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Viewing comments for Chapter 37 "St. Louis Chapter 16 part 1"Can McKenzie solve Megan Nelson?s murder?
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Comment from Ben Colder
I thought we would see a fight LOL. I see nothing wrong with this write. It does make me wonder when things will cool down between these two. I will be off site for awhile. I will catch up on your profile. Lets solve this murder.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2019
I thought we would see a fight LOL. I see nothing wrong with this write. It does make me wonder when things will cool down between these two. I will be off site for awhile. I will catch up on your profile. Lets solve this murder.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2019
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I want to solve the murder to. I think we're getting close. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
I don't want you getting shot too.
I think you need a comma. I don't want you getting shot, too.
After all the action of the previous chapter, this was a catch your breath and have a cup of coffee chapter.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2019
I don't want you getting shot too.
I think you need a comma. I don't want you getting shot, too.
After all the action of the previous chapter, this was a catch your breath and have a cup of coffee chapter.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2019
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Thank you for the kind review. I think you're right. I do need a comma. I'll add one.
Comment from royowen
There is a report that somebody manhandled an Austen Bryant, says Bill, Mac's Godfather, but Logan explains he was the one that was manhandled. Things are hotting up, with Mac saying she has to work to pay the bills, a bit awkward with her life under threat. Well done, blessings, Roy
Typo : manhand(ling) an Austen Bryant. Manhandled?
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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2019
There is a report that somebody manhandled an Austen Bryant, says Bill, Mac's Godfather, but Logan explains he was the one that was manhandled. Things are hotting up, with Mac saying she has to work to pay the bills, a bit awkward with her life under threat. Well done, blessings, Roy
Typo : manhand(ling) an Austen Bryant. Manhandled?
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Comment Written 27-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2019
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Thank you for the kind review and the catch. I am off to correct it right now.
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Well done
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, This is a great chapter and the conflict really comes through. He wants to protect her, and she can't really afford not to work. What to do? Just one small thing:
"I guess I need to wait breakfast until after we finish our runs." I guess I need having to wait for breakfast ...
Great story. Can't wait to reading on. Ulla xx
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2019
Hi Barbara, This is a great chapter and the conflict really comes through. He wants to protect her, and she can't really afford not to work. What to do? Just one small thing:
"I guess I need to wait breakfast until after we finish our runs." I guess I need having to wait for breakfast ...
Great story. Can't wait to reading on. Ulla xx
Comment Written 27-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2019
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I am off to make that correction. Thank you for the catch.