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Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading this flash challenge. The great thing about challenges is us readers get the benefit.
Even the dogs had stopped barking. (Never happens here!! LOL My little Harley is just as bad as all the others.)
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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I enjoyed reading this flash challenge. The great thing about challenges is us readers get the benefit.
Even the dogs had stopped barking. (Never happens here!! LOL My little Harley is just as bad as all the others.)
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Thanks a lot, Barbara. I so appreciate it. Ulla:)))
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Story sets up well that Antonio was an old flame, and then slam dunks with his having cancer and kicking off. With everything else happening, no, it probably was not the time to read his letters. Best saved for another day, no doubt. Tale held interest throughout.
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Story sets up well that Antonio was an old flame, and then slam dunks with his having cancer and kicking off. With everything else happening, no, it probably was not the time to read his letters. Best saved for another day, no doubt. Tale held interest throughout.
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Thanks a lot, Brett. I'm glad you liked it. Much appreciated. Ulla:))
Comment from Sally Law
Oh my. This just socked me in the gut. Great response to the prompt, Ulla. I'm so sorry for this, but I can surely relate. Both my in-laws lost their spouses suddenly and remarried. Jackson's mother died when he was four months old and they were very much in love. I keep the family's ancestry and have stumbled across a lot of boxes of bittersweet memories and photos. You can tell a lot from an old photo. I'm glad I caught this. Superb!
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal xoxo
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Oh my. This just socked me in the gut. Great response to the prompt, Ulla. I'm so sorry for this, but I can surely relate. Both my in-laws lost their spouses suddenly and remarried. Jackson's mother died when he was four months old and they were very much in love. I keep the family's ancestry and have stumbled across a lot of boxes of bittersweet memories and photos. You can tell a lot from an old photo. I'm glad I caught this. Superb!
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal xoxo
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Thank you so much, Sally. I'm so glad you liked it. Much appreciated. Ulla:)))
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your club entry, Ulla. You did a great job with the imagery. I could see everything you mentioned--even the thick layer of dust on the box. I like how you described the fact that everything was quiet on the street. I agree with you about the time not being right to read the letters. Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
A virus had it's (its) grip on the world and had shot us all down.
I'd been lucky and seen it coming so I'd catered up and had plenty of food and drink for at least a month. So I honkered9 hunkered) down in my little house. Boxed in, as it were, with
ceiling with it's (its) rustic beams.
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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I enjoyed your club entry, Ulla. You did a great job with the imagery. I could see everything you mentioned--even the thick layer of dust on the box. I like how you described the fact that everything was quiet on the street. I agree with you about the time not being right to read the letters. Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
A virus had it's (its) grip on the world and had shot us all down.
I'd been lucky and seen it coming so I'd catered up and had plenty of food and drink for at least a month. So I honkered9 hunkered) down in my little house. Boxed in, as it were, with
ceiling with it's (its) rustic beams.
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Thanks a lot, Jan, and I'm glad you liked it. I've made the edits. Thanks for pointing them out. Ulla:)))
Comment from Gloria ....
This is a terrific story that held my attention from start to finish. You set up anticipation very nicely in the opening paragraphs. The setting is well defined and the characters the lead and Antonio. The only thing is the resolution to the conflict of silence faded a bit in the end. You might want to write another few paragraphs how suddenly all the voices could be heard again somehow.
Just a couple of typos:
A virus had it's (its) grip on the world and had shot us all.
So I honkered (hunkered) down in my little house.
You stated their was old stuff in the attic, so might want to add a record player or something in addition to the boxes.
I read this story with great interest and I hope you explore the theme further. You have a real way with weaving a story.
I want to know all the details. LOL
A most enjoyable read today.
Gloria
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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This is a terrific story that held my attention from start to finish. You set up anticipation very nicely in the opening paragraphs. The setting is well defined and the characters the lead and Antonio. The only thing is the resolution to the conflict of silence faded a bit in the end. You might want to write another few paragraphs how suddenly all the voices could be heard again somehow.
Just a couple of typos:
A virus had it's (its) grip on the world and had shot us all.
So I honkered (hunkered) down in my little house.
You stated their was old stuff in the attic, so might want to add a record player or something in addition to the boxes.
I read this story with great interest and I hope you explore the theme further. You have a real way with weaving a story.
I want to know all the details. LOL
A most enjoyable read today.
Gloria
Comment Written 14-May-2020
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Thanks a lot, Gloria, and for pointing out the nits. I've made the corrections and I've edited the piece quite a lot. I hope it reads better now. I've taken your suggestions to heart. Much appreciated. Ulla:)))
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Ulla. This is a very good narrative about the way times have changed in the last three months. The story of the box of letters from a past love adds to the melancholy of the story. It is a well told story with great descriptions of emotions and circumstances.
Robert
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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Hello Ulla. This is a very good narrative about the way times have changed in the last three months. The story of the box of letters from a past love adds to the melancholy of the story. It is a well told story with great descriptions of emotions and circumstances.
Robert
Comment Written 14-May-2020
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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Thank you so much, Robert. I'm so glad you liked it. It's a true story, although I posted it as fiction. All best. Ulla:)))
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You're welcome
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Very beautiful story, locked inside twice. Once because of the pandemic and twice because painful memories are surfacing from the locked box. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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Very beautiful story, locked inside twice. Once because of the pandemic and twice because painful memories are surfacing from the locked box. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 14-May-2020
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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Thank you so much, Iza. I'm so pleased that you liked it. Thanks again. Ulla:)))
Comment from Sankey
Enjoyed the meander through this. So sorry but I loved the picture as well.
Now some spags. I looked through this and saw a few places you may or may not want to fix. had sh[o](u)t us all down.
So I h[o](u)nkered down
outside a(t) least once a day.
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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Enjoyed the meander through this. So sorry but I loved the picture as well.
Now some spags. I looked through this and saw a few places you may or may not want to fix. had sh[o](u)t us all down.
So I h[o](u)nkered down
outside a(t) least once a day.
Comment Written 14-May-2020
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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Thank you so much, Geoff, and please forgive for my late answer. I've made the edits, and thanks for pointing them out. Ulla:)))
Comment from Irish Rain
I love this.
Trying to escape the ever-present message
of death, you inadvertently opened it up.
What a poignant tale, and I also love
the realism of the situation.
Sadly lovely,
blessings...
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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I love this.
Trying to escape the ever-present message
of death, you inadvertently opened it up.
What a poignant tale, and I also love
the realism of the situation.
Sadly lovely,
blessings...
Comment Written 14-May-2020
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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Thank you so very much and for the wonderful extra star. I'm so pleased.
It's also a true story although I've posted it under fiction. I was devastated when Antonio died. After all these years and a happy life I've never been able to re-read his letters. And I still can't. Thanks again. Ulla:)))
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It was so very touching...you are most welcome!!
Comment from Joan E.
I am glad you were inspired by Robin Corum's flash challenge and shared the result. I think most of us could relate to your description of sheltering at home and the discoveries. Fortunately, I do not think that most had jarring memories of a lost love. Sighs- Joan
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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I am glad you were inspired by Robin Corum's flash challenge and shared the result. I think most of us could relate to your description of sheltering at home and the discoveries. Fortunately, I do not think that most had jarring memories of a lost love. Sighs- Joan
Comment Written 14-May-2020
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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Thank you so much, Joan and for your lovely review. This is a true storyy, although it's posted as fiction. I wish it was fiction. I've led a very happy life but I've never forgotten. Thanks so much again, Ulla:)))
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I am glad you remember the happy memories as well. Have a peaceful Sunday- Joan
