Goodbye Pretty Ricky
The Downfall of a popular performer.48 total reviews
Comment from joycetreasures
Hello NOMI,
This is a nice fictional poem about Ricky and his wife. This is a nice read from the beginning to end. I like the title you chose, "Goodbye Pretty Ricky." Interesting story, my friend. I lived in South Dakota for two years, so I love the name Fargo! This is a nicely written, poem that sparked by my imagination. I like it!! As usually, you did a great job on this poem. I like it!! Well done.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Hello NOMI,
This is a nice fictional poem about Ricky and his wife. This is a nice read from the beginning to end. I like the title you chose, "Goodbye Pretty Ricky." Interesting story, my friend. I lived in South Dakota for two years, so I love the name Fargo! This is a nicely written, poem that sparked by my imagination. I like it!! As usually, you did a great job on this poem. I like it!! Well done.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Hello dear friend and fellow author. I spent two years in Grand Forks. I chose Fargo because of its rhyming qualities. I thank you for your generous and encouraging review comments.
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Hello Nomi,
You are so welcome. I took a little break from my poetry writing, but will submit one very soon. Life will keep you busy. However, I grateful for every day, the Lord gives me. Stay safe and blessed.
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Good to hear from you again. I pray that life gives you every good gift. I enjoy our conversations via FS. I look forward to hearing from you again soon.
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I truly enjoy our conversations also. Happy Memorial Day to you. Stay safe.
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You are welcome.
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Thank you so much.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Goodbye Pretty Ricky
by nomi338
Hello, Nomi,
You made this story poem sound real. I know it has happened before. Many abandoned children grow with a hole in their soul and a question...why did they leave me? What's wrong with me?
Well done!
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Goodbye Pretty Ricky
by nomi338
Hello, Nomi,
You made this story poem sound real. I know it has happened before. Many abandoned children grow with a hole in their soul and a question...why did they leave me? What's wrong with me?
Well done!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thank you, your review comments are very welcome.
Comment from Gracie619
I came upon this work of yours while taking a break from work. It had me putting down my hot cup of coffee and leaning into my computer screen to take it all in. And then I had to read it again. You are truly blessed with a writing gift. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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I came upon this work of yours while taking a break from work. It had me putting down my hot cup of coffee and leaning into my computer screen to take it all in. And then I had to read it again. You are truly blessed with a writing gift. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Wow! I have rarely received a review as pleasing as this. Your comments are very encouraging and uplifting. I cannot thank you enough.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your poem is well-thought out. You did a good job with its presentation. This could apply to so many celebs. Your words are descriptive, the rhymes work well, and the flow is smooth.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Your poem is well-thought out. You did a good job with its presentation. This could apply to so many celebs. Your words are descriptive, the rhymes work well, and the flow is smooth.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much Jan. You truly know how to make a guy's day more enjoyable. I am at this moment, floating above the clouds.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your well-written, heart-wrenching poem conveys a powerful message
about how good-looking, talented people--in spite of widespread appreciation and praise--sometimes crash and burn because of a void that never gets filled. There is a void in every person that only God can fill.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Your well-written, heart-wrenching poem conveys a powerful message
about how good-looking, talented people--in spite of widespread appreciation and praise--sometimes crash and burn because of a void that never gets filled. There is a void in every person that only God can fill.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Your words are absolutely true. Thank you for a wonderful review.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
So basically a story about an abandoned child? All he had, his looks, his talent, drew many admirers and what seems to be a solid fan base. But, I'm guessing here, because he didn't have loving parents there was a hole in his heart that couldn't be filled. He ended it.
Ralf
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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So basically a story about an abandoned child? All he had, his looks, his talent, drew many admirers and what seems to be a solid fan base. But, I'm guessing here, because he didn't have loving parents there was a hole in his heart that couldn't be filled. He ended it.
Ralf
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Correct. It does not matter if the world loves you, when the two people who brought you here do not.
