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A collection of stories: Some True, some not

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Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
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Sensuous--the in itself trite ruby lips redeemed by moistened gems. You manage to build suspense in this short piece by her actions and intensity. Good luck. Cheers. LIZ

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 16-Jun-2020
    Thank you!
Comment from lancellot
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Hmm, well that was one hundred words. It is a complete scene and I think it will appeal to many FanStory Members for it's simplicity and well written structure. As far as Flash, I'm not so sure, but what do I know.

Good Luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 16-Jun-2020
    lance thanks, its always hard to determine.....
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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I enjoyed your well written flash fiction contest entry, Mystery Author. You handled the prompt well. The theme is interesting to think about. I believe the man enjoyed the kiss although he was taken by surprise. Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
    Jan, I do thank you so very much!
Comment from sibhus
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Sounds like quite a kiss. And it makes a well written entry for the contest. It has a slightly mysterious aura to it that makes for a good read, as well. Good job and good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
    sibhus, thank you I appreciate the good wishes.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
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Awfully she was a first class kisser, she kissed you after warning; it was urgent, pressing, tenderly affectionate and consuming; well said, well done; enjoyed the read; thanks for sharing this; keep writing. Wish good luck in the contest. ALCREATOR

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 Comment Written 15-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
    Thanks my friend, have a good week!
Comment from Bill Schott
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This one-hundred-word romance story, First Class Kisser, has the required word count and gives us the required kiss between strangers with the improbable smooch in the concourse. If this were me I would wake up next to this woman I'd been daydreaming about as she began a tirade about my snoring. Nice job.

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
    Bill you and me are both in the boat LOL!
Comment from Joker S J
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An interesting concept, that shows a clear picture of the randomness of life. Great read!

I would change "No words were not spoken, we parted ways." to get rid of the double-negative. Either "No words were spoken," or, "Not a word was spoken," works much better in my opinion.

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
    Thanks for catching that silly spag ugh
reply by Joker S J on 17-Jun-2020
    Anytime!
Comment from roof35
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This is a bit weird but I guess the contest requires it. You followed the rules. Your prose is well-done. Your illustration pairs perfectly with your words. It is nicely done.

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
    roof35, yep sometimes these rules are something else..
Comment from humpwhistle
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An interesting entry into the 100 Word Dash. Long ago, trains and train stations were considered 'romantic' in some Victorian way. Airports, I find exceedingly impersonal. Perhaps you're story is a counter-point.

Best of luck.

Peace, Lee


No words were not spoken, we parted ways.--Did you mean for this to be a double negative?

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
    Lee so very true the perfect shock being in the airport where people are just robotic.
Comment from Bobby Cunningham
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What an adorable little tale. I love the title and the photo is perfect. Gently pressing her moistened jewels... This is my favorite part, so poetically written. Best of luck in the upcoming contest.

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 Comment Written 15-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
    Bollie113, thank you!