Haiku : tiny buds burst forth
Haiku contest entry17 total reviews
Comment from Susan Larson
I know it's just me and my off the wall view of the world, but I don't see this haiku being about change as much as I see it being about tradition, continuity and cycles of life. Where is the change?
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
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I know it's just me and my off the wall view of the world, but I don't see this haiku being about change as much as I see it being about tradition, continuity and cycles of life. Where is the change?
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
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Hi Susan. Thanks but I think Spring is truly about change in many ways hence the seasonal reference and Satori. Appreciate your review Cheers Christine
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Yes, change from season to season, but I still love counting on nature?s tradition that every year Spring will come, bringing with it the same joy. I do love your poem.
Comment from Darlene Franklin
I love how we get to enjoy contrasting seasons on this website. As we gear up for fall, you're relishing spring, and reminding us it will come again. And vice versa. Thank you for this haiku.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
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I love how we get to enjoy contrasting seasons on this website. As we gear up for fall, you're relishing spring, and reminding us it will come again. And vice versa. Thank you for this haiku.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
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Hi Darlene, Thanks for reading my Haiku and yes Spring has sprung here so Summer to follow and warm weather I love these seasons Cheers And keep warm Christine
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You're welcome, Christine.
Comment from DonandVicki
A very engaging haiku that visually brings forth images of spring time. The photograph complements your poem but the poem stands by itself. A lovely Haiku.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
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A very engaging haiku that visually brings forth images of spring time. The photograph complements your poem but the poem stands by itself. A lovely Haiku.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2019
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Hi DonandVicki Thanks for your lovely review and hope my Haiku engages the judges LOL Cheers Christine
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements nicely as you conform to the line and syllable count restrictions of the form. Suggestions listed below:
Title should be haiku (tiny buds burst forth). The first two lines are interconnected loosely, but the use of personification is taboo in haiku. The satori is quite clever and profound. The kigo is nicely implied by the imagery of new blooms. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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This meets the contest requirements nicely as you conform to the line and syllable count restrictions of the form. Suggestions listed below:
Title should be haiku (tiny buds burst forth). The first two lines are interconnected loosely, but the use of personification is taboo in haiku. The satori is quite clever and profound. The kigo is nicely implied by the imagery of new blooms. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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Hi Monica Thank you for your review snd advice Have made a small change so hopefully this meets requirements I wanted to use the word encouraging but know the use of ing ending are discouraged in Haiku
ManyCheers Chris
Comment from lyenochka
Good to see you back, Christine! I like your haiku as it shows me the changes that are coming your way! I also see in it, an encouragement to humans to be like those buds and encourage each other to create change!
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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Good to see you back, Christine! I like your haiku as it shows me the changes that are coming your way! I also see in it, an encouragement to humans to be like those buds and encourage each other to create change!
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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Hi Helen Thank you, yes away for a while back to work and just busy but at last Spring has brought some nice warm weather and many buds bursting forth Cheers Chris
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Enjoy Spring over there!
Comment from moonsunrise
I enjoyed ready this lovely poem and really like the imagery you chose. I love how the tiny buds burst forth encouraging others to bloom while creating change. I think of how this relates to human beings doing the same to encourage each other as we journey through life.
Thank you very much for sharing.
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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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I enjoyed ready this lovely poem and really like the imagery you chose. I love how the tiny buds burst forth encouraging others to bloom while creating change. I think of how this relates to human beings doing the same to encourage each other as we journey through life.
Thank you very much for sharing.
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Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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Hi moonsunrise Thanks for your review and yes one could relate to the human changes also. Spring is always a delight Cheers Christine
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Cheers.
Comment from Mark D. R.
The possibilities of life are extended in your simple verse. You selected artwork that complements your short verse entry.
Nice overall presentation for this contest entry.
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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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The possibilities of life are extended in your simple verse. You selected artwork that complements your short verse entry.
Nice overall presentation for this contest entry.
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Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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Hi Mark Thanks for your review I do appreciate your kind words for my Haiku Cheers Christine