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Aaaah!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
It's such a sad story, Nomi. He was left with a hole in his soul. I wonder if that was because he was left on the church steps by his parents? That could so easily happen, as many children have had that happen to them. Where parents are so poor they can't afford to feed and clothe the baby. A fictitious story, but it could have been true. Well done, my friend, a lovely, well-written story in a poem, but with a sad ending. Warm hugs Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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It's such a sad story, Nomi. He was left with a hole in his soul. I wonder if that was because he was left on the church steps by his parents? That could so easily happen, as many children have had that happen to them. Where parents are so poor they can't afford to feed and clothe the baby. A fictitious story, but it could have been true. Well done, my friend, a lovely, well-written story in a poem, but with a sad ending. Warm hugs Sandra xxx
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much dear friend. It does not matter who loves you, if the one(s) you want to love you do not.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-At first glance, I thought
that was Ricky Martin in the photo,
but then I read your notes.
-You wrote a very good poem, nomi.
-It is like a story poem about
this person who didn't seem
to have a lot of chance even
at the very beginning of his life.
-The imagery is vivid as you
share his story of his career:
"He looked like Elvis, sang,
and danced like James Brown."
-Some would say he had it all,
but it was his act and not his soul.
-This is an excellent poem I
wish I had a sixth star for.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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-At first glance, I thought
that was Ricky Martin in the photo,
but then I read your notes.
-You wrote a very good poem, nomi.
-It is like a story poem about
this person who didn't seem
to have a lot of chance even
at the very beginning of his life.
-The imagery is vivid as you
share his story of his career:
"He looked like Elvis, sang,
and danced like James Brown."
-Some would say he had it all,
but it was his act and not his soul.
-This is an excellent poem I
wish I had a sixth star for.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Your wonderful assessment and response to my poem is worth more to me than ten stars. Thank you.
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You are very welcome, nomi, and I appreciate your reply. You did a great job with this poem.
Comment from Pantygynt
Unfortunately this kind of thing happens all too frequently, particularly in the world of musical entertainment where there seems to be a need to be continually on a high. Your trademark style that owes much to rap is just discernible in this piece.
The only criticism I have is your use of the verb 'to do' as an auxiliary that adds no meaning to the line.
'This farewell letter he did pen.'
Might I suggest:
'This farewell letter he then penned.'
This would retain what you want to say and adds meaning (as a consequence) while retaininfg the rhythm you wanted.
The use of 'to do' as an auxiliary was popular in Wordsworth's time but is no longer highly regarded.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Unfortunately this kind of thing happens all too frequently, particularly in the world of musical entertainment where there seems to be a need to be continually on a high. Your trademark style that owes much to rap is just discernible in this piece.
The only criticism I have is your use of the verb 'to do' as an auxiliary that adds no meaning to the line.
'This farewell letter he did pen.'
Might I suggest:
'This farewell letter he then penned.'
This would retain what you want to say and adds meaning (as a consequence) while retaininfg the rhythm you wanted.
The use of 'to do' as an auxiliary was popular in Wordsworth's time but is no longer highly regarded.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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As is wise and highly recommended, I will yield to your wisdom, experience and wit. Thank you kind Sir.
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Nomi,
I'm hope you stay well in these times!
A fantastic, yet sad account of a person corroded by pain.
Even though your account is fiction, it can pertain to the several artists and musicians who fell from grace or sacrificed a good life all in the name of fame.
Your words are effective and ring true for too many performers.
Have a wonderful weekend, Nomi.
It is good to hear from you.
Blessings,
Good luck in the contest,
Cindy
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Nomi,
I'm hope you stay well in these times!
A fantastic, yet sad account of a person corroded by pain.
Even though your account is fiction, it can pertain to the several artists and musicians who fell from grace or sacrificed a good life all in the name of fame.
Your words are effective and ring true for too many performers.
Have a wonderful weekend, Nomi.
It is good to hear from you.
Blessings,
Good luck in the contest,
Cindy
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thank you dear friend. As is always the case, it is a certain pleasure to communicate with and trade wishes and thoughts with treasured friends. I pray that good things rest upon you and those you love constantly.
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Thank you, Nomi. Blessings to you and your loved ones too.
Cindy
