Wedding Day Bonus
A short tale about step-brothers22 total reviews
Comment from Fleedleflump
Loved this tale of step brothers figuring out their burgeoning relationship and testing the waters with one another. I very much enjoyed the read.
Tiny spag suggestion:
'Five minutes later as he raced to catch a spiral pass,' - might benefit from a comma after 'later'
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reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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Loved this tale of step brothers figuring out their burgeoning relationship and testing the waters with one another. I very much enjoyed the read.
Tiny spag suggestion:
'Five minutes later as he raced to catch a spiral pass,' - might benefit from a comma after 'later'
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Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read my story closely. I fixed the spag. Glad you enjoyed the read. Rod
Comment from mermaids
I enjoyed reading this story, it gives the reader a good feeling at the end. I like how the two step brothers become close through the playing of football. Excellent flash fiction story that says much.
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reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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I enjoyed reading this story, it gives the reader a good feeling at the end. I like how the two step brothers become close through the playing of football. Excellent flash fiction story that says much.
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Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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I am so pleased my story left you with a good feeling. Many thanks for sharing and your kind praise. Rod
