The Axeman of Demonshore
Beware...19 total reviews
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Gruesome, gory, and good to scare the socks off people. It sounds like you made this poem sound more likely with specific details like a name called Demonshore. Sounds like there is more than an element of hatred, if someone could go from serving with chopping wood to dispatching teenagers so violently, whether they had wronged him or not. Character sounds like he has more than a touch of mental illness, too. Bet you do well with this club entry.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2019
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Gruesome, gory, and good to scare the socks off people. It sounds like you made this poem sound more likely with specific details like a name called Demonshore. Sounds like there is more than an element of hatred, if someone could go from serving with chopping wood to dispatching teenagers so violently, whether they had wronged him or not. Character sounds like he has more than a touch of mental illness, too. Bet you do well with this club entry.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2019
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Yes, he has plenty of issues for sure! Haha! And hopefully all those teenagers will now stay off the streets late at night! :). Thanks for your awesome feedback!
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Well I would say that is one creepy campfire tale! One that would keep me up at night. Nothing worse than a crazy man with an axe. Well done. Super creepy. Rox
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2019
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Well I would say that is one creepy campfire tale! One that would keep me up at night. Nothing worse than a crazy man with an axe. Well done. Super creepy. Rox
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2019
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LoL! Well thank you so much! You only have to worry though if you?re a teenager running the streets late at night! Otherwise, he passes you by thank God! Haha! xoxo
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
You write such good poetry. This poem is rather suspenseful. I'm glad I don't live in this town....the teenagers would live in fear. These kind of poems reminds me of long ago Ed Gein. Remember him?
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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You write such good poetry. This poem is rather suspenseful. I'm glad I don't live in this town....the teenagers would live in fear. These kind of poems reminds me of long ago Ed Gein. Remember him?
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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Oh yes, a very terrible man he was! Thank you for your compliment on my writing! It is truly cherished. xoxo
Comment from Susan X Smith
This is a spooky and horrifying tale. Yet it remained in good taste and was interesting through til the end. The picture you chose is quite scary also. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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This is a spooky and horrifying tale. Yet it remained in good taste and was interesting through til the end. The picture you chose is quite scary also. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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Thank you! I?m glad you appreciated that I didn?t use a lot of gory kinds of details! I think less is more sometimes! Appreciate you stop to read! xoxo
Comment from lyenochka
Well that's pretty horror-like. I half expected some kind of moral to the story like, "and that's you should never tease and taunt a man with an ax or anyone else." But his reaction was rather extreme. Good job with the well versed storytelling.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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Well that's pretty horror-like. I half expected some kind of moral to the story like, "and that's you should never tease and taunt a man with an ax or anyone else." But his reaction was rather extreme. Good job with the well versed storytelling.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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Moral is stay off the street at night if your a teenager! Haha! That ought to keep them at home where they belong! LoL! Thanks for reading, and I greatly appreciate your comment! xoxo
Comment from judiverse
This is chilling. Your poem flows very smoothly. The axeman really took his anger at teens to extreme. He'd rid one town of the teens and then move on to another town. Here's hoping he will be stopped. This certainly is spooky, and it would make great Halloween material. Presented effectively to highlight the terror. judi
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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This is chilling. Your poem flows very smoothly. The axeman really took his anger at teens to extreme. He'd rid one town of the teens and then move on to another town. Here's hoping he will be stopped. This certainly is spooky, and it would make great Halloween material. Presented effectively to highlight the terror. judi
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much! It was suggested by another I change the black background to gray but it just didn?t give it the same impact! Much scarier with black and red! LoL! I hope he gets caught one day too!!! Haha! Thanks for your awesome comment! xoxo
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You're very welcome. Great for Halloween time. judi
Comment from Ricky1024
This is a "Spooky Campfire tales Writing
Club Entry.
It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar issues as well.
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Adjective Content and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
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Good luck with the challenge!
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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This is a "Spooky Campfire tales Writing
Club Entry.
It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar issues as well.
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Adjective Content and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
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Good luck with the challenge!
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much! I never saw myself doing horror, but I think I kind of like it! LoL! Appreciate your supportive review! xoxo
Comment from Gloria ....
Aha! Well this is great Diana. The premiere post for your Horror Club? This axe killer sounds like one horrible creature and you have told us all about it in a finely written poem.
Now I will think of one too. :)) Great to see a horror club.
Gloria
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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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Aha! Well this is great Diana. The premiere post for your Horror Club? This axe killer sounds like one horrible creature and you have told us all about it in a finely written poem.
Now I will think of one too. :)) Great to see a horror club.
Gloria
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Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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Thanks! So much fun!!! Can?t wait to see yours!! xoxo
Comment from Mistydawn
This is a wonderful horror poem. Very well-written, interesting it has a nice even flow and rhymes well. Your great word choice had me on the edge of my seat. The plot seemed very realistic, great job, good luck with your contest.
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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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This is a wonderful horror poem. Very well-written, interesting it has a nice even flow and rhymes well. Your great word choice had me on the edge of my seat. The plot seemed very realistic, great job, good luck with your contest.
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Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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Awesome! Thanks so much!! So glad you enjoyed!! xoxo
