I enjoyed the read. Cheers
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This is a sad story about a gief stricken man unable to get over theworst hurdle of all, the loss of your life long love. Well told Willie, I enjoyed the read. Cheers
Comment Written 30-Nov-2022
Comment from jake cosmos aller
very powerful and moving poem about a character straight out of the old west. I like the cursive font and the image that brings to life this character and his life.
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very powerful and moving poem about a character straight out of the old west. I like the cursive font and the image that brings to life this character and his life.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2022
Comment from prettybluebirds
Geez, this is kind of depressing writing. I was hoping the old guy would find a new lease on life, not kill himself. The artwork you added is perfect and compliments the words you wrote. Nicely done.
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Geez, this is kind of depressing writing. I was hoping the old guy would find a new lease on life, not kill himself. The artwork you added is perfect and compliments the words you wrote. Nicely done.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2022
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I love this poem. The cursive writing is readable, too. It is really an important message to send. Every word is understandable, and the rhyming effect is unique.
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I love this poem. The cursive writing is readable, too. It is really an important message to send. Every word is understandable, and the rhyming effect is unique.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2022
Comment from zanya
This poem grips the reader's attention from the start -how many people today mend their own socks or even cook their own food? - a tale of a man who lived life by his own lights, so to speak- really interesting & what a superb visual -all 6's gone so only a virtual 6-love the font
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This poem grips the reader's attention from the start -how many people today mend their own socks or even cook their own food? - a tale of a man who lived life by his own lights, so to speak- really interesting & what a superb visual -all 6's gone so only a virtual 6-love the font
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Comment Written 29-Oct-2022
