Comment from Loren .

Excellent

This could easily be the preamble of a new novel for you, Ulla. You are so good at foreshadowing and cliff hangers. Not to mention an intriguing character and story line. Loren

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2020

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020

Thank you so much, Loren. Almost all of my reviewers have said that, and I'm beginning to believe that I may have a new story in the making. But first to finish The Fisheman' Son, which I so enjoy writing. Ulla:)))

Comment from LaRosa

Exceptional

Wow, I hung on every word. There's so much weight and emotion packed into each part of the unfolding story. So much in just 100 words it leaves me to wonder whether another longer story is in the offing.
The dreamy flow of words and thought like the water depicted was beautiful. The shock that it may lead to a netherr-world experience is next and then the question of who she (my thought chose it to be a she) is and what 'he' did to her, and why. All elements of a great spy story. Since you say 'spy' I feel it is more than a man/woman violence moment. You really have me guessing. Political intrigue of a story? Or is it of today, real life politics? hmm, That's good.

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2020

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020

Wow, Thank you so much for this fantastic review and a lovely star. Yeah, I may turn it into a new novel. I have some ideas. But I want to write a bit more of the Fisherman first.Thanks a lot for this wonderful review. You sure made my day. Ulla:)))

Comment from Vanna1

Excellent

I'm not sure of the meaning here, but it is a very dreamy piece. Has a lot of mystery and suspense. Good entry, the site thinks so. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2020

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020

Thank you so much for your review. Yes, the mystery of what is going on is rreally the issue.Thanks a lot again. Ulla:)))

Comment from Mistydawn

Exceptional

This would make an excellent beginning to a story. The possible backstories are endless. Trying to better their life only to fall into one a thousand times worse. Your story is very well-written, interesting start to finish. Good luck with your contest.

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2020

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020

Wow, Misty, thank you so much and for the lovely stars, as well. Yes, so many have said that it could be the beginning of a new story. I'm beginning to have an idea. You made my day! Ulla:)))

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

I think I am right when I say that flash work still needs to follow the rules of grammar. Your first sentence/paragraph is not correct because it has no verb, and at the other end I think 'bell' would be a more definite noun to go with 'chimed' rather than 'a ring'.

Spot on for word count. And an interesting idea.

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2020

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020

I think you are absolutely right, Jim and it stands corrected. It was an easy fix to make. Actually, seeing it now after so many hours, I have no idea why I didn't write it correctly in the first place. Ulla:)))

Comment from Ben Colder

Excellent

Wow! I was glued to this and disappointed when it stopped. You are
a great writer and enjoy reading your work. Hope you do well in the contest.
The photo makes me thirsty

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2020

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020

Thank you so much Ben. I so appreciate it. Ulla:)))

Comment from Iza Deleanu

Excellent

I must say that this story is very confusing, who died or it didn't die what prey or who is the victim and the aggressor? Thank you for sharing and good luck with contest.

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2020

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020

Thank you so much, Iza. Yes, I can see how you could be confused. But so was he. Ulla:)))

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

Puts me to wondering what really happens next. So, maybe this is one of those that needs to be added on to. Anyway, just a thought, thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2020

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020

Thanks a lot, Ric. Almoost every reviewer has said that so I suppose that's what I will do. An idea is forming. Thanks again. Ulla:)))

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Oh boy there is lots of mystery in this one, Ulla. And now the shadow world has come into existence through his death and he will be fighting to save all of earthly mankind.

Wishing you much luck with the Contest Committee. :)

Gloria

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2020

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020

Thank you so much, Gloria. Yes it's up to the reader what to make of it. I think you have a great interpretation. Ulla:)))

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

This is beautifully written flash fiction. There is a lot of mystery here that leaves the reader wondering if the first person writer is the spy who dies or is it some one else. What is the truth that no longer exist. This sounds like the teaser for a longer story or novel Good luck with the grear entry and congratulation of your book of month win.

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2020

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020

Thank you so much, Beth, and for the congrats. I so appreciate it. Almost everybody has said that it's a teaser for a much longer story. An idea has started to form in my head. Ulla:)))