Driven By A Dream
A woman waiting on love...16 total reviews
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
No doubt there are many like her, driven by a dream from day to day and surviving each day with the thread of loneliness wrapped around their heart. But, as long as there is a dream, there is hope and the mystery of the future draws us forward. The poem is meant to elicit an empathy for this sad existence and it does so in a very flowing and kindly manner.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2019
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No doubt there are many like her, driven by a dream from day to day and surviving each day with the thread of loneliness wrapped around their heart. But, as long as there is a dream, there is hope and the mystery of the future draws us forward. The poem is meant to elicit an empathy for this sad existence and it does so in a very flowing and kindly manner.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2019
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I greatly appreciate you reading and leaving such a beautiful comment! I wish I still had a reviewer nomination to give, but this newbie here used up what they gave me already!
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements splendidly as you do tell a complete story in verse. The meter and rhyme are spot on throughout making the read fluid and rhythmic. I think opening and closing with the same stanza was wise for it brings a solemn closure evoking a feeling of no change but maintaining hope just the same. Good luck in the judging and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2019
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This meets the contest requirements splendidly as you do tell a complete story in verse. The meter and rhyme are spot on throughout making the read fluid and rhythmic. I think opening and closing with the same stanza was wise for it brings a solemn closure evoking a feeling of no change but maintaining hope just the same. Good luck in the judging and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much. Ending how it opened just seem like a natural fit and I?m so happy you liked it!
Comment from jlsavell
Diana, I am giving you six stars. You deserve it. I have read this twice. It's simply beautiful and it is wonderfully fluid upon reciting.
Now you go take on the day!
Jimi
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Diana, I am giving you six stars. You deserve it. I have read this twice. It's simply beautiful and it is wonderfully fluid upon reciting.
Now you go take on the day!
Jimi
Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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I am humbled, Jimi! You?re obviously a warm and caring soul! I wish I had friends close to me that showed such kindness as you :) hugs!!!!!
Comment from Ronni
A most haunting dream on a lonely quest, having droned and dragged
into perpetual ritual of futile anticipation; waiting for love to find and
come to her. Sometimes such a fairy tale like event may happen, but
not often. Her torment only multiplies, the oftener and longer she
waits for such a magical, mythical love to come. She truly is 'driven'
to this dream's void and, described most eerily in 4th phrase.
Your imagery and compelling scenario most awesome indeed!
Best wishes, Ronni
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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A most haunting dream on a lonely quest, having droned and dragged
into perpetual ritual of futile anticipation; waiting for love to find and
come to her. Sometimes such a fairy tale like event may happen, but
not often. Her torment only multiplies, the oftener and longer she
waits for such a magical, mythical love to come. She truly is 'driven'
to this dream's void and, described most eerily in 4th phrase.
Your imagery and compelling scenario most awesome indeed!
Best wishes, Ronni
Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Ronni, I admire how you take so much time to comment. You express your compliments so beautifully! You effort is greatly appreciated :)
Comment from Brian Taylor1
Good write. A package poem from the picture{which could have a nice bottle next to her, ha ha} to the words. I like how you started and finished with the same lines to add to her mystery and questioning of her empty heart then answering it with one word, gin sandwiched in the middle. The ongoing cycle of love the nights{drink} hate the mornings{hangover] seems to create such a confusion that her only way out is to dream about a lover to save her from her other half, the drinker within. Very enjoyable. Keep writin
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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Good write. A package poem from the picture{which could have a nice bottle next to her, ha ha} to the words. I like how you started and finished with the same lines to add to her mystery and questioning of her empty heart then answering it with one word, gin sandwiched in the middle. The ongoing cycle of love the nights{drink} hate the mornings{hangover] seems to create such a confusion that her only way out is to dream about a lover to save her from her other half, the drinker within. Very enjoyable. Keep writin
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Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much for reviewing and commenting! The feedback means so much to me! And I guess I?m going to have to find me a photoshop program so I can add the bottle of Gin! Hahaha!!!
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
This is very sad, I do hope she finds love one day. =} This is very well done, great rhyme and meter. I have one suggestion, make the print bigger. There are many on here who have eyesight problems. I try to always make my print bigger for them. Well done and I hope you do well in the contest.
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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2019
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This is very sad, I do hope she finds love one day. =} This is very well done, great rhyme and meter. I have one suggestion, make the print bigger. There are many on here who have eyesight problems. I try to always make my print bigger for them. Well done and I hope you do well in the contest.
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Comment Written 05-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2019
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Thank you and yes, i?ll do that right now. It is hard to judge the size on an iphone. I appreciate your letting me know :). Blessings!
