Slo' Joe
A race horse that wasn't.36 total reviews
Comment from Margaret Bednar
Hmm, a cutting horse needs to have huge bursts of speed - so "ol' slo' joe couldnt' have been too slow! This must been a Quarter Horse - they used to race them a quarter mile - hense the name - an not a thoroughbred - can't imagine a thoroughbred cutting on a dime :) Adorable poem, though. I think some horses just see the sense in racing - they need more of a "job" :)
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
  |
Hmm, a cutting horse needs to have huge bursts of speed - so "ol' slo' joe couldnt' have been too slow! This must been a Quarter Horse - they used to race them a quarter mile - hense the name - an not a thoroughbred - can't imagine a thoroughbred cutting on a dime :) Adorable poem, though. I think some horses just see the sense in racing - they need more of a "job" :)
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
-
Thank you, Margaret for the review and stars. Slo' Joe also thanks you.
Comment from zanya
What an entertaining read about this lovable equine Slo' Joe told with fondness and a sense of fun - and with a little 'message' maybe reminding us it's best if we find out what we're really good at ! Lovely illustration
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
|
What an entertaining read about this lovable equine Slo' Joe told with fondness and a sense of fun - and with a little 'message' maybe reminding us it's best if we find out what we're really good at ! Lovely illustration
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
-
Thank you, Zanya, for the nice review and stars.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about slo joev the racing horse that always ended up last in the horse race but he she's his best side as a hard working horse when the cowboy takes him to the farm.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
|
A very well-written poem about slo joev the racing horse that always ended up last in the horse race but he she's his best side as a hard working horse when the cowboy takes him to the farm.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
-
Thank you, Sandra for the nice review and stars. Nearly all horses are good for something, you just have to find what it is.
Comment from Sally Law
Slo' Joe sounds like my first horse ride. His name was "Lightning." I think the horse's owner meant to say he had been struck by lightning and had never fully recovered. Sweet though. Give me a sweet horse any day.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xo
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
|
Slo' Joe sounds like my first horse ride. His name was "Lightning." I think the horse's owner meant to say he had been struck by lightning and had never fully recovered. Sweet though. Give me a sweet horse any day.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xo
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
-
Slo' Joe and I thank you for the nice, comical review. I used to have a horse breeding ranch in Prescott, Arizona. I trained two of my horses to be so gentle, you could put a baby under them.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Aw, I'm so pleased your poem had a happy ending for ol' slo' Joe. We are not all born to be great athletes, but we all have a place is the world, once we've found out what it is, we're home free. I really enjoyed reading this lovely poem, Willie, it was nice to know that Joe was happy at last. Well done. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
|
Aw, I'm so pleased your poem had a happy ending for ol' slo' Joe. We are not all born to be great athletes, but we all have a place is the world, once we've found out what it is, we're home free. I really enjoyed reading this lovely poem, Willie, it was nice to know that Joe was happy at last. Well done. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
-
Slo' Joe and I thank you very much, for your review and stars. They are very much appreciated.
-
LOL! I know, it's because we are connected! lol. xxx
-
You must be wondering what I was talking about. Sorry, Willie, that was meant for the next reply. :)) xx
-
You bet.
Comment from Jacob David Collins
I liked the message behind this piece, I think we're all guilty of being judgmental of others in our lives. I thought the rhyme made your writing flow really well and I found it really engaging. A well written piece. I enjoyed reading it!
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
|
I liked the message behind this piece, I think we're all guilty of being judgmental of others in our lives. I thought the rhyme made your writing flow really well and I found it really engaging. A well written piece. I enjoyed reading it!
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
-
Slo' Joe and I appreciate your review and stars. I appreciate your comments as well.
Comment from kiwisteveh
A pleasant enough rhyming yarn about Slo' Joe - a rotten failure as a racehorse, but a great success on the range.
Some nice humorous touches such as turn on a dime and give back change.
Steve
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
|
A pleasant enough rhyming yarn about Slo' Joe - a rotten failure as a racehorse, but a great success on the range.
Some nice humorous touches such as turn on a dime and give back change.
Steve
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
-
Slo' Joe and I appreciate your nice review and stars.
Comment from Benshu-bookgai
A stunning example of innate abilities to shine if put in the right context :)
A few recommended tweaks:
Saying "...he was always last to make a speedy start" comes across as a logical inconsistency: If he's last out of the gate every time, he always had/has the least-speedy start (aka the slowest start). Plus, nothing about him (not even his name) is ever described to be fast (agile yes, fast no), so for him to be speedy--albeit the last one to get fast--seems it is out of character for him.
Also, there are capitalization inconsistencies throughout the piece for Slo' Joe.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
 |
A stunning example of innate abilities to shine if put in the right context :)
A few recommended tweaks:
Saying "...he was always last to make a speedy start" comes across as a logical inconsistency: If he's last out of the gate every time, he always had/has the least-speedy start (aka the slowest start). Plus, nothing about him (not even his name) is ever described to be fast (agile yes, fast no), so for him to be speedy--albeit the last one to get fast--seems it is out of character for him.
Also, there are capitalization inconsistencies throughout the piece for Slo' Joe.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
-
Thank you, for your comments. Capitalization was made at the start of each sentence.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a sweet story Willie about this horse and I so agree with your words, you never know what is behind the facade, glad Slo Joe proved himself, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
|
This is a sweet story Willie about this horse and I so agree with your words, you never know what is behind the facade, glad Slo Joe proved himself, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
-
Slo' Joe thanks you, Dolly, for the review and stars. So do I.
Comment from bob cullen
I worked in the racing industry for more than forty years. A the only thing slower than the horses I backed were the punters who bet on credit.
Loved the flow of your poem.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
|
I worked in the racing industry for more than forty years. A the only thing slower than the horses I backed were the punters who bet on credit.
Loved the flow of your poem.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
-
Thank you, Bob for your comical review and stars.
