Your Closet--Not Mine!
To honor the wishes of the dead?30 total reviews
Comment from robyn corum
Liz,
This was a really interesting and thoughtful piece. Gave much to think about. I thought this was well-written and enlightening.
A note:
--> Phil: Sorry to just show up, but I realize(d) I didn't have your number.
Thanks!
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2020
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Liz,
This was a really interesting and thoughtful piece. Gave much to think about. I thought this was well-written and enlightening.
A note:
--> Phil: Sorry to just show up, but I realize(d) I didn't have your number.
Thanks!
Comment Written 22-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2020
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Thank you for your thoughtful and eloquent remarks! So pleased you liked the play. This was inspired by a relative who refused to acknowledge his relationship despite knowing it would be accepted these days. Such a shame that he felt such shame. Thanks for stopping by. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from RetroStarfish
This is excellent. The theme seams almost quaint now - or perhaps that is just a wish on my behalf. You've handled the issue well, and with your usual humour.
"I should say, closets, plural. Separate closets, separate rooms. We never--officially--shared one."
Very well done.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2020
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This is excellent. The theme seams almost quaint now - or perhaps that is just a wish on my behalf. You've handled the issue well, and with your usual humour.
"I should say, closets, plural. Separate closets, separate rooms. We never--officially--shared one."
Very well done.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2020
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RetroSSSSSStarfish--you are aptly named! Delighted to partake of your generous galaxy. Indeed, the theme seems quaint--that's why the narrator is so frustrated--these days there is no need to live in the closet and deny who you are and who you love. This is inspired by a similar present-day true story. Thanks for stopping by! Cheers. LIZ
Comment from Goodadvicechan
I have no offense at the theme of homosexuality. It is nice that you explained Phil's feelings towards Larry in living inside the closet. I like the title: "Your Closet Not Mine."
I like the ending when Mary asked: "To speak, or to remain silent: Which shall I choose?" I know what I would chose but I won't reveal it.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2020
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I have no offense at the theme of homosexuality. It is nice that you explained Phil's feelings towards Larry in living inside the closet. I like the title: "Your Closet Not Mine."
I like the ending when Mary asked: "To speak, or to remain silent: Which shall I choose?" I know what I would chose but I won't reveal it.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2020
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Hello again! Thanks for stopping by--third time in one day.(No "double vision" this visit--you gave me two high-fives earlier!)
I am intrigued by your closing remark! Cheers. LIZ
Comment from estory
You've penned a poignant moment here, a moment of pain, love, loss and sympathy. The characters are strong and the dialogue is excellent, sharp, soft, packed with emotion, but in a subtle kind of way. We see two people struggling with their sexuality, and the mother of one of them struggling with the desire to honor a son's last pained wish and the desire to thank the man who loved him for loving him and not leaving him alone. A powerful moment. I have to think of my uncle, who lived at a time when homosexuality was taboo, and how he hid the true 'unspeakable' relationship with his partner from all of us. Nice job with it. estory
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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You've penned a poignant moment here, a moment of pain, love, loss and sympathy. The characters are strong and the dialogue is excellent, sharp, soft, packed with emotion, but in a subtle kind of way. We see two people struggling with their sexuality, and the mother of one of them struggling with the desire to honor a son's last pained wish and the desire to thank the man who loved him for loving him and not leaving him alone. A powerful moment. I have to think of my uncle, who lived at a time when homosexuality was taboo, and how he hid the true 'unspeakable' relationship with his partner from all of us. Nice job with it. estory
Comment Written 23-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your thoughtful and eloquent remarks! So pleased you liked the play.This was inspired by a relative who refused to acknowledge his relationship despite knowing it would be accepted these days. Such a shame that he felt such shame. Thanks for stopping by. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from Jesse James Doty
I love the content and theme of this script. This is an important issue to be aware of. I like much of what you have to say and how you address the issue. The voicing appears a little stunted and awkward. Especially when you switch from the phrase, "I am" to "am I" within the same sentence. But these are little tidbits that can be fixed in revision. Please take my critique with a grain of salt. I don't know how to write scripts and don't consider myself an editor. I don't have suggestions on how to improve this, it just seems like it needs some polishing, that's all. Thank you for sharing this story and taking the risks involved in doing so. I love the theme and message.
Take care,
Jesse
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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I love the content and theme of this script. This is an important issue to be aware of. I like much of what you have to say and how you address the issue. The voicing appears a little stunted and awkward. Especially when you switch from the phrase, "I am" to "am I" within the same sentence. But these are little tidbits that can be fixed in revision. Please take my critique with a grain of salt. I don't know how to write scripts and don't consider myself an editor. I don't have suggestions on how to improve this, it just seems like it needs some polishing, that's all. Thank you for sharing this story and taking the risks involved in doing so. I love the theme and message.
