Circles
chasing the circles27 total reviews
Comment from Kathleen S.
How fun. I love how you ended your poem. I love the picture you've chosen as well, but you also could of chosen a dog chasing it's own tail and that would of made me laugh. I sometimes feel exactly what you wrote. I can tired of going in circles. :)
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
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How fun. I love how you ended your poem. I love the picture you've chosen as well, but you also could of chosen a dog chasing it's own tail and that would of made me laugh. I sometimes feel exactly what you wrote. I can tired of going in circles. :)
Comment Written 26-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind words
Comment from Ogden
An exercise in stream of consciousness, Iza? Here are a few leftovers, for a possible continuation - astound, brown, clown, crowd, down, expound, found, frowned, mound, plowed, confound renowned, town, wound.
(I had a little extra time to kill, so I thought I'd help out. And I can use the 82 cents. Business is slow.)
;)
Don
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
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An exercise in stream of consciousness, Iza? Here are a few leftovers, for a possible continuation - astound, brown, clown, crowd, down, expound, found, frowned, mound, plowed, confound renowned, town, wound.
(I had a little extra time to kill, so I thought I'd help out. And I can use the 82 cents. Business is slow.)
;)
Don
Comment Written 26-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your kind words, hope the business will keep up soon😉
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You're very welcome, Iza.
Comment from Gypsymooncat
I really enjoyed this poem until I got to the last stanza, hence the four rating. I don't understand the last line at all, and it seemed to detract from the rest of the poem, which was excellent in my view. "Breathing of hound"...I honestly don't get how it fits in to the rest of the work really. Maybe I'm a bit dense, but I wanted to point this out! I hope I have not been offensive here either; I'm just being honest with what I thought.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
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I really enjoyed this poem until I got to the last stanza, hence the four rating. I don't understand the last line at all, and it seemed to detract from the rest of the poem, which was excellent in my view. "Breathing of hound"...I honestly don't get how it fits in to the rest of the work really. Maybe I'm a bit dense, but I wanted to point this out! I hope I have not been offensive here either; I'm just being honest with what I thought.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind words
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good choice of artwork, Iza.
-I like your loop poem, too.
-I find it very creative with
the theme of "running in circles."
-Sometimes, it seems days
can be like that:
"Circles are running around"
-I like the concluding verse, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2019
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-Good choice of artwork, Iza.
-I like your loop poem, too.
-I find it very creative with
the theme of "running in circles."
-Sometimes, it seems days
can be like that:
"Circles are running around"
-I like the concluding verse, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2019
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Pam thank you so much for your encouragements and beautiful review.
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You are very welcome, Iza.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written loop poem about the circle of life that seems not to end completely as soon as the first one disappears the next one takes his place.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2019
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A very well-written loop poem about the circle of life that seems not to end completely as soon as the first one disappears the next one takes his place.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind comments
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You need to take out the (MY) in your fourth line to make the loop work here Iza, I wish you luck with it, loops are hard to write because you are constantly forced to used the same end rhyme, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2019
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You need to take out the (MY) in your fourth line to make the loop work here Iza, I wish you luck with it, loops are hard to write because you are constantly forced to used the same end rhyme, love Dolly x
Comment Written 25-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind review and suggestions
Comment from BeasPeas
Your Circles loop poem gives food for thought. It takes the reader on a nice word journey. Image corresponds well with your theme. Good luck in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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Your Circles loop poem gives food for thought. It takes the reader on a nice word journey. Image corresponds well with your theme. Good luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 24-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind review
Comment from Gail Denham
Interesting writing on this prompt - often, as a mother and working part time, I felt I was running in circles - big circles - and then I'd forget why I was running and where.
That's what your poem made me think of.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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Interesting writing on this prompt - often, as a mother and working part time, I felt I was running in circles - big circles - and then I'd forget why I was running and where.
That's what your poem made me think of.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much for taking a chance on this piece:) this is how I feel all the time:)
Comment from papa55mike
What a well-written little poem and I love the picture. It illustrates your point perfectly. It seems like I'm chasing circles, too.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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What a well-written little poem and I love the picture. It illustrates your point perfectly. It seems like I'm chasing circles, too.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 24-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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Thank You:)kindly
Comment from Aussie
No, not a silly poem at all. I liked it because in many ways it is true. People that annoy us cause ripples on our peaceful surface. From a tiny comment comes rippling songs of unrest, just life the surface of our lives. You caught my interest because your poem is different, interesting and I loved it.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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No, not a silly poem at all. I liked it because in many ways it is true. People that annoy us cause ripples on our peaceful surface. From a tiny comment comes rippling songs of unrest, just life the surface of our lives. You caught my interest because your poem is different, interesting and I loved it.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much for your deep review, it brought more meaning to the poem:)
