The Lighter Side of Things
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "The Perfect Wife"We all need to smile, especially these days.
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Comment from the13thpoet
Hello fellow poet. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Hello fellow poet. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Thank you very much the13thpoet xoxoxo
Comment from ImaginosBuzzardoDesdinova
That reminds me of an old joke I heard once. "John," the wife said to her husband, "you were there when I had the measles as a child, you were there when I broke my leg falling off that horse. You were with me when my mother died and later my father. And you were at my side when I had to put my dog down. John? You are really bad luck!". I really was amused at the poem, and got a good chuckle at the end.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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That reminds me of an old joke I heard once. "John," the wife said to her husband, "you were there when I had the measles as a child, you were there when I broke my leg falling off that horse. You were with me when my mother died and later my father. And you were at my side when I had to put my dog down. John? You are really bad luck!". I really was amused at the poem, and got a good chuckle at the end.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Thank you Imaginos! Love the joke and the review xoxoxoox
Comment from gingermo
I really enjoyed reading this tongue in cheek poem about a undeserving husband. You certainly hit the nail on the head a lot of the time and I often wonder whether men are generally selfish, the older generation anyway.
Maybe something to do with them wanting a mother not a wife. The poem rattled along at a great pace and the consistent rhyming added to its appeal. Well done.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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I really enjoyed reading this tongue in cheek poem about a undeserving husband. You certainly hit the nail on the head a lot of the time and I often wonder whether men are generally selfish, the older generation anyway.
Maybe something to do with them wanting a mother not a wife. The poem rattled along at a great pace and the consistent rhyming added to its appeal. Well done.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Thanks very much indeed gingermo xoxoxox
Comment from Fonda Little
My favorite part was, "Can you forgive me darling?
I know I'm the one to blame,
for not quite measuring up.
But now it's time for me to claim...". Because by the end of it he stopped making excuses and held himself accountable for his actions!
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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My favorite part was, "Can you forgive me darling?
I know I'm the one to blame,
for not quite measuring up.
But now it's time for me to claim...". Because by the end of it he stopped making excuses and held himself accountable for his actions!
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Thank you Fonda Little (love that name lol), glad you enjoyed this xoxoxoxo
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is hilarious, women have often been blamed for all the 'ills' in life by men and been their punch bag for too long! Ha ha ha, this is full of fun and I enjoyed every word, a great entry for the contest, I wish you luck, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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This is hilarious, women have often been blamed for all the 'ills' in life by men and been their punch bag for too long! Ha ha ha, this is full of fun and I enjoyed every word, a great entry for the contest, I wish you luck, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Thank you very much Dolly, I'm glad you enjoyed this! xoxoxoxo
Comment from Ogden
It was fun to read your heartfelt poem, and the admission of all those silly mistakes. I'm very sorry for your bereavement. Please accept my condolences for the loss of your loved one. And have no fear that I might reveal your guilty secret. Everyone's entitled to a few mistakes.
Ogden (Don)
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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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It was fun to read your heartfelt poem, and the admission of all those silly mistakes. I'm very sorry for your bereavement. Please accept my condolences for the loss of your loved one. And have no fear that I might reveal your guilty secret. Everyone's entitled to a few mistakes.
Ogden (Don)
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Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Lol, thanks for keeping my secret! A few errors is definitely forgiveable ;) Thank you for a great review xoxoxoxox
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Sounds like the wife here grew tired of being overlooked and under-appreciated and took a permanent step in correcting it. Here are some revealing lines: (...I got caught up with recipes
for meals that would impress,
and ones that cooked real quick,
for your unplanned, last minute, guests.)
I kind of think I would get rid of the parentheses and just have it weigh in as much as the other stanzas. Clever writing!
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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Sounds like the wife here grew tired of being overlooked and under-appreciated and took a permanent step in correcting it. Here are some revealing lines: (...I got caught up with recipes
for meals that would impress,
and ones that cooked real quick,
for your unplanned, last minute, guests.)
I kind of think I would get rid of the parentheses and just have it weigh in as much as the other stanzas. Clever writing!
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Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2020
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Thanks CrystieCookie, I took your advice because I was in doubt about putting brackets around that stanza.
Thanks for a very thorough and helpful review!