Take care,
Jesse
Comment Written 23-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your thoughtful and eloquent remarks, Jesse. Nice to see you--it's been awhile! I appreciate your taking the time to point out what didn't work for you; I assure you I take no offense. On the contrary; it indicates that you engaged with the piece rather than taking the easy way and auto-five with insipid remarks. (This was inspired by a relative who refused to acknowledge his relationship despite knowing it would be accepted these days. Such a shame that he felt such shame.) Thanks for stopping by. Cheers. LIZ
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Thank you for your thoughtful and eloquent remarks, Jesse. Nice to see you--it's been awhile! I appreciate your taking the time to point out what didn't work for you; I assure you I take no offense. On the contrary; it indicates that you engaged with the piece rather than taking the easy way and auto-five with insipid remarks. (This was inspired by a relative who refused to acknowledge his relationship despite knowing it would be accepted these days. Such a shame that he felt such shame.) Thanks for stopping by. Cheers. LIZ
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You are welcome, Elizabeth. Thank you for your gracious acceptance of my critique. I take my role as reviewer quite seriously. I don't opt for the "easy way," it is not in my nature. Thank you for placing value on my comments.
It feels good to get back into the swim of things here at FS. Have a good weekend.
Take care,
Jesse
Comment from equestrik
I love this script and surely love Mary and her deep love, acceptance and openness. It is so sad that Larry could not feel comfortable enough to live fully being who he was.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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I love this script and surely love Mary and her deep love, acceptance and openness. It is so sad that Larry could not feel comfortable enough to live fully being who he was.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your thoughtful and eloquent remarks! So pleased you liked the play. This was inspired by a relative who refused to acknowledge his relationship despite knowing it would be accepted these days. Such a shame that he felt such shame. Thanks for stopping by. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from Jasmine Girl
This is an interesting script and I like the happy ending. I'm wondering why you don't use the standard script format. I took a script writing class before and read some scripts here, too.
Well done otherwise.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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This is an interesting script and I like the happy ending. I'm wondering why you don't use the standard script format. I took a script writing class before and read some scripts here, too.
Well done otherwise.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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Ooops. Not savvy with the script format. So glad you appreciated the piece--I like the ending too! Thanks for stopping by, Lisa. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from LJbutterfly
You told me to go for it and stop by, so here I am again. Thank you for broaching this sensitive subject of so many living, breathing and loving (and deceased) individuals. You handled it in a simplistic and delicate manner that drew the reader into the script and monologue in a way that caused the reader to think about the best way to resolve Mary's dilemma. I enjoy your creativity.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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You told me to go for it and stop by, so here I am again. Thank you for broaching this sensitive subject of so many living, breathing and loving (and deceased) individuals. You handled it in a simplistic and delicate manner that drew the reader into the script and monologue in a way that caused the reader to think about the best way to resolve Mary's dilemma. I enjoy your creativity.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2020
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Delighted to see you Lorraine! I'm awed by your eloquent and heartfelt remarks. Stop by anytime. Cheers. LIZ
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Thank you, Lorraine, for your thoughtful and eloquent remarks.This was inspired by a relative who refused to acknowledge his relationship despite knowing it would be accepted these days. Such a shame that he felt such shame. Thanks for stopping by. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is excellent.
You have captured the cultural feel. I would suspect the era this
is depicting still made it very dangerous to be out, especially with AIDS. This is a poignant subject. It is indeed a painful rhetorical question posed. Why, even today there are few life partners acknowledged in obituaries. I thrill at the sight of any mention. This is a nice tribute to all who must remain invisible.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2020
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This is excellent.
You have captured the cultural feel. I would suspect the era this
is depicting still made it very dangerous to be out, especially with AIDS. This is a poignant subject. It is indeed a painful rhetorical question posed. Why, even today there are few life partners acknowledged in obituaries. I thrill at the sight of any mention. This is a nice tribute to all who must remain invisible.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2020
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Thank you Liz! This was inspired by a relative who refused to acknowledge his relationship despite knowing it would be accepted these days. Such a shame that he felt such shame. Thanks for stopping by. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This script is written so fantastic, simply, realistically, still dramatically and to the point; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2020
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This script is written so fantastic, simply, realistically, still dramatically and to the point; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 01-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2020
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Thank you! Cheers. LIZ