The Aspen Grove Murders
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "The Aspen Grove Murders"A Tommy Thompson Mystery
34 total reviews
Comment from Sankey
This is going to be right up your street of very good stories. Of a much different nature to normal. Just one spag. Either in a building[s]OR
in [a] buildings
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2022
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This is going to be right up your street of very good stories. Of a much different nature to normal. Just one spag. Either in a building[s]OR
in [a] buildings
Comment Written 08-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2022
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Thank you for wonderful review and super stars, dear Geoff. It means so much to have you with me in my newest endeavor. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs
Comment from Mary Shifman
This is a fascinating first chapter of your mystery. I've never written a mystery but I read them frequently. I especially like those with a paranormal flavor. Can't wait for the next chapter.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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This is a fascinating first chapter of your mystery. I've never written a mystery but I read them frequently. I especially like those with a paranormal flavor. Can't wait for the next chapter.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much for the kind stars and compliments, Mary. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Sending you my best today as always,
Sally :))
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You are welcome.
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You are welcome. Best wishes to you, too.
Comment from lyenochka
Well, as always, you do a great job with your characters! I think you set up an engaging story and a team we can root for and I know it will be resolved successfully. And there is both a physical and spiritual plotline. I just hope your future chapters will be shorter...
Willa Sams will take you statement (your)
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2022
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Well, as always, you do a great job with your characters! I think you set up an engaging story and a team we can root for and I know it will be resolved successfully. And there is both a physical and spiritual plotline. I just hope your future chapters will be shorter...
Willa Sams will take you statement (your)
Comment Written 07-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2022
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Oh, now wonderful. Thank you so much! Yes, it was in the Murder, We Wrote contest and I was the only one that wasn't a short story. I asked Tom if I could opt out and he said yes. It's a book now. I changed the name too. I'm so glad you enjoyed it, albeit long. The others won't be so long. I had to meet the contest requirements and I had reviews already, so I left it as it was. Thank you, again!
Love and blessings,
Sal XOs
Comment from Thesis
This story is quite interesting, especially since you've added that the victim's father was a Baltimore Detective and can really help to solve this case. Beside the fact that in reality they might not include this person to be anywhere near the case since it's a victim's relative, you make a good story where any people are unusually hired, some with no relevant background to become detectives.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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This story is quite interesting, especially since you've added that the victim's father was a Baltimore Detective and can really help to solve this case. Beside the fact that in reality they might not include this person to be anywhere near the case since it's a victim's relative, you make a good story where any people are unusually hired, some with no relevant background to become detectives.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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Thank you for the excellent review and comments. Both are so appreciated. Sending you my best today as always,
Sally :))
Comment from prettybluebirds
I don't much care for mystery or detective stories, but this one is superb. It grabbed my attention with the first paragraph and held it until the last. Your dialogue is excellent. I could visualize each scene as I read the story. Great writing.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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I don't much care for mystery or detective stories, but this one is superb. It grabbed my attention with the first paragraph and held it until the last. Your dialogue is excellent. I could visualize each scene as I read the story. Great writing.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2022
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Thank you for the lovely review and generous compliments. I'm delighted you enjoyed my latest endeavor. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
This is quite the exciting story, mystery author. I was sure at first that it was going to be a serial killer or some druggie kids that killed Phoebe in hinddsight I should have realized that with this being Halloween, it makes sense there would be witches, devil worshipers, killers that are more part of the Halloween theme. I can't wait to hear now that Tom is involved in helping to solve his own daughter's murder. Great story!
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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This is quite the exciting story, mystery author. I was sure at first that it was going to be a serial killer or some druggie kids that killed Phoebe in hinddsight I should have realized that with this being Halloween, it makes sense there would be witches, devil worshipers, killers that are more part of the Halloween theme. I can't wait to hear now that Tom is involved in helping to solve his own daughter's murder. Great story!
Comment Written 30-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Thank you, Debi Marquette! How kind you are! I appreciate the excellent review and keen insight! Blessings, Mystery Writer
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
This is quite the exciting story, mystery author. I was sure at first that it was going to be a serial killer or some druggie kids that killed Phoebe in hinddsight I should have realized that with this being Halloween, it makes sense there would be witches, devil worshipers, killers that are more part of the Halloween theme. I can't wait to hear now that Tom is involved in helping to solve his own daughter's murder. Great story!
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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This is quite the exciting story, mystery author. I was sure at first that it was going to be a serial killer or some druggie kids that killed Phoebe in hinddsight I should have realized that with this being Halloween, it makes sense there would be witches, devil worshipers, killers that are more part of the Halloween theme. I can't wait to hear now that Tom is involved in helping to solve his own daughter's murder. Great story!
Comment Written 30-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much for your kind review of my murder mystery. It is so appreciated, Debi Pick Marquette!
Blessings,
Mystery Writer
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Good start. Very nice writing.
The characters come across as real.
Good, natural dialogue.
Good luck in the contest. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Good start. Very nice writing.
The characters come across as real.
Good, natural dialogue.
Good luck in the contest. Best wishes.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Thank you, Mr. Fowler! Blessings back to you and yours,
Mystery Writer
Comment from GWHARGIS
Wow! That was an incredible first chapter. I got a kick out of Willa trying to deputize everyone. Jo seems like a good, hearty character. I can't wait to see where you go with this. Great job. Good luck in the contest. Gretchen
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Wow! That was an incredible first chapter. I got a kick out of Willa trying to deputize everyone. Jo seems like a good, hearty character. I can't wait to see where you go with this. Great job. Good luck in the contest. Gretchen
Comment Written 29-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much, Gretchen! I'm glad you enjoyed my first chapter. Mystery Writer
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a very interesting story, and it is well-written with only one error I noticed: She('s) buried in . . . The main problem I see with your story is that I can't tell your commas from your periods. Perhaps it is the font you used. It is very distracting as there are so many periods as far as I can see. I think it has a good chance of being an important contender in the Murder, I wrote contest if this was fixed.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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This is a very interesting story, and it is well-written with only one error I noticed: She('s) buried in . . . The main problem I see with your story is that I can't tell your commas from your periods. Perhaps it is the font you used. It is very distracting as there are so many periods as far as I can see. I think it has a good chance of being an important contender in the Murder, I wrote contest if this was fixed.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Thank you. I can't do anything about the font. No one else has complained. This will be a strong contender, nonetheless.
